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I have asked exactly the same question before but they could't take it.
I would be very glad if it hereafter can be changed like that.
I suppose it has been requested a lot.↵
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I once asked exactly the same question, but they said it wasn't possible.
I would be very glad if it could be changed like that.
I suppose many people want this, too.

元の翻訳
The combination of pink and light blue look like it is in a fairy tale.

Welcome to Melty Cream Doughnut shop!
Please find your favorite one in those creamy and sweet doughnuts.

You can dress up casual too with the A line doughnut pattern dress designed by angelicpretty♪

Try brown accessories with those everyone’s favorite chocolate designs.

The one-piece will make you as if you are in “Alice in wonderland”.
So, let’s do party♪

In collaboration with sweets and bear will be the best!!↵

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The combination of pink and light blue have a fairy-tale atmosphere.

Welcome to Melty Cream Doughnut shop!
You will find a plenty of tasty doughnuts, they are Creamy and Sweet, in our menu☆

You can wear casual with an A-line angelicpretty with a doughnut pattern♪

Try brown accessories with its popular chocolate pattern♪

The one-piece with an apron will make you feel as if you are “Alice in wonderland."
Let’s go to a party in a mood that you are Alice♪

A collaboration of sweets and bear is the cutest ever!!

元の翻訳
Developing the keyward "HOME" and works up to now.
You can read all of the works with the keyward "home".
1.The work that is an actual house (HOME) with holes.
Studied the relationship of the image of the house and the physical house by creating lots of hole in a real house.

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Developing the keyward "HOME" and works up to now.
You can read all of the works with the keyward "home".
1.The work that is an actual house (HOME) with holes.
Studied the relationship of the image of the house and the physical house by creating lots of hole in a real house.↵
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元の翻訳
Recommended for all who would enjoy taste of rice.

There are many kinds of dishes such as Japanese, Western, Chinese and etc.
Rice that we think the best is the one that is able to make your dish more tasty.
And Koshihikari made in Nagano can make it possible.
It is good to have with Sushi or Curry.
Most part of quality of rice is decided by thier elasticity and stickness, and rests are by sweetness and scent.

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Recommended for all who would enjoy taste of rice.

There are many kinds of dishes such as Japanese, Western, Chinese and etc.
Rice that we think the best is the one that makes your dish more tasty.
And Koshihikari made in Nagano can make it possible.
It is good to have with Sushi or Curry.
Most parts of the rice's quality is decided by thier elasticity and stickness, and rests are by sweetness and scent.