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元の翻訳
Thankful to them, I walked into the site.

How solemn the site looked!

The four girls were also all kind and stylish.

They all helped me here and there as I had no experience.

Thanks to them "C's " booth was completed. That was the first substantial shop for the virtual store.

I regret I did not shoot it.

Right after the booth was ready, the VIP clients came in.

The clients were all so pretty that I was looking at them adoring while I was preparing for the show.

The model girls were prettier than I expected, and I was so excited even before they get dressed with our costumes.

They screamed "kawaii!" at the video I showed them for the coordinates. For me, they that screamed "kawaii" were "kawaii"!

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As being amazed, I walked into the site.

How solemn the site looked!

The four girls, who came to the booth as volunteers, were also all kind and stylish.

They all helped me here and there since I had no experience.

Thanks to them "C's " booth was completed. That was the first substantial shop for the virtual store.

I regret I did not shoot any photos of it.

Right after the booth was ready, the VIP clients came in.

They were all so pretty that I couldn't take my eyes off while I was preparing for the show.

The model girls were prettier than I expected, so I was so excited even before they put our costumes on.

They squealed "kawaii(cute)!" at the pictures of the coordinates that I showed them. To me, THEY saying "kawaii" were "kawaii"!

元の翻訳
I visited London to participate in the event "B" hosted by "A".

On the day before the show, I shoot pictures around the decorations and settings at the site in the hotel for our final confirmation.

The Japan team discussed to finally determine what we were going to show, in view of the total balance instead of focusing on just single style.

On the day of the show:

The last thing you would expect to happen when you carry everything on you did happen. The road in the neighbor of the venue was under construction, and I was dropped from the taxi just a few meters away from the entrance.

I had luggages far more than my both hand could handle just when a few pretty girls who were concerned with the event walked by and helped me out.

You girls were so sweet.↵

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I visited London to participate in the event "B" hosted by "A".

On the day before the show, I shot many pictures of dresses coordinated for the show at the hotel for our final confirmation.

We discussed with a team in Japan to finally determine what we were going to put on models for the show, in view of the total balance instead of focusing on just single style.

On the day of the show:

The last thing you would expect to happen as you carry everything by yourself actually did happen. The road nearby the venue was under construction, and I was dropped from the taxi just a few meters away from the entrance.

I had luggages far more than my both hands could handle and was wondering what to do. Then, a few pretty girls related to the event just walked by and helped me out.

I thought they were so sweet.

元の翻訳
In the pre-war Japan, electrical appliances were mostly irons and radios. Penetrations of vacuum cleaners and refrigerators, which help ease household labors, were very low, especially in comparison to overseas countries. Also automobile ownership was extreamly rare, and even in 1940's it only reached 0.07% of the population. The thermal demand in the urban regions were from 40% to 70% of the heaters, 15% to 35% of cooking, 15% to 30% of heating up the water in the bath tabs. According to a study by Yamaguchi Prefectural Agriculture Laboratory, the same in the rurals were 33%, 12%, and 55%, respectively. Trees used for the firewood and charcole were broad-leaf ones among quercus, oak and castanopsis as those were superior in producing heats and with higher burning rates.

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In the pre-war Japan, home appliances were mostly irons and radios. Penetration of vacuum cleaners and refrigerators, which help ease household labors, was very low, especially in comparison to overseas countries. Automobile ownership was also extremely rare, and even in 1940's it only reached 0.07% of the population. The thermal demand in the urban regions consisted of from 40% to 70% for heaters, from 15% to 35% for cooking, and from 15% to 30% for heating up the water in the bath tabs. According to a study conducted by Yamaguchi Prefectural Agriculture Laboratory, the same in the rurals were 33%, 12%, and 55%, respectively. Trees used for the firewood and charcole were broad-leaf ones among quercus, oak and castanopsis as those were superior in producing heats and with higher burning rates.

元の翻訳
What does or does not the product do?
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What is the reason of the failure?
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Please let me know the details.
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And please tell your local EMS service that you reject the item for failure.
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Then the item will be returned to us without any shipping charge to you.
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I have requested an investigation on this matter to EMS Japan.
Also I have informed your local EMS service about that.
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The refund will include $310 for the product, $60 for shipping plus $60 for customs, totaling $430.
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I will issue the refund as soon as the item arrives.
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I deeply apologize for the inconveniences this has caused you.

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What does or does not the product do?
What is the cause of the failure?
Please let me know the details.
And please tell your local EMS service that you refuse to accept the item for failure.
Then the item will be returned to us without any shipping charge to you.
I have requested that EMS Japan investigate this matter.
Also I have informed your local EMS service about that.
The refund will include $310 for the product, $60 for shipping plus $60 for customs, totaling $430.
I will issue the refund as soon as the item arrives.
I deeply apologize for the inconvenience this has caused you.

