Leslie (resuri525) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
The product that you bid actually is costlier than the actual price you bid .However, since it was my mistake I was thinking of sending you the product with the price that you bid.
However, the stock of the product is located in another store,Iam afraid that it will take 5days for me to be able to send it to you.
Iam very much sorry for the trouble that I have caused you.Please think about it carefully .

If the product that you have proposed is not necessary,I would like to refund the money right away.
Iam very much sorry but I would like you to cancel.
Please be good to me.

修正後
The product that you bid actually is costlier than the actual price you bid. However, since it was my mistake, I was thinking of sending you the product with the price that you bid.
However, as the stock of the product is located in another store, I am afraid that it will take 5 days for me to be able to send it to you.
I am very much sorry for the trouble that I have caused you. Please think about it carefully [unclear].

If the product that you have proposed is not necessary, I would like to refund you the money right away.
I am very much sorry but I would like you to cancel.
Please be good to me [unnatural].

元の翻訳
Link express is FUJITSU `s forwading product which combined the best performing DTS and DB-EXPRESS with improved functions.
The Linkexpress supports alot of main frames, UNIX aswell as PC plot forms and ets, TCP/IP, FNA`s protocol and etc, File and Symfoware, Oracle, SQL Server`s data base and etc.That is why this product can deliver easy,reliable, and speedy results of existing assets of file forwarding business.

修正後
Link express is FUJITSU's forwarding product which combines the best performing DTS and DB-EXPRESS with improved functions.
The Linkexpress supports a lot of main frames, UNIX as well as PC plot forms and ets, TCP/IP, FNA`s protocol and etc, File and Symfoware, Oracle, SQL Server`s data base and etc.That is why this product can deliver easy,reliable, and speedy results for existing assets of file forwarding business.

元の翻訳
allow me to report these 2 below: ↵
the KPI achievement status , improvement policy, and etc.
At the time also allow me to report the performance etc of the report article itself.

修正後
Allow me to report the following two items: the KPI achievement status, improvement policy, and so on.
At that time, also allow me to report upon the performance and so on of the article itself.