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元の翻訳
Hello.
Thank you for sending an E-mail last week.

Japan is gradually getting warmer, how about there?
I hope it wll be warm soon.

By the way, let me make sure about the items I ordered.
I ordered 12 items that includes in what you shipped last week.

Have you already shipped 880 52 50 4?

This is the list of products that I'm ordering.

Could you ship ○○ immediately? I ordered it more than 10 days ago.

And then, I'd like to add to place an order.
Here is the list.

Thanks.
Let me contact with me anytime.

修正後
Hello.
Thank you for sending an E-mail last week.

Japan is gradually getting warmer, how about there?
I hope it will be warm soon.

By the way, let me make sure about the items I ordered.
I ordered 12 items, including what you shipped last week.

Have you already shipped 880 52 50 4?

This is the list of products that I'm ordering.

Could you ship ○○ immediately? I ordered it more than 10 days ago.

And then, I'd like to place an additional order.
Here is the list:

Thanks.
Let me contact with me anytime [?].

元の翻訳
Dear customer.

We contact with you about the product that you made a bit.

Although we had sent the product to you on 25th February,↵
it returned to us from international post office on 2nd March since the cardboard of product was too much large.
So, we today resent you to the product again by EMS.
It will be delivered to you two days later if there's no problem.

We have to apologize for the inconvenience caused by delayed delivery service.
Please wait a moment until the product is delivered.

Regards.

修正後
Dear customer.

We are contacting you about the product that you made a bit.

Although we sent you the product on February 25, it was returned to us from the international post office on March 2 since the cardboard box was too large.
So, we today resent you the product again by EMS.
It will be delivered to you in two days if there's no problem.

We apologize for the inconvenience caused by the delay.
Please wait for a while until the product is delivered.

Regards,