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元の翻訳
Hello, I received the item.
However, I am very bewildered because the item's box and contents inside are severely damaged than expected.
I have been desperately trying to come up with a way to sell this item to our customer, but so far no idea hits upon me. Honestly, I am very much in trouble.

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Hello. I have received the item.
However, I am rather bewildered because its box and contents are more severely damaged than expected.
I have been desperately trying to come up with a way to sell it in this condition to a Japanese customer, but I haven't hit upon a good idea so far. Honestly, I am very much in trouble.

元の翻訳
お問い合わせありがとうございます。仰るとおり、弊社はアメリカにございますが、日本向けの配送も勿論承ります！$100以上のご注文を頂いた際、通常所要日数4-8日で追跡番号をおつけして、追加料金$8のみで国際優先配送を手配させて頂くことが可能となりました。

決済を頂く際にお選び頂けるほかの配送方法としまして、3-6日以内の配達を扱う国際急送配送がございます。追加料金$20で航空便により5-10日以内の配送となり、$100以上の国際注文の場合は無料で承ることがかのうです。しかしながらこちらには追跡番号は付与されません。

税関で遅延が生じることにより商品配達に時間がかかることも時折ございますので、弊社よりご案内できますのはおよその配達予定日となります。

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お問い合わせありがとうございます。仰るとおり、弊社はアメリカにございますが、日本向けの配送も勿論承ります！$100以上のご注文を頂いた際、通常所要日数4-8日で追跡番号をおつけして、$8で国際優先配送を手配させて頂くことが可能となりました。

決済を頂く際にお選び頂けるほかの配送方法としまして、3-6日以内の配達を扱う国際急送配送がございます。$20で航空便により5-10日以内の配送となり、$100以上の国際注文の場合は無料で承ることが可能です。しかしながらこちらには追跡番号は付与されません。

税関で遅延が生じることにより商品配達に時間がかかることも時折ございますので、国際配送に関し弊社よりご案内できますのはおよその配達予定日となります。

元の翻訳
I apologize for the wrong item was shipped to you this time.
As I notified you the other day, your ordered item was shipped on October 4, 2014, which was 3 days after the shipment of the DHC suppliments. Would you please wait for little longer?
Also, as per previously explained, the DHC suppliments are brand new, so you may use them as they are, so please use them if you like.
The shippment for this occasion was via SAL.
Your kind understanding is appreciated because the expected delivery date may vary due to an international shipment.
I will make sure to take care of your transaction till the end.
Please feel free to contact us any time if any.

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I apologize for that wrong item was shipped to you this time.
[I apologize that the incorrect/wrong item has been shipped to you in this instance]↵
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As I had notified you the other day, your ordered item was shipped on 4th of October, 2014, which was 3 days after the shipment of the DHC suppliments (spelling error [supplements]). Would you please wait for little longer?
[As I reported to/informed you the other day, your order was shipped on the 4th of October, 2014. 3 days later than the DHC supplements.]↵
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Also, as per previously explained, the DHC suppliments (sp) are brand new, so you may use them as they are, so please use them if you like.
The shippment (spelling error) for this occasion was via SAL.
[As I have also explained previously, they are in a new unopened condition and can be used as is if you like.]↵
↵
Your kind understanding is appreciated because the expected delivery date may vary due to an international shipment.
I will make sure to take care of your transaction till the end.
Please feel free to contact us any time if any. if any what???↵
[Please feel free to contact us any time if there is anything we can help you with]↵
↵

元の翻訳
It is very unlikelly to believe that the accessories of the merchandise has been lacking from the start.
Have you had a chance to check it thoroughly?
We could obtain it from the manufacturer, but it will take 1 to 2 months for you to wait. Would you please take its product number and send the image to me? I will arrange it for you accordingly.

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It is very unlikelly (sp) to believe that the accessories of the merchandise has been lacking from the start.
[It is highly unlikely that the accessories were not included in the merchandise originally.]↵
Have you had a chance to check it thoroughly?
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We could obtain [it] (plural accessories) from the manufacturer, but it will take 1 to 2 months [for you to wait]??.↵
[We can obtain them from the maker but, it will mean waiting for 1-2 months.]↵
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Would you please take its product number and send the image to me?↵
[Would you please take a photograph of the product serial number, and send it to me?]↵
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I will arrange it for you accordingly.

元の翻訳
In fact there is something I should let you know. It was found out at the final check prior to shipment for US.
The peg has been replaced from the original one to SPERZEL.
As you can see in the picture, there is a screw hole on the rear side of the head. If you don't mind about this guitar, I could ship it to you right away. There is no replacement available in stock.

As I checked the guitar, there was no scratch. It is a very beautiful brand new item.
Please confirm the attached photo of the actual guitar.

修正後
In fact there is something I should let you know. It was found out at the final check prior to shipment for US.
The pegs have been replaced from the original ones to SPERZEL.
As you can see in the picture, there are screw holes on the rear side of the head. If you don't mind about this guitar, I could ship it to you right away. There is no replacement available in stock.

As I checked the guitar, there was no scratch. It is a very beautiful brand new item.
Please confirm the attached photo of the actual guitar.

元の翻訳
サトウ様、
まずはじめにNgoc Nghia Industry – Service – Trading JSC (“NNG”)に代わり、弊社事業取引の際は寛容なご協力及びサポートを賜りましたことに感謝申し上げます。本状は請求書No: NNG-NUR-140711Aに関する取引の問題を終結すべく書かれたものです。
御社からの特使によると、2.5gr キャップ 1810の発行に関して2014年10月14日付けで付けで弊社が受領しましたが、この件について次の通り意見を述べさせて頂きたいと存じます。

修正後
サトウ様、
まずはじめにNgoc Nghia Industry – Service – Trading JSC (“NNG”)に代わり、弊社事業取引の際は寛容なご協力及びサポートを賜りましたことに感謝申し上げます。本状は請求書No: NNG-NUR-140711Aに関する取引の問題を終結すべく書かれたものです。
御社からの2.5gr キャップ 1810の問題に関しての急送文書は2014年10月14日付けで付けで弊社が受領しましたが、この件について次の通り返答させて頂きたいと存じます。

元の翻訳
During my junior high school days, I visited Okinawa for the school trip. In the ocean I rode on a banana boat, or visited Ryukyu Kingdom, and ate a lot of Okinawan food, etc. The most impressive memory of the trip was the Okinawa Churaumi Aquarium. It was my first time visiting such a huge aquarium, and I was very glad to have visited the spot often seen on TV or dramas. For its fame, the performance was very beautiful. The way the fish were lit up, and so many fish were swimming with people, were something that gave me strong impressions as a junior high school student.

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During my junior high school days, I visited Okinawa for a school trip. I rode on a banana boat in the ocean, visited Ryukyu Kingdom, and ate a lot of Okinawan food, etc. The most impressive memory of the trip was the Okinawa Churaumi Aquarium. It was my first time visiting such a huge aquarium, and I was very glad to have visited a spot that is often seen on TV and dramas. For its fame, the performance was very beautiful. The way the fish were lit up, and so many fish were swimming with people, were something that gave me strong impressions as a junior high school student.

元の翻訳
Currently, I am having ●●-san to proceed with the visa application prior to 11/1.
As a premise, AAAAA-BBBB agreement is required, so it would be helpful if you could proceed with that task.

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Currently, I am having ●●-san to proceed to the visa application prior to 11/1.
As a premise, the AAAAA-BBBB contract is required, so it would be helpful if you could promote the task.