リシェル・ブリテン (rishellz) — 付けたレビュー

元の翻訳
Consequently, I was relieved that I received the answer that there was almost no problem.

Here, I used the software which are Amazon WorkSpaces and Sophos VPN Client.
By installing such software, I can work from other networks than our intranet.
The environment where I can work from home might come true in near future,

修正後
Consequently, I was relieved to receive a reply stating that there was almost no problem.

The software that I used here was Amazon WorkSpaces and Sophos VPN Client.
By installing such software, I can work from other networks outside of our intranet.
An environment where I can work from home may be possible in the near future.↵

元の翻訳
Hello. I am ○○.
I appreciate your support.

I placed an order for the collars of a dog to you the other day.
And I sent the money from Japan on February 6th.

I received the message that the items would be shipped on this Monday.
Have you shipped them already?
If yes, please let me know the tracking number.

A lot of customers are waiting for your dog's collars.
Thank you in advance.

修正後
Hello. I am ○○.
I appreciate your support.

I placed an order for some dog collars from your company the other day.
I sent the money from Japan on February 6th.

I received the message that the items would be shipped on this Monday.
Have you shipped them already?
If yes, please let me know the tracking number.

A lot of customers are waiting for your dog collars.
Thank you in advance.

元の翻訳
Please find the attached document which is completed.
I tried to fill them in as instructed, but please let me know if there are any leaks and mistakes.
Thank you in advance.

修正後
Please find the attached document which is completed.
I tried to fill it in as instructed, but please let me know if there are any mistakes or anything I have left out.
Thank you in advance.