Megumi Walton (mzarco1) — 付けたレビュー

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I change this car tire since it worn out.
It is not a new tire but still have 80% remaining, so it still good enough to use.
Therefore, the price can up to 300 dollar. If it is good enough for you, I will raise the invoice.

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I changed this car`s tires since they wore out.
It is not a new tire but they still have 80% remaining, so it is still good enough to use.
Therefore, the price can go up by 300 dollar. If it is good enough for you, I will send the invoice.

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Can you do a pay the 1,900.93 dollars that I am requesting now?
I would like confirm your situation because I have been doing the process for the payment several times now.

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Can you pay the 1,900.93 dollars that I am requesting now?
I would like confirm your situation because I have been doing the process for the payment several times now.

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We assume that the procedure has already done after we sent w-8BEN to you.

Therefore, we would like to relegate the stock of Zynga which we gave you to the broker.
Merrill Lynch which is our broker asked us to get your information statement which you write the balance, account number, tax and ID, which are important to relegate and the preparation for that. So could you send it to us?

After that, please let us know how to proceed your actual transfer directions.

Thank you.

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We assume that the procedure was already done after we sent w-8BEN to you.

Therefore, we would like to relegate the stock of Zynga which we gave you to the broker.
Merrill Lynch, which is our broker, asked us to get your information statement where you provide the balance, account number, tax and ID, which are important for the relegation and the document preparation. So could you send it to us?

After that, please let us know how to proceed your actual transfer directions.

Thank you.

元の翻訳
I would like to purchase 1 x J for start.
Can I purchase N for $125, same as last time?
If you can give me a discount for the item, I can purchase it.

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I would like to purchase 1 x J for start.
Can I purchase N for $125, same as the last time?
If you can give me a discount, I can purchase it.

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Thank you for sending me a great draft, Miranda. As for the assertion relating to the Article 20, I have nothing to add. The other party will be liable for asserting regarting the Article 10, but I think that it would be better for us to prepare a counter-statement. How is your opinion? It would as follows:

(1) The Asbestos Prohibition Act is not in violation of the Article 10 of the Trade Act.
(1)-1 Asbestos and its substitutes do not fall in the same type of products.
(1)-2 It cannot be deemd that products made in Canada is teated in discriminatory manner.

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Thank you for sending me a great draft, Miranda. As for the assertion relating to the Article 20, I have nothing to add. The other party will be liable for asserting regarting the Article 10, but I think that it would be better for us to prepare a counter-statement. What is your opinion? It would as follows:

(1) The Asbestos Prohibition Act is not in violation of the Article 10 of the Trade Act.
(1)-1 Asbestos and its substitutes do not fall in the same type of products.
(1)-2 It cannot be deemd that products made in Canada is teated in discriminatory manner.

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Thank you for the happy time again yesterday.
Take care going to work.
I am leaving here soon.
I have a lot of travelling, so I think I can contact you at night.

I am a bit nervous because the places where I am planing to visit are all first time for me. I am worrying about if the locals can welcome our thought or not...

I am in between of excitement and anxiety.
I have to go as I don't have much time, sorry.
I will try my best today with the matching charm with you!!

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Thank you for the happy time again yesterday.
Take care going to work.
I am leaving here soon.
I have a lot of travelling, so I think I can contact you at night.

I am a bit nervous because the places where I am planing to visit are all first time for me. I am worrying about if the locals can welcome our thought or not...

I am in between excitement and anxiety.
I have to go as I don't have much time, sorry.
I will try my best today with the matching charm with you!!

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I would like to ask about the product I've purchased the other day.

The watch does't work, are there no batteries in it?

Could you tell me how to make it work?

I'm looking forward to your response.

Best regards,

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I would like to ask about the product I purchased the other day.

The watch does't work, is there any battery in it?

Could you tell me how it works?

I'm looking forward to your response.

Best regards,

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We are enjoying nice weather in Singapore this morning.

Thank you for always giving me
I will try my hardest so I can invite you over to Singapore.
Let's go see a movie together in Japan!

