坂本 理 (eigoya-sam) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
To contribute to the income of the company, bearing in mind that pursuit of a career means to commit him/herself to reducing the cost for operational jobs that s/he does, or to increasing the sales in his/her customer-related jobs.

When I was appointed a performance development manager, I wasn't able to read profit-loss charts nor could I do the cost calculation. I couldn't complete a report for them.
So I decided "to figure out about what I knew little." Then I read books on accounting and attended seminars. Three months later, I became able to write up a perfect report.

Developing a new business is to produce "one" out of "zero."

修正後
To contribute to the profits of the company, bearing in mind that pursuit of a career means to commit him/herself to reducing the cost for operational jobs that s/he does, or to increasing the sales in his/her customer-related jobs.

When I was appointed a performance development manager, I wasn't able to read profit-loss charts nor could I do the cost calculation. I couldn't complete a report for them.
So I decided "to figure out about what I knew little." Then I read books on accounting and attended seminars. Three months later, I became able to write up a perfect report.

Developing a new business is to produce "one" out of "zero."

元の翻訳
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修正後
前略　メールをくださり、ありがとうございました。ちょうど昨日、本品は６月２日（月曜）船積み予定との連絡を受け取ったところです。

ご注文の品は、御社指図どおり、DHLにて発送いたしました。本注文の代金は全額受領いたしております。ありがとうございました。

送付いただきました品は、本日受領いたしました。