Michael Moran (kokujin_kun) — 付けたレビュー

元の翻訳
3. Many people don't take the initiative
-There was a silent interview without anyone talking.
-Only people who were good at English speaking, never asked questions even if they were interviewers.

Feedback on client sessions
1. About manners
-It should not be communicating with the client while eating such as chewing gum and relaxing on the sofa is rude
-Look at the other person's eyes and communicate.

修正後
3. Many people don't take the initiative
-There was a silent interview without anyone talking.
-There were instances where the only interviewers who spoke were those proficient in English, while other interviewers never asked questions.

Feedback on client sessions
1. About proper etiquette
-Avoid communicating with clients while eating, chewing gum, or relaxing on the sofa since that is rude.
-Look the other person in the eyes while communicating.

元の翻訳
- Know what kind of person the interviewees are and have your questions ready.

-> (Rule #1) It is mandatory for everyone to participate as the interviewer at lease once even if they are not good at speaking in English.
-> (Rule #2) Enter the interview room three minutes before the time of interview. If there are multiple teams, discuss with fellow students to decide who should take the initiative to thank the interviewees and explain about the interview and in what order the questions should be asked to ensure a smooth interview.

修正後
- Know what kind of person the interviewees are and have your questions ready.

-> (Rule #1) It is mandatory for everyone to participate as the interviewer at least once even if they are not good at speaking in English.
-> (Rule #2) Enter the interview room three minutes before the time of interview. If there are multiple teams, discuss with fellow students to decide who should take the initiative to thank the interviewees and explain about the interview and in what order the questions should be asked to ensure a smooth interview.

元の翻訳
I want the facilitator to let the students know the following things tomorrow morning.
Interview etiquette:
1. There is a general lack of consideration for the interviewees
- First and foremost, the interviewees are nervous about what they are going to be asked.
- Thank them for taking their time for the interview.
- Let the interviewees know the background and purpose of the interview by telling them about your own background and what kind of questions you are interested in asking. (it is rude to start an interview by asking questions)
- Be mindful to use simple English that the interviewees can understand.
2. Not enough preparation has been made beforehand

修正後
I want the facilitator to let the students know the following things tomorrow morning.
Interview etiquette:
1. There is a general lack of consideration for the interviewees
- First and foremost, the interviewees are nervous about what they are going to be asked.
- Thank them for taking their time for the interview.
- Let the interviewees know the background and purpose of the interview by telling them about the background and what kind of questions you are interested in asking. (It is rude to start an interview by asking questions)
- Be mindful to use simple English that the interviewees can understand.
2. Not enough preparation has been made beforehand

元の翻訳
Relationship between motivation of using Internet and problems

Compare the risk by using the Internet for superiority, rating and sharing the feeling.
Recently more and more people tend to use the Internet, and opinion to control the problems has been requested.
We analyzed the relationship between the motivation and the problems by conducting research. We used 700 samples that use personal computer the most among users who use the Internet for a long time. As a result of Analysis 1, we found that the superiority, rating and sharing the feeling were obtained. We also found maintaining daily relationship, complaint and consultation. As a result of Analysis 2, sharing the feeling was rated 2 for the problem 1. The superiority was highly related to physical and mental health.

修正後
Relationship between motivation of Internet use and the problems

Comparison of the risks of using the Internet to gain sense of superiority, personal valuation and empathy.
Because of the demographic of Internet users has trended younger recently, expertise to contain problems has come into demand.
We analyzed the relationship between the motivation of Internet use and various problems by conducting research. We used a sample of 700 people who are on the Internet for prolonged periods and whose device of choice are personal computers. As a result of Analysis 1, we found that the motives were the attainment of a sense of superiority, personal valuation and empathy, along with the maintenance of day-to-day relationships and the opportunities to complain and seek advice. As a result of Analysis 2, empathy was rated 2 for the problem 1. Sense of superiority had a high correlation to physical and mental health.