Today's Schedule
It is not in the original schedule, but yesterday's unfinished negotiation needs to be taken care of in the morning. Regarding the email I worked on last night I have just finished a phone meeting with my Japanese client, and I am about to leave now.
13:55 Changi Departure
15:00(17:00 JST=-2:00) Phnom penh Arriving and on move.
From 19:00 in local time, I am going to meet with Cambodian friends for dinner.
I will message you later!

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We are enjoying the nice weather in Singapore this morning.

Thank you for always giving me a wonderful time
I will try my hardest so I can invite you over to Singapore.
Let's go see a movie together in Japan!

Today's Schedule
It is not in the original schedule, but yesterday's unfinished negotiation needs to be taken care of in the morning. Regarding the email I worked on last night I have just finished a phone meeting with my Japanese client, and I am about to leave now.
13:55 Changi Departure
15:00(17:00 JST=-2:00) Phnom penh Arriving and on move.
From 19:00 in local time, I am going to meet with Cambodian friends for dinner.
I will message you later!

元の翻訳
Please wait for just a little more time for the explanation of the work and specific information about myself.

The English translation takes time, so in a few days, I will send you an email with an attached file containing detailed in a few days.

If you don't mind, could you tell me information regarding payment and shipping?

I am considering that payment should be made on Paypal.

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Please wait for just a little more time for the explanation of the work and specific information about myself.

The English translation takes time, so in a few days, I will send you an email with an attached file containing details.

If you don't mind, could you tell me the information regarding payment and shipping?

I am considering to make the payment through paypal.

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これは保存状態が極めてよいこの宇宙船の標本です。もしこの商品が硬貨や紙幣のように等級が付けられるのであれば現存するものの中で最高等級のものとなるでしょう。もちろん、これは私の意見ですが。eBayなどのサイトで、ある期間検索したところ、この状態に近い出品さえ見られませんでした。ロケットは新品同様なだけでなく、箱も本来のままとなっております。商品説明の下に「中古品」と記載するのがためらわれた程です。この出品物はアウトレット販売されたていたもので未使用品です。確認のため電池を入れて作動させただけです。並外れてすばらしい動きをします！！これらの写真を参考にしてご自身で調査してください。

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保存状態が極めてよい宇宙船の標本です。もしこの商品が硬貨や紙幣のように等級が付けられるのであれば現存するものの中で最高等級のものとなるでしょう。もちろん、これは私の意見ですが。eBayなどのサイトで、ある期間検索したところ、この状態に近い出品さえありませんでした。ロケットは新品同様なだけでなく、箱も本来のままとなっております。商品説明の下に「中古品」と記載するのがためらわれた程です。この出品物はアウトレット販売されたていたもので未使用品です。確認のため電池を入れて作動させただけです。並外れてすばらしい動きをします！！これらの写真を参考にしてご自身で確かめて下さい。

元の翻訳
The baby is being delivered.
We apologize for taking your time on such a busy time.

Of course, there is no need for the customer to go to the post office.
Communicating with the post office by phone or email during your free time is will be enough.

Should there be cute Hello Kitty items for babies, please recommend them.
We pray for your baby's health.

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Oh, you had a baby.
We apologize for taking your time on such a busy time.

Of course, there is no need for the customer to go to the post office.
Communicating with the post office by phone or email during your free time will be enough.

Should there be cute Hello Kitty items for babies, we will let you know.
We pray for your baby's health.

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Sorry for the late reply! I was very busy this week. By the way, my work is a temporary desk job for the city hall.
So the work hours are sometimes in the morning, but sometimes from the afternoon 'til night.

I am happy that you love Japanese sweets.
I will cooperate as much as possible, so please feel free to ask.
The cheesecake and pocky are both limited edition, so I am glad I was able to send it to you.
Also, when I looked up the chocolate flavored collon, it was no longer in production! Only the following exist right now.

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Sorry for the late reply! I was very busy this week. By the way, my work is a temporary desk job for the city hall.
The work hours vary from the morning to 'til night time.

I am happy that you love Japanese sweets.
I will cooperate as much as possible, so please feel free to ask.
The cheesecake-flavored pocky is a limited edition, so I am glad I was able to send it to you.
Also, when I looked up the chocolate flavored collon, it was no longer in production! Only the following exist right now.