元の翻訳
I have received a A I ordered from you.
When I tried to use it, the display did not light with the power turned on.
This should be an initial defect.
I am going to return this item, so please refund the purchase price.
Also, please let me know where I should send it, too.
Thank you for your attention.

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I have received the A I ordered from you.
When I tried to use it, the display did not light with the power turned on.
It is defected.
I am going to return this item, so please refund me the purchase price.
Also, please let me know where I should send it.
Thank you for your attention.

元の翻訳
We ordered A because we sold out the last set left with us.

The A sold to a customer has been found to have a defect.
The jig connecting part was crashed and the customer could not connect the part.
Please refer to the attached photo for the status of the defect.

We need a replacement of the damaged part.
We plan to send the customer only the replacement for the damaged part of the A he ordered.

Do you think it is possible for me to do the replacement of the part?
I also would request a special tool for the repair to be included, if any.

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We ordered A because we sold out of the last set left with us.

The A sold to the customer has been found to have a defect.
The jib connecting part was smashed and the customer could not connect the part.
Please refer to the attached photo for the status of the defect.

We need a replacement of the damaged part.
We plan to send the customer only the replacement for the damaged part of the A he ordered.

Do you think it is possible for me to replace the part?
I also would request a special tool for the repair to be included, if any.

元の翻訳
I directly inquired with them and the following is their answer:

I assume this was either of the cases where MyUS staff threw the brackets away, or the brackets were lost in transit to Japan.
I assume like this because the first package contained only a bumper and the wrapping was badly torn when I received it.
Neither the first or the second package contained any bracket.

(訳注：　最初の文章、直接問い合わせた相手がMyUSなら、I directly inquired with MyUS としてください。them の代わりに。MyUSでないなら、その会社名を入れてください）

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I directly inquired with them and the following is their answer:

I assume this was either MyUS staff had thrown the brackets away, or the brackets were lost in transit to Japan.
I assume like this because the first package contained only a bumper and the wrapping was badly torn when I received it.
Neither the first or the second package contained any bracket.

(訳注：　最初の文章、直接問い合わせた相手がMyUSなら、I directly inquired with MyUS としてください。them の代わりに。MyUSでないなら、その会社名を入れてください）

元の翻訳
By doing so, more people can image the sizes of the products and there will be more chances of their purchases.

2. Many buyers use key words to search for products on eBay. Include as many key words as possible in the titles to make our products easier to be found. In order to do so, copy the product titles from the products that have sold well rather than from those in Amazon, and add "Japan", "free shipping" and the like at the end.

So, use terapeak to search the relevant products they have sold, and list them on eBay.

Must select "Japan" from this menu.

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By doing so, more people can imagine the sizes of the products and they will more likely make purchases.

2. Many buyers use keywords to search for products on eBay. Include as many keywords as possible in the titles to make our products easier to be found. In order to do so, copy the product titles from the products that have sold well rather than copying from those in Amazon, and add "Japan", "free shipping" and the like at the end.

So, use terapeak to search for the relevant products they have sold and list them on eBay.

Be sure to select "Japan" from this menu.

元の翻訳
Thank you very much for working only for me fultime.
You said you were going to list 50 items a day on eBay, but you do not need to haste. Just start with focusing on making a good product page that would not need revision at my end.

Also, making a product page from where products sell well will result in an increased revenue for you as you will receive a bonus for that.

What does a product page from where products sell well look like?

I have two things for you to follow:
1. Show the sizes in both centimeters and inches: We list items on eBay US, where they use inches (in) for measurements. But in most other countries, they use centimeters (cm).

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Thank you very much for working only for me fulltime.
You said you were going to list 50 items a day on eBay, but you do not need to haste. Just start with focusing on making a good product page that would not need revision on my end.

Also, making a product page where products sell well will result in an increased revenue for you as you will receive a bonus for that.

What does a product page where products sell well look like?

I have two things for you to follow:
1. Show the sizes in both centimeters and inches: We list items on eBay US, where they use inches (in) for measurements. But in most other countries, they use centimeters (cm).

