Translator Reviews ( Japanese → English )

Additional info: スピーチをするような語り口調の文書にしてください

Japanese

直訳すぎるから、もう少し自然な英語の表現にしてほしかった。こんな翻訳は受け取れない。」と言われました。

そうしたら、今度からは、事前にヒアリングをして、“ここは、目立つ文章なので、直訳ではなく、キャッチコピーの文章も作成できますよ！”や、“読みやすい英語にするリライト作業はいかがですか？”など、どんどん商品を良くしていきましょう。

これは、フィードバックとしても重要ですが、クレームをチャンスに変えられるのは、直接、お客様と話をしている、クレームを受けている営業だけです。

English

It is way too straight forward, and wish it was put more in a native English expressions. This translation is far from acceptance."

Well then, from next time by offering a hearing session ahead of time and actively improving the item by proposing like "This line needs to stand out so instead of the direct translation we could come up with an alternate catch copy!", or "How about incorporating rewriting work for the better-to-read English?"

These are important feesbacks, but turning these claims into opporutunities is what the sales rep can do who receive those claims from the customers for real.

Reviews ( 1 )

premiumdotz rated this translation result as ★★ 12 Aug 2014 at 12:35

original
It is way too straight forward, and wish it was put more in a native English expressions. This translation is far from acceptance."

Well then, from next time by offering a hearing session ahead of time and actively improving the item by proposing like "This line needs to stand out so instead of the direct translation we could come up with an alternate catch copy!", or "How about incorporating rewriting work for the better-to-read English?"

These are important feesbacks, but turning these claims into opporutunities is what the sales rep can do who receive those claims from the customers for real.

corrected
This was what the customer said: "It is way too literal. I wish it was translated more naturally. This translation is far from acceptance."

From here on, conduct a consultation with the customer beforehand with statements to gradually improve your product such as: "This line needs to stand out so instead of a literal translation, we could come up with an alternate catch copy!" or "How about incorporating a rewriting project to make it easier to read?"

This is an important feedback. However, turning these claims into opportunities is the job of a sales rep who receive claims from directly speaking with the customers.

A lot of spelling, grammatical and translation misses. There were a lot of words that were unnecessary and it made the translation harder to understand.

[tearz]

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