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元の翻訳
Thank you for the suggestions.
(1) is possible, but (2) is not possible.
Also, EC is an abbreviation for Excellent.
I kindly ask your consideration.

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Thank you for the suggestions.
(1) is possible, but (2) is not possible.
Also, EC is an abbreviation for Excellent.
I ask your kind consideration.

元の翻訳
This email address is a personal address.
I was able to do a good job thanks to the new staff following on my business.
As a thank you, I am planning to give her domestic travel accommodation vouchers for two people (for her and her husband).
And if possible, can you kindly let me know the reason for the lower profit margin of the merchandise?
I want to use it as reference for the conditions on selling the products next time.

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This email address is a private address.
I was able to do a good job thanks to the new staff's support on my business.
As appreciation, I am planning to give her domestic travel accommodation vouchers for two people (for her and her husband).
And if possible, can you kindly let me know the reason for the lower profit margin of the merchandise?
I want to use it as a reference for the conditions on selling the products next time.

元の翻訳
Greetings,

My name is Y, CEO of X; I am pleased to make your acquaintance.

Our company sells accessories for "quality cameras that can film a movie" for students to professionals. Currently, we are focusing our efforts toward BMPCC. The products of your company are truly capable of realizing the concept mentioned earlier; hence, we would like to ask you to let us be the agents handling your products.

In Japan, there are not many agencies dealing with this field, and the market is still small. Our company has a long history of achievements of sales promotion, and we hope to become the pioneer as your company's distributor.

We eagerly await for your reply.

Sincerely,

X

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Greetings,

My name is Y, CEO of X.

Our company sells accessories for "cameras that can film a movie" from students to professionals. Currently, we are focusing our efforts to BMPCC. ↵
The products of your company match our concept, so please let us handle your products.

In Japan, there are not many agencies dealing with this field, and the market is still small. Our company has a long history with achievements of sales promotion, and we would like to become the pioneer as your company's distributor.

We eagerly await for your reply.

Yours sincerely,

X

元の翻訳
We have received item 420, but because the print on the labels was very light and labels were placed on top of another, so we can't sell to our customers.
Could you send replacement items or labels as soon as possible?

Also, the item 600 which you have sent before was returned from our customer due to the light printing on the label. Please send the replacement labels for this as well.

Please kindly check the pictures of the items as per attached.

Further more, there were 3 bags of item 333, which were ripped and one of bags only contained 24 pieces as supposed to contain 25 pieces.
Could you send 3 new bags and one piece of item 333 with a label?

Also since there was damage to outer box of item 444, please kindly send an outer box and a replacement label.

修正後
We have received item 420, but because the print on the labels was very light and labels were placed on top of another, so we can't sell to our customers.
Could you send replacement items or labels as soon as possible?

Also, the item 600 which you have sent before was returned from our customer due to the light printing on the label. Please send the replacement labels for this as well.

Please kindly check the pictures of the items as attached.

Furthermore, there were 3 bags of item 333, which were ripped and one of bags only contained 24 pieces although it is supposed to contain 25 pieces.
Could you send 3 new bags and one piece of item 333 with a label?

Also since there was a damage to an outer box of item 444, please kindly send an outer box and a replacement label.

元の翻訳
We have received the item 420. We can not sell to customers because lavel is printed in thin color and overlapped. Could you replace products or send lavel urgently?

The item 600 sent once before was printed in thin color and returned from customer. Please send lavels including this.

Please confirm the photo of product sent by attached file.
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Regarding item 333 we found 3 broken bags, and one of them containing only 24pcs. in sted of 25pcs. as usual.
Could you send 3 sets of new bags and lavels and one product?

And also,Item 444 had damege on it's outer box, therefore, please send box and lavel.

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We have received the item 420. We can not sell to customers because its label is printed in thin color and overlapped. Could you send replacements or send the label urgently?

The item 600 that you sent before was printed in thin color and returned from the customer. Please send those labels itoo.

I send the photos of the products for your reference.

Regarding the item 333, we found 3 broken bags, and one of them contains only 24pcs. in stead of 25pcs. as it is supposed to.
Could you send 3 sets of new bags, labels, and one product?

And also, the item 444 was damaged on its outer box, so please send the box and the label.

元の翻訳
Thanks for replying.
In that case, may us cancel the deal.
The total amount of money should be payback to you, however there is a shortage of our paypal account.
Actually, the money has been paid off just before we received the misfortune message from the supplier.
We are terribly sorry for making you trouble. Let us pay XX dollar back at first.
We will pay you back the rest xx dollar as soon as the account was filled up.
Repeatedly,We are terribly sorry for troubling you, and sincerely pledge your understanding with it.Thank you.↵

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Thank you for your reply.
In that case, we would like to cancel the deal.
The total amount of money should be payed back to you now, but there is a shortage in our paypal account.
Actually, the money has been withdrawn just before we received the misfortune message from the supplier.
We are very sorry for making you trouble. Let us pay XX dollar back at first.
We will pay you back the remaining xx dollar as soon as the account is filled up.
Once again, we are very sorry for causing you a trouble. Thank you very much for your kind understanding.

元の翻訳
申し訳ありません。住所（場所）の変更です。

もし静岡県*****でしたら、船積みはお幾らになりますか。

こんな質問をお許してください、なぜなら、私のオフィス　ホテル（注：オフィスとホテル？）は二つでございます。
ご返事お待ちしております。　多大なご迷惑をおかけします。有難うございます。

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申し訳ありません。住所（場所）の変更です。

もし静岡県*****でしたら、送料はお幾らになりますか。

こんな質問をお許してください、なぜなら、私のオフィス　ホテル（注：オフィスとホテル？）は二つでございます。
ご返事お待ちしております。　多大なご迷惑をおかけします。有難うございます。

元の翻訳
I hate to say, but I do not cancel it.
Although I informed you that I was going to cancel, I place an order.
As for the transportation, I do not mind if you send it by air or sea.
Would you please send it at low cost?
After finally decide which one you use, please let me know.

The attached document is the parts we are receiving.
May I ask you to check it?
If you charge, I will prepare for making a payment.

I would like to have all by "Regular."
I attach the corrected PO.
Would you also change 46L to 46R?

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I am sorry but I do not cancel it.
Although I informed you that I was going to cancel, I would like to place an order instead.
As for the transportation, I do not mind if you send it by air or by ship.
Would you please send it at low cost?
After you finally decide which way you use, please let me know.

The attached document is the list of parts we have received.
May I ask you to check it?
If you send me a bill, I will prepare for making a payment.

I would like to have all in "Regular."
I attach the corrected PO.
Would you also change 46L to 46R?