Yumie (3_yumie7) — もらったレビュー

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殿様

この大鎧は銅に徳川の紋があった鎌倉時代にどのようにして作ることが出来たのでしょうか。
「はい、よしです！」と言ってください最低価格はいくらですか。

どうもありがとう。殿。

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殿様

この大鎧は胴に徳川の紋があるのに鎌倉時代にどうやって作ることが出来たのでしょうか。（反語）
「はい、よしです！」と言ってくださる最低価格はいくらですか。

どうもありがとう。殿。

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This product is for fun. We will accept no responsibility for damage caused when you use it for other purposes.

The highly accurate molding technique enabled us to this "ultra-thin film". "Red lotion" is sealed in the "cute body".

This molding techniques, not only reproduce "deep groove of skin fold with no abrasion, but also prevent skin from "axis offset" "stickiness" and "smell".

We believe you can use this product repeatedly, athough you may have "red experience" only at the first application.

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This product is for fun. We will accept no responsibility for damage caused when you use it for other purposes.

The highly accurate molding technique enabled us to create this "ultra-thin film". "Red lotion" is sealed in the "cute body".

This molding techniques not only reproduce "deep groove of skin fold with no abrasion, but also prevent skin from "axis offset", "stickiness" and "smell".

We believe you can use this product repeatedly, although you may have "red experience" only at the first application.

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Indeed, it seems that the package has not transported.
In ISC LOS ANGELES CA (USPS), we often experience the delay of the update of the tracking system and it appears to be later than in real delivery. However, the arrival speed is actually slower than a normal arrival speed. So could you please ask to USPS?

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Indeed, it seems that the package has not transported.
In ISC LOS ANGELES CA (USPS), we often experience the delay of the update of the tracking system and it appears to be later than in real delivery. However, the arrival speed is actually slower than a normal arrival speed. So could you please ask USPS?

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The item has been arrived.Thank you. Next, I would like to buy the item No.
Please let me know the method to order.

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The item has been arrived.Thank you. Next, I would like to buy the item No.
Please let me know how to order.

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It was more than I had expected.
I used the tour, as it seemed helpful to move from one place to another.
In fact, it was so nice the I went around the destination.
The sun in summer is so strong in Spain that it is recommended to sit on under the roof of the second floor of the bus.
It was nice to feel the breeze. I could really enjoy the tour, as I could go around major sightseeing spots in Madrid.

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It was more than I had expected.
I used the tour, as it seemed helpful to move from one place to another.
In fact, it was so nice that I went another round after passing the destination.
The sun in summer is so strong in Spain that it is recommended to sit under the roof of the second floor of the bus.
It was nice to feel the breeze. I could really enjoy the tour, as I could go around major sightseeing spots in Madrid.

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It is convenient.
We, six family members, participated in the tour. It is very helpful, as we can see major sightseeing spots in Madrid efficiently.
It as also good to be able to understand an approximate distance to walk around the town from the next day.
I really recommend the tour.

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It is convenient.
We, six family members, participated in the tour. It was very helpful, as we could see major sightseeing spots in Madrid efficiently.
It was also good to be able to understand an approximate distance to walk around the town from the next day.
I really recommend the tour.

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あらゆる意味でモダンな暖炉です。 nu-flame/bluworldは当社の最も人気のある卓上エタノール暖炉です。
艶消しステンレススチール製バーナーが、２つの強化ガラスパネルの間で浮き上がり、すべての角度から炎を見ることができます。
リニアバーナーは、きらめき漂うリボン状の炎を生成し、うっとりするような外観を呈します。きらめく卓上バイオ暖炉は、ご利用にならない時でも、インドア、アウトドアでご利用になる時にも部屋から部屋への持ち運びも容易ですが、ご使用後はヒーター部分を戸外に晒さないでください。芯きりバサミと共に発送します。燃料は付属していません。Nu-flameバイオエタノール燃料をご使用になることをお勧めします。

