スミス　マーク Mark Smith (ozsamurai_69) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
I have understood the content of the following.
Today I have requested the delivery agent to arrange delivery by the end of the week.
As the goods this time could not be sold as they were late.
If possible, can I ask for a discount with my next order please?

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I have understood the content of the following.
Could you request the delivery agent to send it air by by the end of the week?
As the goods this time could not be sold as they were late, we suffered loss.
If possible, can I ask for a discount with my next order please?

元の翻訳
I have understood the content of the following.
Today I have requested the delivery agent to arrange delivery by the end of the week.
As the goods this time could not be sold as they were late.
If possible, can I ask for a discount with my next order please?

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I have understood the content of the following.
Today I have requested the delivery agent to arrange delivery by the end of the week. ←　ご自分でもお気づきだと思いますが誤訳です。
As the goods this time could not be sold as they were late.　←　文章が途中で途切れています。
If possible, can I ask for a discount with my next order please?

元の翻訳
#will
Today the goods arrived in Japan. Thank you very much for sending the hat and the stickers. There are some things I would like to find out if possible in order to sell them. Are the hat and stickers available in the marketplace or are the limited edition items (TOUR ISSUE)? If the I would be really glad if there is a site of the maker for that information as well. Also, there was a FUJIKURA catalog included, I don't understand why. Can I order things from the catalog, is that what it is for?

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#will
Today the goods arrived in Japan. Thank you very much for sending the hats and the stickers. There are some things I would like to find out if possible in order to sell them. Are the hat and stickers available in the marketplace or are the limited edition items (TOUR ISSUE)? If the I would be really glad if there is a site of the maker for that information as well. Also, there was a FUJIKURA catalog included, I don't understand why. Can I order things from the catalog, is that what it is for?

元の翻訳
Sorry for contacting you so often.

The remittance information on the invoice I received below and the one in the mail I received previously do not match it seems.
Sorry for the trouble but, could you please re do the invoice and send it to me in an email attachment.
Again my apologies, payment will not be able to be made till the end of the month. I ask for your understanding in this matter.

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Sorry for contacting you so often.（誤訳：この場合に使う「度々の」はso oftenという意味ではありません。）

The remittance information（誤訳：原文には「振込先」とあります） on the invoice I received below（誤訳：以前＝belowではありません） and the one in the e-mail I received previously (誤訳：原文には「先日」とあります）do not match it seems.
Sorry for the trouble, but could you please re do（誤訳：原文には「差し替える」とあります） the invoice and send it to me in an email attachment.
Again my apologies, payment will be made at the end of next month（誤訳：原文では来月末日となっています）. I ask for your understanding in this matter.

元の翻訳
Have you ever been to Fushimi Inari Shrine?

Fushimi Inari Shrine in Kyoto is a popular spot. Winning first place as the "Most popular Japanese tourist attractions for foreigners in 2014" on TripAdvisor. Although there are many more historical shrines in Kyoto, it is still held as prestigious amongst them.

Beginning with photographs of the Senbon Tori (Torii Corridor), enter a totally different world from your everyday, mysterious breathtaking sights are no doubt the reason for it's popularity.

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Have you ever been to Fushimi Inari Shrine?

Fushimi Inari Shrine in Kyoto is a popular spot, winning first place as the "Most popular Japanese tourist attractions for foreigners in 2014" on TripAdvisor. Although there are many more historical shrines in Kyoto, it is still held as most prestigious amongst them.

Beginning with photographs of the Senbon Tori (Torii Corridor), enter a totally different world from your everyday. Mysterious, breathtaking sights are no doubt the reason for its popularity.

元の翻訳
#william
I was very relieved when I heard that you would be able to assist me.
As I have said, I would like an additional 20g X 2.
As soon as I have confirmed with the customer I will contact you.
I am awaiting a reply from BIG BERTHA.

#dave gruby
I am sorry I don not speak English, if possible could we please conduct our business via email.
I take care of many Japanese customers, so I can ask what they would like.

#will
I was sad to hear that they had sold out, not much that can be done about that.
The Loft will not make it in time so, if you get any in I would appreciate if you could contact me.

