honeylemon (honeylemon003) — 付けたレビュー

元の翻訳
Thank you for your continued patronage.
When will you send the invoice for the product that was ordered yesterday?
We are sorry for hurrying you, but we would really appreciate it if you could send the invoice by the end of today.

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Thank you for your continued patronage.
When can you send the invoice for the product that we ordered yesterday?
We are sorry for hurrying you, but we would really appreciate it if you could send the invoice by the end of today.

元の翻訳
I'd like the items that I ordered, and do not need any different items. If I receive something different from what I ordered, I will return it to you.
I ordered A, B, and C. Which of the three is this e-mail explaining about?
I'd like to know the availability of A, B, and C as well as when they will be sent to me. I plan to cancel my order if there is no stock.
Thank you.

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I'd like the items that I ordered, and do not need any other items. If I receive something different from what I ordered, I will return it to you.
I ordered A, B, and C. Which of the three is this e-mail explaining about?
I'd like to know the availability of A, B, and C as well as when they will be sent to me. I plan to cancel my order if there is no stock.
Thank you.

元の翻訳
She has been a virgin today she is 30 years old.
The next day, she accompany with Japanese Photographer F to the shoot as a interpreter and interprete honesty all his loving words being amazed of him seducing women next to next for words attracting them well.
F is shotting women's beauty running around Seoul.
The targets are not always young women and are mothers vividly in the market or prostitutes laughing for everything cheerful.
E is sharing her heart gradually to F who has lighten air and is specialist of photo and innocent. But when F come across a beautiful danser G・・・↵

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I have kept a virgin unthinkingly until today, my 30 years old birthday.
The next day, I accompanied with Japanese Photographer F for the photo shoot as an interpreter. As F's amazing love taking skill attracting women next to next and while I was amazed to see F's love talk, I was interpreting them honesty and straight to them.
As we were traveling around Seoul, F was taking photos of beautiful women.
The targets are not always young women like prostitutes laughing for everything cheerful but are mothers working very energetic at the market.
E is sharing her heart gradually to F, who lightens the air, specializing in photography and innocent. However when F come across a beautiful dancer G・・・

元の翻訳
My friend bought 36units for $70 from the eBay seller.

He sells for ＄○○ on the eBay. You can get the seller's email address on the Paypal when you make a payment for just a unit on the Paypal. And then, you can negotiate with him about wholesale without passing through the eBay.

My friend purchased for $70 in this way from a eBay seller ○○.

I think that all of Amazon sellers in Japan purchase in this way.
This method is famous among sellers in Japan.

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My friend bought 36units for $70 from the eBay seller.

He sells for ＄○○ on eBay. You can get the seller's email address on the Paypal when you make a payment for just a unit on the Paypal. And then, you can negotiate with him about wholesale without passing through the eBay.

My friend purchased for $70 in this way from a eBay seller ○○.

I think that all of Amazon sellers in Japan purchase in this way.
This method is famous among sellers in Japan.

元の翻訳
I'm sorry for our failing.
We forgot to include postage in the price.
If you don't purchase the product yet,
I'll be grad that you decide to purchase it through other exhibitors.
I'm really sorry for the trouble.

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I'm sorry for our failure .
We forgot to include postage in the price.
If you haven't purchased the product yet,
I'll be great if you purchase it through other sellers.
I'm really sorry for this trouble.

元の翻訳
Thank you very much for your decision.
The price is $550.00 plus $35.00. At first, please pay the total amount following the instruction.
Once I confirm your payment, I will refund you $50.00 promptly.
And please note that, it is OK for me to describe that the value of the item is $50 and that is a gift,
but I cannot be responsible if it is lost or damaged during the transportation.
If you accept the it, I will describe per your instruction.
(Please understand that this is the special handling only for you.)
If you confirm and accept the above explanation, please pay.
I am looking forward to your reply.

