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元の翻訳
Hello,

Unfortunately, it is extremely difficult for us to get the product in at the moment due to the high demand.
I apologize the inconvenience, but we will send you a refund.

I'm sorry and I look forward to your order again in the future.

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Hello,

Unfortunately, it is extremely difficult for us to get the product in at the moment due to the high demand.
I apologize for the inconvenience, but we will send you a refund.

I'm sorry and I look forward to your order again in the future.

元の翻訳
自己紹介をさせて下さい。
私は(メーカー名)でセールスディレクターをしています。
弊社製品をご紹介したく、電話でアポイントメントと取らせていただけたらと思いご連絡させて頂きました。

弊社は新しい蒸発機や他の製品を開発し、市場に出しています。詳細は以下のリンクよりご覧頂けます。
つい最近発売したのが、電子タバコの商品ラインアップで、これには使い捨て電子タバコ、電子フッカ及びフッカ用の液体です。

www.xxx or----

お返事お待ちしております。
もし何か特別価格等、ご協力出来る様でしたら遠慮なくお知らせ下さい。
価格は販売契約書が(メーカー名)に提出されるまでお話しません。
価格は購入される量と物によって変動します。

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自己紹介をさせて下さい。
私は(国名)の(メーカー名)でセールスディレクターをしています。
弊社製品をご紹介したく、電話でアポイントメントと取らせていただけたらと思いご連絡させて頂きました。

弊社は新しい蒸発機や他の製品を開発し、市場に出しています。詳細は以下のリンクよりご覧頂けます。
つい最近発売したのが、電子タバコの商品ラインアップで、これには使い捨て電子タバコ、電子フッカ及びフッカ用の液体です。

WWW.xxx or http://WWW.xxx

お返事お待ちしております。
特別価格等、何かご協力出来る様でしたら遠慮なくお知らせ下さい。
価格は販売契約書が(メーカー名)に提出されるまでお話しません。
価格は購入される製品の数量によって変動します。

元の翻訳
We sincerely apologize that we've sent a wrong item.

Please follow the following steps in order to return the product.
1. Please apply for the custom duty refund at the closest customhouse.
2. We will email you with return address.
3. Please return the item to the return shipping address with "Return Product" Label on the package.
4. Please take a picture of the shipping label and email it to us.
5. When we received the item back and confirm it, we will refund send you a refund (return shipping fee, shipping and what you paid for the product).

Again, we apologize the inconvenience and I look forward to hearing from you.

修正後
We sincerely apologize that we've sent a wrong item.

Please follow the following steps in order to return the product.
1. Please apply for the custom duty refund at the closest customhouse.
2. We will email you with return address.
3. Please return the item to the return shipping address with "Return Product" Label on the package.
4. Please take a picture of the shipping label and email it to us.
5. When we received the item back and confirmed it, we will send you a refund (return shipping fee, shipping and what you paid for the product).

Again, we apologize for the inconvenience and I look forward to hearing from you.

元の翻訳
I have contacted UPS and got the response below.

Has it been really shipped? Could you please check it for me?

I have placed an order on September 18th and it's been over 20 days since then.

I have requested several times that I would like you to ship this Rug as soon as possible.
I've requested few times to deliver the item correctly since I have experienced few troubles with you recently.
How come it takes that long to receive the item?

I would like you to deliver this package even if it's just an one Rug by tomorrow.
Please confirm and have it deliver by tomorrow.

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I have contacted UPS and got the response below.

Has it been really shipped? Could you please check it for me?
<Has it really been shipped?>↵

I have placed an order on September 18th and it's been over 20 days since then.
<I have placed this order on September 18th, and it's been over 20 days since then.>↵

I have requested several times that I would like you to ship this Rug as soon as possible.
I've requested few times to deliver the item correctly since I have experienced few troubles with you recently.
How come it takes that long to receive the item?

I would like you to deliver this package even if it's just an one Rug by tomorrow.
<I hope that you deliver my order by tomorrow, even if it's only 1 rug.>↵
↵
Please confirm and have it deliver by tomorrow.↵
<Please confirm and have it delivered by tomorrow.>

元の翻訳
I am very sorry. I have stated that the lens filter is included with the product on item description, but it does not comes with the lens filter (only caps).

