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元の翻訳
Hello.

The item I sent back was returned today because your company refused to accept it.
Do you really accept returns?
I contacted the post office many times regarding this issue in order to assess the situation.
My conclusion is that you do not intend to accept the item.

If you do intend to accept the item and issue a refund, please contact me with a way of proceeding to properly address this issue.
If you do not intend to accept the item, I will protect myself by filing a claim.

修正後
Hello.

The item I sent back was returned today because your company refused to accept it.
Do you really intend to accept it?
I contacted the post office many times regarding this issue in order to assess the situation.
My conclusion is that you do not intend to accept the item.

If you do intend to accept the item and issue a refund, please contact me with a way of proceeding to properly address this issue.
If you do not intend to accept the item, I will protect myself by filing a claim.

元の翻訳
Hello.

The item I sent back was returned today because your company refused to accept it.
Do you really accept returns?
I contacted the post office many times regarding this issue in order to assess the situation.
My conclusion is that you do not intend to accept the item.

If you do intend to accept the item and issue a refund, please contact me with a way of proceeding to properly address this issue.
If you do not intend to accept the item, I will protect myself by filing a claim.

修正後
Hello.

The item I sent back was returned today because your company refused to accept it.
Do you really intend to accept returns?
I contacted the post office many times regarding this issue in order to assess the situation.
My conclusion is that you do not intend to accept the item.

If you do intend to accept the item and issue a refund, please contact me with a way of proceeding to properly address this issue.
If you do not intend to accept the item, I will protect myself by filing a claim.

元の翻訳
物々交換ができるかお伺いしたつもりでした。
私は、セットと同じ価値かそれ以上の価値のtransformersを持っています。
何か交換できるものはありませんか？
例えば私が持っているのは、
Transformers MasterforceのMIB God Bomber
Beast Wars NeoのMISB Black Big Convoy
BotconだけのSweeps set, BotconだけのSharkticons set
もし写真が必要であれば、送ります。

交換を検討して頂けると幸いです。
Transformersのようなアクションフィギュアに興味はありませんか？
私は、あなたが提示している値段と同等の価値があるものや、それ以上の価値のいくつかのレアな品物を持っています。
他に交換として受け入れて頂ける物があれば、それが何だか教えて下さい。
また、交換を検討して頂けない場合、割引は可能でしょうか？

修正後
物々交換ができるかお伺いしたつもりでした。
私は、セットと同じ価値かそれ以上の価値のtransformersを持っています。
何か交換できるものはありませんか？
例えば私が持っているのは、
Transformers MasterforceのMIB God Bomber
Beast Wars NeoのMISB Black Big Convoy
Botcon限定のSweeps set, Botcon限定のSharkticons set
もし写真が必要であれば、送ります。

交換を検討して頂けると幸いです。
Transformersのようなアクションフィギュアに興味はありませんか？
私は、あなたが提示している値段と同等の価値があるものや、それ以上の価値のいくつかのレアな品物を持っています。
他に交換として受け入れて頂ける物があれば、教えて下さい。
また、交換を検討して頂けない場合、割引は可能でしょうか？

元の翻訳
こんにちは、

商品を商品込みで$140以下で申請していただけますか？
税関で問題になりたくないので。

ありがとうございます。

tania

修正後
こんにちは

商品を送料込みで$140未満で申請していただけますか？
税関でモメたくないので。

よろしくお願いします。

tania

元の翻訳
I am very pleased the the luca that you made. The hair color, eye color, hair style, length of hair, volume of hair, pink outfit, it's all perfect. I would like you to make the same doll. I would like to bypass eBay, so how about AUS$640 with shipping cost to Japan included? (Please send pictured showing the completed products as always) Please! I am waiting for a positive response.

修正後
I am very pleased the the luca that you made. The hair color, eye color, hair style, length of hair, volume of hair, pink outfit, it's all perfect. I would like you to make the same doll. I would like to bypass eBay, so how about AUS$640 with shipping cost to Japan included? (Please send pictured showing the completed products as always) Please! I am waiting for a positive response. ↵
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I am very pleased the the luca that you made. ↵
は　I am pleased では目的語を取ることができませんから、am pleased withと with　が必要です。↵
, pink outfit, it's all perfect.　には接続詞がありません。だから, pink outfit; it's all perfect. とセミコロンでつなぐか、, pink outfit, so it's all perfect. のようにso などの接続詞が必要です。↵
（Please send pictured showing the completed products as always) ↵
pictured は名詞にならないと思います。picture　あるいは　photo ですか。↵
この場合、冠詞が必要です。その写真は限定されていますから、the picture としなければならないのでは？（a pictureでもいいかもしれませんが限定という意味で。これはごちゃごちゃいいすぎですが）↵
completed products 今は一つの人形のことを言っているのですから↵
completed product　と単数ではないでしょうか。↵
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重箱のすみをつついているようで、すみませんが。↵
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元の翻訳
I'm going to let you know about my arrival schedule. I'm leaving from France and arrive in Germany at 12 o'clock. I'll get to your house between 9 and 10 PM at the earliest, but would I still be able to check in? I'm sorry to arrive so late.
I checked the address on the website, but does the building have a name? If a passcode is required at the entrance, please let me know.
My contact information is below. I'm also thinking about using a SIM card for Wifi; do you have a recommendation for a carrier?
I'm looking forward to visiting France.

修正後
I'm going to let you know about my arrival schedule. I'm leaving France and arrive in Germany at 12 o'clock. I'll get to your house between 9 and 10 PM at the earliest, but would I still be able to check in? I'm sorry to arrive so late.
I checked the address on the website, but does the building have a name? If a passcode is required at the entrance, please let me know.
My contact information is as below. I'm also thinking about using a SIM card for Wifi; do you have a recommendation for a carrier?
I'm looking forward to visiting France.