岡　達郎 (jesse-oka) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
The package and the wrapping which I returned to you is exactly same condition as it came to me.
That is, I sent back with the same wrapping and the box as you sent me.
I do not understand that you complain about the packaging condition and refuse receiving the returned goods.
Your conduct is a sin against faith.

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The package and the wrapping which I returned to you is exactly the same condition as it was delivered to me.
That is, I have returned the item with exactly the same wrapping and the box as you sent me.
I do not understand the reason for you complaint about the packaging condition and refuse receiving the returned goods.
Your conduct is a sin against faith.

元の翻訳
The package and the wrapping which I returned to you is exactly same condition as it came to me.
That is, I sent back with the same wrapping and the box as you sent me.
I do not understand that you complain about the packaging condition and refuse receiving the returned goods.
Your conduct is a sin against faith.

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I returned the package and the wrapping to you exactly in the same condition as it was delivered to me.
That is, I sent it back with the same wrapping and the box as you sent me.
I do not understand why you complain about the packaging condition and refuse to receive the returned item.
Your conduct is a sin [word choice] against faith [word choice].

元の翻訳
You could better most of problems of photos with Brightness and Shadow.

*Highlight
You can adjust the part which is too bright into proper brightness.
Especially if photos taken outdoors, there would be more parts which are too bright or dark.
Let’s fix them, tingling with Shadow and Highlight.

*Vignette
You can make an atmosphere as if taken by a toy camera, by darken surroundings of the photos.

*Beauty skin effects.
You can make photos you took for yourself more attractive.

*Luminance
It makes photos whiter and brighter.

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You could resolve most of the problems of photos with Brightness and Shadow.

*Highlight
You can adjust too bright parts into proper brightness.
Photos taken outdoors especially tend to have too bright or dark parts.
Let’s fix them with Shadow and Highlight.

*Vignette
You can make an atmosphere as if taken by a toy camera, by darkening periphery of photos.

*Beauty skin effects.
You can make your selfies more attractive.

*Brightness
It makes photos whiter and brighter.

元の翻訳
In APPNAME, all functions for editing, photographing are equipped.

*Effects
In APPNAME, there are 134 kinds of filters, and by choosing and using them at same time, you can create like nostalgic photos which are as if taken by a film camera etc.,
Let’s create the best photo, finding your liking effects.
Those filters will be further increased in updates in future.

*Photoeditor
After taking photos, let’s withdraw essential charm of those pictures, using edit-function of APPNAME.

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APPNAME includes all the necessary functions for taking and editing pictures.

*Effects
APPNAME offers 134 kinds of filters, and by choosing and combining them, you can easily create retro looking pictures or pictures with a film camera-like texture.
Find your favorite effect to create amazing pictures!
More filters will be added in future updates.

*Photoeditor
Use APPNAME editing tools after you take your pictures to bring out their essential charm!

元の翻訳
I want to begin creating documents for procedures in Japan, so could you tell me the date of birth of Male & Female?
Please do not forget to attach an invoice.

I much appreciate your quick work.

P.S.
Regards to the document for which I have been making inquiry some time, have you checked?
We are in very hurry.
Please email me if it do not have reached you.
We will applicate all over again.
These are so important, please reply me promptly.

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I want to begin creating documents for procedures in Japan, so could you tell me the date of birth of Male & Female?
Please kindly attach an invoice as well.

I much appreciate your quick work.

P.S.
Regards to the document for which I have been making inquiry several times, have you checked?
We are in very hurry.
Please email me if it do not have reached you.
We will apply all over again.
These are so important, please reply me promptly.

元の翻訳
As I questioned in the Forum, the following error is shown.
The URL of the website is below

Enter “ABC” into the both entry field because we are regulating access.

Also, mail address of administrator is “DEF”, password is “GHI”.

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As I questioned in the Forum, the following error is shown.
The URL of the website is below

Enter “ABC” into the both entry fields because we are restricting access.

Also, mail address of administrator is “DEF”, password is “GHI”.

元の翻訳
I understand that warranty of Vitamix is for only in the US.
So instead of me, can you ask Vitamix company for fix, because you are a trader who deals with Vitamix in the US?
These recalled goods are not what you sold, but could you please applicate?
I will pay you the necessary expenses and reward.
It would be not natural if private person ask fixing of multiple blenders, but I think it would be natural if it’s a merchant.

Would you please do me a favor?

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I understand that warranty of Vitamix is for only in the US.
So instead of me, could you ask Vitamix company for fix, because you are a trader who deals with Vitamix in the US?
These recalled goods are not what you sold, but could you please apply for fix instead of me?
I will pay you the necessary expenses and reward.
It would be not natural if private person ask fixing of multiple blenders, but I think it would be natural if it’s a merchant.

Would you please do me a favor?

元の翻訳
Most of Japanese takes very long holiday in mid-August.
As I heard, for example for 9 days or 14 days at longest.
Using that holiday, Japanese go back to their hometown all at once.
They visit also their own hometown or their wives’ hometown.
Every their grandfather or grandmother are overjoyed.

