龘ノ宮煕道 (cheekytwat96) — 付けたレビュー

元の翻訳
Hello, it has been for a while since I wrote you last time.
In fact, I was hospitalized for a surgery by very recently...it's getting better, so I have been discharged a few days ago.
I want to go back to work soon (smile) ○○, your work must be so hard so please take it easy and take care of yourself!

I would like to start the work of Raptor body within this month.
My wife showed me a picture of racing on Facebook when I was in the hospital so it was so encouraging for me~
Wish you the best with your race!!!

修正後
Hello, it has been for a while since I wrote to you last time.
In fact, I was hospitalized for a surgery until very recently...it's getting better, so I have been discharged a few days ago.
I want to go back to work soon (smile) ○○, your work must be so hard so please take it easy and take care of yourself!

I would like to start my work on the Raptor body during this month.
My wife showed me a picture of you racing on Facebook when I was in the hospital so it was so encouraging for me~
Wish you the best with your race!!!

元の翻訳
To make this item a major success, I will do marketing focusing on mainly two points below. I wil make the songs which are currently successful mainly in Asia a major success in Japan as well by using various media. Also I will upload the video with subtitles of the lyrics on youtube, etc. so that Japanese people will understand the meaning of the lyrics which are important element of the works. I will interview him focusing on his unique story that he started as a street player, made current success without any support from labels and that he is still playing on street, and will convey his attractions in the magazines.

修正後
To make this item a major success, I will mainly focus on the following two points in terms of marketing. Firstly, I am considering the use of various media in order to induce the success of the songs which are mainly popular in Asia at the moment. Secondly, I will upload the videos with subtitles of the lyrics on youtube for instance. so that the Japanese people will understand the meaning of the lyrics which I reckon to be a crucial element of each song. Furthermore, I will arrange an interview with him for an article on a magazine so that we will be able to express his appealing talent to the most, such talent which enabled him to cause so much success starting off from one of many street performers without any support or aid whatsoever from particular labels, along with his unique story, still performing on the streets.