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#william
I was very relieved when I heard that you would be able to assist me.
As I have said, I would like an additional 20g X 2. ←　「パターの重量」の訳抜け
As soon as I have confirmed with the customer I will contact you.
I am awaiting a reply from BIG BERTHA.←　誤訳。BIG　BERTHAからの返信を待っているのではない。

#dave gruby
I am sorry but I do not speak English. If possible could we please conduct our business via e-mail.　←　原文に忠実に訳しましょう。
I take care of many Japanese customers, so I can ask what they would like.

#will
I was sad to hear that they have been disposed, not much that can be done about that. ←　誤訳。「売却」は「売り切れ」という意味ではないので、きちんと調べること。
The loft will not make it in time so, if you get any in I would appreciate if you could contact me. ←「ロフトは問いませんので」の部分が誤訳。「問いません」は「間に合いません」という意味ではない。

元の翻訳
Thank you for contacting us.
I have confirmed the content.

I am currently in a meeting with Ryo to discuss the alterations.
We will determine actions for the problematic points in this meeting.

Thank you.

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Thank you for contacting us.
I have confirmed the content.

I am currently working with Ryo on a meeting coordination.
We will resolve the current issues in this meeting.

Thank you.

元の翻訳
[INFO] Billboard Live Osaka 06-6342-7722
Details here → http://www.billboard-live.com/pg/shop/show/index.php?mode=detail1&event=9248&shop=2

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[INFO] Billboard-LIVE Osaka 06-6342-7722
Details here → http://www.billboard-live.com/pg/shop/show/index.php?mode=detail1&event=9248&shop=2

元の翻訳
The goods have arrived safely, thank you.

However, the price on the commercial Invoice that was attached at the time of shipping was incorrect.
I will upload the file, please check it.

Again, I have been asked by the Taiwan shipping PIC to ask you again to "Please make sure the commercial Invoice shows the correct price from now on please"

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The goods have arrived safely, thank you.

However, the price on the Commercial Invoice that was attached at the time of shipping was incorrect.
I will upload the file, please check it.

Also, please remind the Taiwanese shipping PIC to "enter the correct price on the Commercial Invoice."

元の翻訳
There are 2 files "141010_Sabroso_EN_subtitles_v2.txt" and "141010_Sabroso_EN_subtitles_DE_ES_FR_JP.txt", the source number on the file is only a little different, is the content identical?
Do these files need to be translated?
Are all the source texts comments from artists?
As I can not view the video, what king of expression would you like on the end
I ask for your assistance please.

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There are 2 files "141010_Sabroso_EN_subtitles_v2.txt" and "141010_Sabroso_EN_subtitles_DE_ES_FR_JP.txt", the source number on the file is only a little different, is the content identical?
Do these files need to be translated?
Are all the source texts comments from artists?
As I can not view the video, what kind of expression would you like on the end
I ask for your assistance please.

元の翻訳
I have asked Mr/Ms OO to make some progress on the visa before the 1st November.
In the previous conditions AA-BB contract was necessary so, if possible if you could assist with the progress of that it would be of great assistance.

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I have asked Mr./Ms. ●● to make some progress on the visa application by 1st November.
As a prerequisite, AAAAA-BBBB contract is necessary, so if possible, your prioritizing this task would be helpful.

元の翻訳
I have asked Mr/Ms OO to make some progress on the visa before the 1st November.
In the previous conditions AA-BB contract was necessary so, if possible if you could assist with the progress of that it would be of great assistance.

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I have asked Mr/Ms OO to make some progress on the visa application before the 1st of November.
In the precondition, the AAAA-BBBB contract was necessary. So if possible, it would be helpful if you could assist with the progress of that.

元の翻訳
This item is a Japanese item, the manual is in Japanese. It is a SEIKO radio clock it a model that can be exported to US, Germany and China.

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This item is made in Japan and its manual is in Japanese. It is a SEIKO radio clock model that can be exported to US, Germany and China.

元の翻訳
This item is a Japanese item, the manual is in Japanese. It is a SEIKO radio clock it a model that can be exported to US, Germany and China.

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This item is a Japanese product, the manual is in Japanese. It is a SEIKO radio clock. It is a model that can receive a signal in Japan, US, Germany and China.