Because they go back or have travels simultaneously, Shinkansen or airplanes are always extremely packed. In highway, it’s jamming for several tens of kilometers, even disgustingly.
If foreigners come to Japan, they might be ought to avoid mid-August.

I see you study Japanese. I’ll study English too.

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Most Japanese take a very long holiday in mid-August.
From what I've heard, for example, they may take 9 days off, or 14 days at the longest.
Taking advantage of the holiday, Japanese go back to their hometowns all at once.
They visit also their own hometowns or their wives’ hometowns.
Their grandfathers and grandmothers are overjoyed by their return.

Because they all go back or go traveling simultaneously, the shinkansen and airplanes are always extremely packed. On the highways, it’s obnoxiously jammed for several tens of kilometers.
If foreigners come to Japan, they probably should avoid mid-August.

I see you study Japanese. I study English too.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your message.
The merchandise is in stock.
Once you order one, we’ll ship it.

Thank you.

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Thank you for your message.
The merchandise is in stock.
Once you order one, we will ship it.

Thank you.

元の翻訳
Nice to meet you.

I am Japanese seller A, who earn 500 million JPY in a year on Amazon US.

Congratulations on opening event. I guess you are having busy days.

Actually I got know today that the event is held. I really wanted to participate to it, but unfortunately I could not set my available day in next week.

However, this event is very worth for sellers. So, although I cannot join event this time, can I buy texts which you are going to distribute in the event?

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Nice to meet you.

I am a Japanese seller A, who earn 500 million JPY in a year on Amazon US.

Congratulations on your opening event. I guess you are having busy days.

Actually I got to know today that the event is held. I really wanted to participate in it, but unfortunately I could not set my available day in next week.

However, this event is very worth for sellers. So, although I cannot join the event this time, can I buy leaflets which you are going to distribute in the event?

元の翻訳
As schedule, we’ll ship on 13th-14th, and normally it’ll arrive within 3-5 days.
However expected arrival date may go beyond the schedule in case of delay of customs clearance or USPS.
Can I continue your order?

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We will ship the item on 13th or 14th, as scheduled, and it will arrive in 3 to 5 days under the normal circumstance.
However, expected arrival date may be delayed in case of delay caused by customs clearance or USPS.
May we continue processing your order?

元の翻訳
As schedule, we’ll ship on 13th-14th, and normally it’ll arrive within 3-5 days.
However expected arrival date may go beyond the schedule in case of delay of customs clearance or USPS.
Can I continue your order?

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As schedule, we will ship on 13th-14th, and normally it will arrive within 3-5 days.
However the expected arrival date may go beyond the schedule in case of delay of customs clearance or USPS.
Can I continue your order?

元の翻訳
Thank you for inquiry the other day.
We decided to lower the price of VOLVO S60 which you made enquiry.
The new CIF price is $XXX.
This car is in very good condition. Its engine is in good health, and exterior and interior is very nice, there is no problem at all really.
We exchanged its timing-belt also so you can drive it for pretty long time with no worry.
If you have any question, please do not hesitate and ask us.
We wish your good consideration.

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Thank you for inquiry the other day.
We decided to lower the price of VOLVO S60 which you made an enquiry about.
The new CIF price is $XXX.
This car is in a very good condition. Its engine is in good health, and the exterior and the interior are very nice, there is no problem at all really.
We exchanged its timing-belt also so you can drive it for pretty long time with no worry.
If you have any question, please do not hesitate and ask us.
We wish your good consideration.

元の翻訳
We are getting claims, because there was error in product-name on Amazon end.

In Amazon US, the product title is 4-in-one set, but in Amazon JP, this product is distributed as one.

We have also responsibility that we didn’t notice for wrong title, however regards to this circumstance, I think we are not supposed to be blamed.
Therefore, we want you to cope with this so that our account valuation wouldn’t get fall with customer’s claim etc.

Currently, we are coping with customers to whom we already shipped, or those who ordered the article, like returning, paying back.
We are having very hard time, of course those customers too.

We want you to deal with this promptly.

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We are getting complaints, because there was an error in product-name on Amazon end.

In Amazon US, the product title is 4-in-one set, but in Amazon JP, this product is distributed as one.

We have also responsibility that we did not notice for the wrong title, however regards to this circumstance, I think we are not supposed to be blamed.
Therefore, we want you to cope with this so that our account valuation would not get fall with customer’s claim etc.

Currently, we are coping with customers to whom we already shipped, or those who ordered the article, like returning, paying back.
We are having a very hard time, of course those customers too.

We want you to deal with this promptly.

元の翻訳
I am sorry that in email i sent last time, there was a mistake.
The estimated buying price of the first year is $42000
I want to settle the number of stocking, checking selling movement in Japan.
I am aiming for double stock from this year.↵

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We are sorry that there was a mistake in our last email.
The estimated buying price of the first year is $42,000.
We would like to settle the purchase quantity, monitoring sales trends in Japan.
Our goal is to double the purchase amount in a year.