元の翻訳
igi2755
商品をわざわざ日本からイギリスまでお送りいただいてありがとうございます。いつごろ到着するかお分かりになりますでしょうか？一週間後の、息子の誕生日用に買ったものなものですから。

igi2700
ナミノリさんこんにちは
いただいた追跡番号が使えないのですが。ｘｘｘと入力したのですが、「無効」とのことです。

igi9113
私の商品がイギリスの税関で止まっていることはわかりました。手数料を払ったのですが、配達されないのです。配送会社のParcel Forceに電話したところ、もう差出人（あなた）に返送したと言うのです。

商品がそちらに戻ったら、支払い全額を私のクレジットカードに戻して下さる、と確認してください。

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igi2755
商品をわざわざ日本からイギリスまでお送りいただいてありがとうございます。いつごろ到着するかお分かりになりますでしょうか？一週間後の、息子の誕生日用に買った（ものなも）ので（すから）。

igi2700
ナミノリさんこんにちは
いただいた追跡番号が使えません［*「のですが」を繰り返すとやや冗長になります］。ｘｘｘと入力したのですが、「無効」とのことです。

igi9113
私の商品がイギリスの税関で止められていたことはわかりました。手数料［or（課）税金］を（支）払ったのですが、配達されませんでした。配送会社のParcel Forceに電話したところ、もう差出人（あなた）に返送したと言うのです。

商品がそちらに戻った場合に、引き落としを行った私のクレジットカードへの全額返金を確約して［or承認して］ください。

元の翻訳
これらは25ドルでお分けできます。あとはスプレーするだけなので、それが済んだらスキャンして画像をお送りできます。55ドル以上で売れると思いますよ（自分の店で出すならそうします）。また、紙の作品なので、送料も35ドル程度です。いっぺんにたくさん作れるので、送るときもまとめて送れます。自分が一回の出品に5点とか10点とかまとめて出せば、あなたへは一点当たりの価格も送料も下げることができるでしょう。
あなたが卸価格レベルで入手できるように、工夫しましょう。

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これらは25ドルでお分けできます。あとはスプレーするだけなので、それが済んだらスキャンして画像をお送りできます。55ドル以上で売れると思いますよ（自分の店で出すならそうします）。また、紙の作品なので、送料も35ドル程度です。一度にたくさん作れるので、送るときもまとめて送れます。自分が一回の出品に5点とか10点とかまとめて出せば、あなたへは一点当たりの価格も送料も下げることができるでしょう。
あなたが卸価格レベルで入手できるように、工夫しましょう。

元の翻訳
あまりうまく行っていないとは、困りましたね。一緒にがんばって盛り上げましょうよ。あなたのご商売に欲しい作品は他にありませんか？あなたのお客様はどんな作品がお好みですか？キャンバスの作品で、お客様が好みそうなものはありますか？

これみたいな"URL"様作品を、キャンバスに複製できたらどうですか？そちらに提示されている値段で売っていただいて結構ですし、私からあなたへは＄71.50でお分けします。そうすれば、あなたのお客様は大きさや素材にバラエティがもてるでしょう。これは24" x 18" x 7/8" に仕上がります。もし、私のほうでスキャンしたり写真撮ったり、別々に出品する必要がなければ、これに関してはそれほど高い値段でなくても大丈夫です。

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あまりうまく行っていないとは、困りましたね。一緒にがんばって盛り上げましょうよ。あなたのご商売に欲しい作品は他にありませんか？あなたのお客様はどんな作品がお好みですか？キャンバスの作品で、お客様が好みそうなものはありますか？

これみたいな"URL"の様な作品を、キャンバスに複製できますよ？そちらに提示されている値段で売っていただいて結構ですし、私からあなたへは＄71.50でお分けします。そうすれば、あなたのお客様は大きさや素材にバラエティがもてるでしょう。これは24" x 18" x 7/8" に仕上がります。もし、私のほうでスキャンしたり写真撮ったり、別々に出品する必要がなければ、これに関してはそれほど高い値段でなくても大丈夫です。

元の翻訳
The market will be in Japan.

What I have in mind is:

Exhibition will garner many inquiries, but with the quantity of the product being rather small, I think it will be sold at not-large fashionable and select furniture stores in Tokyo, in small quantities.

Large quantities should suit for web-sales, but you cannot explain the product in depth by this method, so I do not think web-sales is not for this product.

If you grant the exclusive sales right to us, we will comply with your request as to what sales method you would prefer.

Thank you for your consideration.

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The market will be in Japan.

What I have in mind is:

Exhibition will garner many inquiries, but with the quantity of the product being rather small, I think it will be sold at not-large fashionable and selective furniture stores in Tokyo, in small quantities.

Large quantities should suit for online sales, but you cannot explain the product in depth by this method, so I do not think online sales is not for this product.

If you grant the exclusive sales right to us, we will comply with your request as to what sales method you would prefer.

Thank you for your consideration.

元の翻訳
I think I will use the product more than 6 months, but I have ordered rather a small amount to see if it goes well with my constitution. If it proves OK without any symptom of irritation, I will buy more later.

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I think I will use the product for more than 6 months, but I have ordered rather a small amount to see if it goes well with my constitution. If it proves OK without any symptom of irritation, I will buy more later.