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Thank you very much for your decision.
The price is $550.00 plus $35.00. At first, please pay the total amount following the instruction.
Once I confirm your payment, I will refund you $50.00 promptly.
Please note that, it is OK for me to describe that $50 for the value of the item, and↵
is a gift,
but I can not be responsible if it is lost or damaged during the transportation.
If you accept it, I will describe them with your instruction.
(Please understand that this is the special handling only for you.)
If you confirm and accept the details above explanation, please make a payment.
I am looking forward to receiving your reply.

元の翻訳
yamahaya88102012様へ

やぁ

我々の国のボルテージは220vだよ

アレックスのおかげで。

"respond"ボタンでメッセージを返信するか、メールしてください。

修正後
yamahaya88102012様へ

やぁ

我々の国のボルテージは220vだよ

アレックスより。

"respond"ボタンでメッセージを返信するか、メールしてください。↵
↵
(Best regards, は、文章の最後に付けるあいさつ文なので、「かしこ」「敬具」などとなると思います。）↵

元の翻訳
本当にルークを残りの注文に追加してもよろしいですか？
私たちは商品のご用意ができており、Paypalリクエストを送信します。

ディスカウントはルークに対しては4つ分です。
ルークの剣（ライトセーバー）に対してディスカウントは提供しておりませんが、例外扱いとすることができます。
これは100.00ドルの割引になります。
ご返答がありましたらすぐにご用意いたします。

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本当にルークを現在の注文に追加してもよろしいですか？
私たちは商品のご用意ができ次第、Paypalリクエストを送信します。

（I will get this ready　となっているので、未来形で訳した方がよいかと思います。）↵
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ディスカウントはルーク4つ分です。
ルークの剣（ライトサーベル）に対してディスカウントは提供しておりませんが、例外扱いとすることができます。
これは100.00ドルの割引になります。
ご返答がありましたらすぐにご用意いたします。

元の翻訳
Hello.

I am writing this to show you about the not yet arrived products which I told you before.
Please confirm it.

The products arrived a lot
Bose Companion5 1
Tracking number: No.000000
Unit Price: $0000

The products arrived less
Bose Wave music system 3 white 7

The product not arrived yet
Bose Companiou 20 3

I need to know the current status of shippment, so please take a moment to let us know it.

Best Regards
This e-mail is about some products which hasn't arrive yet.

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Hello.

I am writing this email to let you know about lacking of products. I received more and less product than I have ordered.
Please check it your side too.

The products arrived more than that I ordered,
Bose Companion5 X 1
Tracking number: No.000000
Unit Price: $0000

The products arrived less than that I ordered
Bose Wave music system X 3 white X 7

The product that hasn't arrived,
Bose Companiou 20, X 3

Please advice us current status of shipment.

Best Regards
↵
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(This e-mail is about some products which hasn't arrive yet. )

元の翻訳
選手たちは本当に素晴らしかったと日本監督のアルベルト・ザッケローニは語った
観客も輝いていたしファンのサポートも本当に選手たちの助けになった
試合を見たら勝ったこと自体はそれほどの驚きではないかもしれないが、我々は予期せぬ何かに打たれて最後の最後でチームが力を出すことができた

私が日本に来た理由はこのチームをワールドカップにふさわしいチームにすることだった、とイタリア人監督は付け加えた
それを実現できてよかったし、これからもがんばり続けて世界に衝撃を与えていきたい

日本は4年前にも同じことを実現しており、今回は次のブラジルでのトーナメントへの進出を決めた最初の国となったが、本田が91分目に冷静さを保っていなかったらそれは実現しなかっただろう

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選手たちは本当に素晴らしかったと日本監督のアルベルト・ザッケローニは語った
観客も輝いていたしファンのサポートも本当に選手たちの助けになった
試合を見たら勝ったこと自体はそれほどの驚きではないかもしれないが、我々は予期せぬ何かに打たれて最後の最後でチームが力を出すことができた

私が日本に来た理由はこのチームをワールドカップに出場できるチームにすることだった、とイタリア人監督は付け加えた
それを実現できてよかったし、これからもがんばり続けて世界に衝撃を与えていきたい

日本は4年前にも同じことを実現しており、今回は次のブラジルでのトーナメントへの進出を決めた最初の国となったが、本田が91分目に冷静さを保っていなかったらそれは実現しなかっただろう