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あらゆる意味でモダンな暖炉です。 nu-flame/bluworldのirradiaは当社の最も人気のある卓上エタノール暖炉です。
艶消しステンレススチール製バーナーが、２つの強化ガラスパネルの間で浮き上がり、すべての角度から炎を見ることができます。
リニアバーナーは、きらめき漂うリボン状の炎を生成し、うっとりするような外観を呈します。きらめく卓上バイオ暖炉は、ご利用にならない時でも、インドア、アウトドアでご利用になる時にも部屋から部屋への持ち運びも容易ですが、ご使用後はヒーター部分を戸外に晒さないでください。芯きりバサミと共に発送します。燃料は付属していません。Nu-flameバイオエタノール燃料をご使用になることをお勧めします。

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They were arrive on 19, but one unit was missing.
I will cancel the one unit. Please take care when you create an invoice.

Missing Product
Part Number:
Size: M
Quantity: more than one

Please confirm above matter and contact us.
Looking forward to hearing from you.

In addition,
Please bill PO#123 which have arrived.
PO #456 has not arrived yet. So I will contact you as soon as I confirm it.

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They have arrived on the 19th, but one piece was missing.
I will cancel the one piece. Please take care when you create the invoice.

Missing Product
Part Number:
Size: M
Quantity: one piece

Please confirm the above matter and contact us.
Looking forward to hearing from you.

In addition,
Please bill PO#123 which has arrived.
PO #456 has not arrived yet. So I will contact you as soon as I confirm it.

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I have a request about feature of Next video auto play.

A feature that goes back to the first video page once the final video is finished and replay the first video (in video of the same category)
A feature that enables consecutive video replay

In addition, it would be better if I could set up the initial state OFF.
There are many similar themes, so I think it will sell well if an original feature is implemented.
Please refer my opinion as a request.

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I have a request about features of Next video auto play.

A feature that goes back to the first video page once the final video is finished and replay the first video (video in the same category)
A feature that enables consecutive video replay

In addition, it would be better if I could set up the initial state OFF.
There are many similar themes, so I think it will sell well if an original feature is implemented.
Please refer my opinion as a request.

元の翻訳
１　これらのペンで書くことができますか。
２　インクがなくなった場合、補充する方法がありますか。
３　こんにちは。商品代金を支払いました。荷物の番号を追跡することはできますか。
いつ発送していただけますか。
関税がかからないように、荷物のインボイスに最安値を記入していただけますか。

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１　これらのペンで書くことができますか。
２　インクがなくなった場合、補充する方法がありますか。
３　こんにちは。商品代金を支払いました。追跡できる荷物の番号はありますか。
いつ発送していただけますか。
関税がかからないように、荷物のインボイスに最安値を記入していただけますか。

元の翻訳
Thank you for contacting us.
We are sorry for the delay of the arrival of the item.
Please let us know if the item will not arrive until the next week.
We will issue a refund immediately.
We will deal with the item until the final stage of the business.
Please stay peace in mind.

If it does not arrive after a certain period, we will issue a refund.
Please put your heart at ease.
Thank you for your shopping at our shop.

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Thank you for contacting us.
We are sorry for the delay of the arrival of the item.
Please let us know if the item does not arrive before the end of next week.
We will then issue a refund immediately.
We will assist you until the final stage of the business.
Please rest assured.

If it does not arrive after a certain period, we will issue a refund.
Please rest assured.
Thank you for your shopping at our shop.

元の翻訳
Sorry that we could not get you back sooner.
We can deliver withing 3-5 days from the shipping day if the item go through the customs without problem.
Thank you for your consideration.

Regards,

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Sorry that we could not get back to you sooner [wrong register].
We can deliver withing [word confusion] 3-5 days from the shipping day if the item go [s-v agreement] through customs without a problem.
Thank you for your consideration.

