Tearz (tearz) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
最新のDLPガイドマップを配送いたします。問題ありません（アナとユキの女王をフィーチャーしたChristmas Disney Dreams内とショーの最新バージョンです）。フィギュアは何体ご希望ですか？購入数量が増えれば増えるほど割引率も高く適用することが可能です。

修正後
最新のDLPガイドマップも一緒にお送りいたします。お安い御用です。（『アナと雪の女王』をフィーチャーしたChristmas Disney Dreamsナイトショーの最新バージョンです）。フィギュアを何体お求めになりますか？購入数量が増えれば増えるほど、より高い割引率を適用させることが可能です。

元の翻訳
最新のDLPガイドマップを配送いたします。問題ありません（アナとユキの女王をフィーチャーしたChristmas Disney Dreams内とショーの最新バージョンです）。フィギュアは何体ご希望ですか？購入数量が増えれば増えるほど割引率も高く適用することが可能です。

修正後
最新のDLPガイドマップを配送いたします。↵
これだとマップを送ることが主になっています。ship with です。↵
最新のマップをお付けしてです。↵
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問題ありません（アナとユキの女王をフィーチャーしたChristmas Disney Dreamsナイトショーの新しいバージョンです）。フィギュアは何体ご希望ですか？購入数量が増えれば増えるほど割引率も高く適用することが可能です。

元の翻訳
I bought it at your shop.
Please exclude anything that shows the price such as an invoice, because this is supposed to ne a gift.
Thank you.

修正後
I bought it at your shop.
Please exclude anything that shows the price such as an invoice, because this is supposed to be a gift.
Thank you.

元の翻訳
We are very sorry, but we do not know the item's detail and ingredients.
If you feel anxious to use the item, we apologize for the inconvenience, but would you please cancel your order by the end of the day?
Thank you for shopping with us.

修正後
We are very sorry, but we do not know the item's detail and ingredients.
原文は商品の詳細な使い方です。↵
If you feel anxious to use the item, we apologize for the inconvenience, but would you please cancel your order by the end of the day?
Thank you for shopping with us.

元の翻訳
I seem to have received that the manager's e-mail address, but it doesn't seem to be displayed. Please confirm your e-mail history.

If you capture and send the e-mail address as an image to me, I should be able to check, too. So would please send it as an image to me?

修正後
I seem to have received the manager's e-mail address, but it seems like the system doesn't allow it to be displayed. Please confirm your e-mail history.

If you capture and send the e-mail address as an image to me, I should be able to check, too. So would please send it as an image to me?

元の翻訳
If I cannot directly purchase items from you, we will not have a chance to deal with your product.
We are not planning to discuss with the distributor in Tokyo mentioned in your contact, so you shall not provide my personal information to that person.

修正後
If I cannot directly purchase items from you, we will not have a chance to deal in your product.
We are not planning to discuss with the distributor in Tokyo mentioned in your contact, so you shall not provide my personal information to that person.

元の翻訳
I appreciate your kind response on the new product and its production.
The new item enhances our anticipation very much.
I would love to obtain the new item's sample any time sooner. Please send me an invoice for that.
The colour orange is absolutely nice!

On another note, your brand logo design has changed 4 times in the past 2 years, I was wondering if you are planning to change it in the future too?

This week, we have received an offer for a special exhibition at Japan's most luxurious department store, so I will send you the report for its result.

Lastly, one question. Is it possible to add a name on the item? If you accept this request for mass production only, I would take that offer.

修正後
I appreciate your kind response on the new product and its production.
The new item enhances our anticipation very much.
I would love to obtain the new item's sample any time sooner. Please send me an invoice for that.
The one of the orange colour is absolutely nice!

On another note, your brand logo design has changed 4 times in the past 2 years, I was wondering if you are planning to change it in the future too?

This week, we have received an offer for a special exhibition at Japan's most luxurious department store, so I will send you the report for its result.

Lastly, one question. Is it possible to add a name on the item? If you accept this request for mass production only, I would take that offer.