Since there was an item description error, I can accept refund.

Please let me know and I look forward to hearing from you.
I apologize the inconvenience.

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I am very sorry. I stated that the lens filter is included with the product on item description, but it does not come with the lens filter (only caps).

Since there was an item description error, I can accept refund.

If you have any question about your purchase, please let me know and I look forward to hearing from you.
I apologize for the inconvenience.

元の翻訳
Hello:

Could you tell me if the product in the box is exactly same product as the package? If the product in the box is different, I don't need it, so please trash it and let me know what the product is . I have purchased two helmets, but I didn't purchase the ones we are discussing now, and I believe it came with the product as a service. I look forward to hearing from you.

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Hello:

Could you tell me if the product in the box is exactly same as the package? If the product in the box is different, I don't need it, so please trash it and let me know what the product is . I have purchased two helmets, but I didn't purchase the ones we are discussing now, and I believe it came with the product as a service. I look forward to hearing from you.

元の翻訳
私たちのシステムにおいて、このエントリーは問題がある可能性を認知しました。↵
追加書類が必要になるかもしれません。↵
一度、ご入力頂いた価格が正しいかどうか、又、米ドルであるかどうかのご確認をお願い致します。↵
お客様が価値（価格）の情報を正しく入力されているかどうかの確認が取れるまで、発送して頂く事はできません。

ここに表示されている価格、合計価格は私が支払いした価格、又は購入していない場合、正しい市場価格が正確に反映されています。私は嘘の申告をした場合、グッズや商品の輸出入の法の上で刑事または民事で罰則を受ける可能性がある事を理解しています。

あなたが入力した価値（価格）が正しいかどうかご確認下さい。
クリックして提出する前に正確な数値を入力して下さい。

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私たちのシステムにおいて、このエントリーの潜在的な問題を特定しました追加書類が必要になるかもしれません。一度、ご入力頂いた価格が正しいかどうか、又、米ドルであるかどうかのご確認をお願い致します。お客様が数値（価格）の情報を正しく入力されているかどうかの確認が取れるまで、発送して頂く事はできません。

ここに表示されている価格、合計価格は私が支払いした価格、又は購入していない場合、正しい市場価格が正確に反映されています。私は偽証した場合、グッズや商品の輸出入に関する法令に違反した場合は、刑事または民事で罰則が課せられる可能性がある事を理解しています。

あなたが入力した数値（価格）が正しいかどうかご確認下さい。
クリックして提出する前に正確な数値を入力して下さい。

元の翻訳
The iOS7 has many bugs, but its appearance is beautiful and developed pretty good overall.

A lot of my friends and I have upgraded it to iOS7 and we haven't faced the crucial problems that could lead serious issues for us yet.

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The iOS7 has many bugs, but its appearance is beautiful and is developed pretty good overall.

A lot of my friends and I have upgraded to iOS7, and we haven't faced any crucial problems that could lead to serious issues for us yet.

元の翻訳
The iOS7 has many bugs, but its appearance is beautiful and developed pretty good overall.

A lot of my friends and I have upgraded it to iOS7 and we haven't faced the crucial problems that could lead serious issues for us yet.

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Although iOS7 have many bugs, its appearance is beautiful and developed pretty well overall.

A lot of my friends including me have upgraded to iOS7 and we haven't faced critical problems that could lead serious problem for us yet.

元の翻訳
Thanks for pointing it out.
In order to avoid the bugs in iOS7, we reluctantly designed it the way it is now.
We will be leaving it as it is until bugs are fixed.
We definitely would like to fix it if we figure out the way to solve this issue beforehand though.

修正後
Thanks for pointing it out.
In order to avoid bugs in iOS7, we reluctantly designed it the way it is now.
We will leave it as it is until the bugs are fixed.
Even so, we would like to figure out a way to solve this issue as soon as possible.

元の翻訳
Do you know the Shisa?
People in Okinawa place shisa on their rooftops or flanking the gates to their houses.
Shisa are wards, believed to protect from some evils.

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Do you know Shisa?
People in Okinawa put Shisa on their rooftops or flanking the gates to their houses.
Shisa are wards, believed to protect from some evils.