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I want you to confirm whether have received or not.
I think you can understand if you see the email exchanges with erika.

Create the delivery setting immediately.
I will issue the documents with instructions included in Special Handling instruction and hope for your support also.

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I want you to confirm whether you have received or not.
I think you can understand if you see the email exchanges with erika.

I will create the delivery setting immediately.
I will issue the documents with instructions included in Special Handling instruction and I would be pleased if you

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1 week is the deadline to change the feedback from Neutral to Positive on eBay

I do apologize to you and I would like you to change the feedback until the deadline day

So, please return the product by air and I'll accept it. I'll pay full amount of the return shipping cost↵
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Or, I'll will present you $50 as an apology for this time

Otherwise, please let me know if there is a way of apology that you wish

The product was a used razor which already damaged, and I'm sorry because you are not satisfied with the product.↵

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1 week is the deadline to change the feedback from Neutral to Positive on eBay

I do apologize to you and I would like you to change the feedback until the deadline.

So, please return the product by air and I'll accept it. I'll pay full amount of the return shipping cost or I'll will present you $50 as an apology this time.

Otherwise, please let me know if you have another way you wish.

As I remember, the product sent to you was a used razor damaged somewhat; I'm sorry that you are not satisfied with the product.

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Yesterday, I purchased toilet brush, detergent and flushable towel.
During summer, the smell becomes easy to build up.
I already placed the deodorant spray and tank detergent, but I think the eradiction of the causes is needed.
I clean the mens and ladies toilet earlier, but it was quite dirty.

Next time, please clean the toilet by rotating basis. Mens toilet cleaned by men, ladies toilet cleaned by ladies.
Please discussed and decide the rotation order.
Later, I'll make something to do cleaning checking.

Each of everyone of you please do not neglected it, lets try to stay comfortable.

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Yesterday I purchased a toilet brush, detergent and flushable wipes.
In the summer it is easy for smell to accumulate.
I already used deodorant spray and cleaner for the water tank, but I think we need to get rid of the causes.
I cleaned the men's and women's toilets earlier, and they were very dirty.

Next time, please clean the toilet on a rotating basis; with men's toilets cleaned by men, women's toilets cleaned by women.
Let's discuss and decide on the order of rotation, etc.
Later, I'll make something for checking on the cleaning.

I ask that each of you not pretend to overlook things and remain comfortable in your work.

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I understand.
I will check what kind of things that it sells. I will inform you if have any progress.

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I understand.
I will check what kind of things they sell. I will inform you if I have any progress.

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3. Obtained the communication test and communication log by connecting JDC warehouse network to engineer PC
4. Communication situation will be monitor from head office to confirm no abnormality occured.
[Result（Summary）]
・It was recognized initial constant communication is unstable, but it is limited to self-proclaimed particular staff, it affect the entire staff once a week (recently once a month)
・This phenomenon was confirmed is caused by PC mulfunctions to particular staff, so it was decided to respond with a PC replacement first.

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3. Obtained the communication test and communication log by connecting JDC warehouse network to engineer PC
4. Communication situation will be monitor from head office to confirm no abnormality occured.
[Result（Summary）]
・It was recognized initial constant communication is unstable, but it is limited to self-proclaimed particular staff, it affect the entire staff once a week (recently once a month)
・This confirmed phenomenon was caused by PC mulfunctions to particular staff, so it was decided to respond with a PC replacement first.

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・No abnormal number was detected during communication test and from the log contents, and a equivalent communication bandwith (2Mbps) was made.
・When an abnormality occurs next time, it has been agreed to make a scheme to pursue the cause and make an action plan between the person in charge.

[Next Action]
1) Recent countermeasure (for particular user)
a) replace the PC and check the condition
2) Recent countermeasure (for all user)
a) When the copmmunication becoming slow, user need to inform below content to Mr Eric.
・target user (particular or all user)

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・No abnormal number was detected during communication test and from the log contents, and an equivalent communication bandwidth (2Mbps) was made.
・When an abnormality occurs next time, it has been agreed to make a scheme to pursue the cause and make an action plan between the person in charge.

[Next Action]
1) Recent countermeasure (for particular user)
a) Replace the PC and check the condition
2) Recent countermeasure (for all users)
a) When the communication becoming slow, user need to inform below content to Mr Eric.
・target user (particular or all users)

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I'm trying to buy now.
Currently, I'm on payment screen.
Can I change to 20 products of XXX?↵

Thank you for arranging with FEDEX.

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I'm trying to buy　now.
Currently, I'm on (the と冠詞があったほうがいいのでは？お互いわかっている画面ですから）payment screen.
Can I change (the number of XXX to 20 pieces？product は一つの製品というのに近いと私はおもうのですが） to 20 products of XXX?　
Thank you for arranging with FEDEX.

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I'm trying to buy now.
Currently, I'm on payment screen.
Can I change to 20 products of XXX?

Thank you for arranging with FEDEX.

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I'm trying to buy now.
Currently, I'm on the payment screen.
Can I change it to 20 of XXX?

Thank you for making the arrangements with FEDEX.

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A temple. All temple tour today is Nichiren religion temple. Nichiren religion is one of the Buddhism. Their teaching is do as many right thing while live. By following this path, society will becoming better and yourself also will find happiness. Lets do the right thing now. It is diffirent from the concept after death is going to heaven. Pray to advocates through "South Myoho Renge". Nichiren religion name came from the person who started this religion. The person name is "Nichiren". This is the museum of the Ikegami Munenaka who had rule this area. Nichiren passed away on October 13th.

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A temple. All the temple we will see today is Nichiren religion temple. Nichiren religion is one of the Buddhist sect. They teach us to do the right thing as many as you can while you alive. By following this path, society will become better place and your will find happiness. Let us do the right thing. It is diffirent from the concept that you were ensured to go to heaven after the death. They pray by chanting "South Myoho Renge". The name of Nichiren religion was originally come from the person who started this religion. The person named "Nichiren". This is the residence of the Ikegami Munenaka who had ruled this area. Nichiren passed away on October 13th 1282.

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Thank you for approved me as your dealer. I am very happy and grateful. I started net shop from December last year by focusing on outdoor goods and increased it gradually until I met with the product from your company. Please sell it to me. So, we are really willing to dealing this product this time. I hope from now on, we can make a good deal. Thank you very much.

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Thank you for approving me as your dealer. I am very happy and grateful. I started online shop from last December focusing on outdoor gear and increased it gradually until I met with the product from your company (and以下は原文の意味と違うように訳されていますし、itが何をさしているかもはっきりしていません）. Please sell it to me. So, we are really willing to deal this product this time(この文章は原文にはないように思います）. I hope from now on, we can make a good deal. Thank you very much.