Regards,

元の翻訳
わかりません。
日本から購入するのは初めてです。
当社のお客様はVAT関税を払う心づもりができていらっしゃいます。
中古商品（6か月以上使用した商品）に対しては現地のVAT税はかからないと思います。

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わかりません。
日本から購入するのは初めてです。
こちらの税関はVAT関税を払わせたがっていますが、
中古商品（6か月以上使用した商品）に対しては現地のVAT税はかからないと思います。

元の翻訳
2週間前の「サイエンス」誌に発表された新しい研究は、テレビ視聴と暴力との関係に関する新たな証拠を示している。
心理学者Jeffrey G. Johnsonとかれの研究チームは707世帯の子供に対し17年間にわたり調査を行なってきた。結果、研究者らは、1日1時間以上テレビを見る子供は、そうでない子供に比べ、成長するにつれて攻撃的行為、暴力行為に参加する可能性が高いことを発見した。「テレビと暴力的なショー、攻撃行為との関連は、その核心をついている。圧倒的な事実だ。」と Johnson博士は述べた。

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2週間前の「サイエンス」誌に発表された新しい研究は、テレビ視聴と暴力との関係に関する新たな証拠を示している。
心理学者Jeffrey G. Johnsonとかれの研究チームは707世帯の子供に対し17年間にわたり調査を行なってきた。結果、研究者らは、1日1時間以上テレビを見る子供は、そうでない子供に比べ、成長するにつれて攻撃的行為、暴力行為に参加する可能性が高いことを発見した。「暴力的な番組のテレビと攻撃行為との関連性は、圧倒的なほどにその核心をついている。」と Johnson博士は述べている。

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The content written in this e-mail is confidential and includes information limited to a recipient. Please do not copy, transfer any part of the content of this e-mail or the attached file without our authorization. In case a person other than a recipient received this e-mail for some reason, please contact the originator of this e-mail.

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私のペイパルアカウントに転送できます。

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私のペイパルアカウントに転送してください。

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I am really surprised and disappointing hearing that I have received a claim from you about the razor which I sold you two month ago.

Normally, If there is any problem with an item, I can deal with it if it is within a week since the arrival of the item.

I am not persuaded by your reason of the return of the product.
I can deal with it if you tell me the reason honestly.
I ask for your kind understanding.

If you will dismiss your claim, I can make a big discount in your next purchase.
Looking forward to hearing from you.

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I am really surprised and disappointed to receive a claim from you about the razor I sold you two month ago.

Normally, If there is any problem with an item, I can deal with it if it is within a week after the arrival of the item.

I am not convinced of your reason for returning the product.
I can deal with it if you tell me the reason honestly.
I ask for your kind understanding.

If you dismiss your claim, I will offer a large discount on your next purchase.
Looking forward to hearing from you.

元の翻訳
The average unit price of our products is about $45

As for the shipment period from the receipt of an order from a buyer,
we can arrange the shipment within 4 days from the day of an order.
Please check the date.

We use Sal flights an SAL registered mail according to the price of a unite price.
We may use EMS in case of expensive products.

The payment method is PayPal only.

Here is our eBay ID:

We began our business since May of this year.
We are continuing our business for about 7 months.

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The average unit price of our products is about $45

As for the shipment period upon the receipt of an order from a buyer,
we can process it within 4 days from that day.
Please kindly confirm this.

We use Sal flights and SAL registered mail depending on the unit price.
There are times when we use EMS for expensive products.

The payment method is PayPal only.

Here is our eBay ID:

We began our business since May of this year.
Our business is running for about 7 months.

元の翻訳
こんにちは。このメールに少し困惑しています。というのは、6週間以上前に、レゴ・スペースシャトルを受け取ったのですが、その商品とサテライト・ローンチャーの２つしか注文しておらず、両方とももっておりますので、郵便局とは関係がないからです。配送には問題はありませんでした。商品は到着予定日に遅れることなく配送されました。ありがとうございます。

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こんにちは。このメールに少し困惑しています。というのは、6週間以上前に、レゴ・スペースシャトルを受け取ったのですが、その商品と人工衛星発射装置の２つしか注文しておらず、両方とももっておりますので、郵便局には何もないはずだからです。配送には問題はありませんでした。商品は到着予定日に遅れることなく配送されました。ありがとうございます。