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I created a PC for programming beginners, "Ichigojam" which is cheap and can be easily used by children.
You individually have to prepare, TV with video input terminal, keyboard that is connectable to PS/2, and a power source with micro USB terminal.

It is a soldered version of Ichigojam with round shape and compact hand made codes.

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I created a PC for programming beginners (novice programmers), "Ichigojam" which is inexpensive and can easily be used by children.
You are required to prepare a TV with video input terminal, a keyboard that is connectable to PS/2, and a power source with micro USB terminal.

It is a soldered version of Ichigojam with round shape and compact hand made cords.

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Thank you for your message.

If the product is lost, we can check where the product is lost.
There is a small possibility of the loss that we can't really help.
For the case of such a loss, we will take responsibilities such as refund.

I'm not well aware of shipments to outside countries, but we will check as much as possible.

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Thank you for your message.

If the product is lost, we can check where the product was lost.
There is a small possibility of that kind of loss that we can't really help.
For the case of such a loss, we will take responsibilities such as refund.

I'm not well aware of shipments to outside countries, but we will check as much as possible.

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Thank you very much for the purchase.
I sent you a brand new item.
The box is opened and the batteries are gone because customs confiscated it.
It happens when batteries are found by an X ray.

It is not unusual in the shipment from Japan to outside counties, but I'm very sorry anyway.
As I should, I will refund you for batteries with $7.

By the way, you told me that the item is much cheaper at a different store, but the purchase price you told me is impossible. It must be fake.

The return of the item is accepted.
In that case, shipping costs must be borne by the purchaser.
The money will be repaid after the item arrives here and the check of the item is complete.

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Thank you very much for the purchase.
I sent you a brand new item.
The box is opened and the batteries are gone because customs confiscated it.
It happens when batteries are found by X ray.

It is not unusual in the shipment from Japan to outside countries, but I'm very sorry anyway.
As I should, I will refund you $7, which is for the batteries.

By the way, you told me that the item is much cheaper at a different store, but the purchase price you told me is impossible. It must be fake.

The return of the item is accepted.
In that case, shipping costs must be borne by the purchaser.
The money will be repaid after the item arrives here and the check of the item is complete.

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The time may start at a sightly different time depending on our condition.

The applications for "Horror Live in the Temple" and "o-nest Special Live" are different.
You can choose either of two following options for tickets.

1. Attach 3 application tickets A, B, and C that came with the single CD TOGETHER to a postcard and send it.
2. Attach an application ticket for the soundtrack to a postcard and send it.

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The live may start at a sightly different time depending on our condition.

The applications for "Horror Live in the Temple" and "o-nest Special Live" are different.
You can choose either of two following options for tickets.

1. Attach 3 application tickets A, B, and C that came with the single CD TOGETHER to a postcard and send it.
2. Attach an application ticket for the soundtrack to a postcard and send it.

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I'm considering the purchase.

Will you be able to install the log in function that allows me to log in with my Twitter in the next update?
(I'm worried because it seems to be very hard.)
Also, please let me know if you know approximately when the next update will be.

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I'm considering to purchase the product. (購入の後に目的語がないので不自然な気がしました）

Will you be able to install the login function that allows me to log in with my Twitter in the next update?（←このようなWill you be able toとなると、個人的なFavorをお願いしているような雰囲気になると思うので、Are you planning to implement the function that would enable users to login with their Twitter account with the next update? のようにされたほうがいいかもしれません）
(I'm worried because the implementation of the function seems to be hard.)
Also, please let me know if you know approximately when the next update will be.

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-The payment must be done by a credit card.

[To prevent resale and for the security purpose, we are very strict of the following rules]

-Please make sure you purchase with your own a-ticket membership ID.

-The name on the a-ticket membership ID used to purchase the ticket will appear on the ticket.

-Tickets will be given only to the person himself on the a-ticket membership ID shown.

You have to show your ID that has a picture your face so to be identified.

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-The payment must be made by a credit card.

[To prevent resale and for the security purpose, we are very strict of the following rules]

-Please make sure you purchase with your own a-ticket membership ID.

-The name on the a-ticket membership ID will appear on the ticket.

-Tickets can be retrieved by only the person whose name is appeared on the a-ticket.

Identification with your photo ID is required when retrieving tickets.

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Please read the terms below carefully and purchase if you fully understand and accept them.

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Please read the terms below carefully and make sure you fully understand and accept them before purchasing.

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I sent the good to an American customer who purchased, but I sent it 3 days after the Expected Ship Date. I want to know if it is considered as a violation of the Amazon's user policy. If so, I want the evidence.
Also, if I violated the policy, do I have to pay all the money back and give up the good?

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I sent the product to an American customer who purchased it, but I sent it 3 days after the Expected Ship Date. I want to know if this is considered as a violation of Amazon's user policy. If so, I want the evidence.
Also, if I violated the policy, do I have to pay all the money back and give up the product?

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I'm so glad that you send me an e-mail after I left. Since then, I've wished to visit you again.

I plan to go to the U.S. on July, so I'll let you know the details later on. I think I'm staying at the ABC Hotel in Las Vegas, so if you know any cheap plans or some discount campaigns, please let me know.

I look forward to having good times with you.

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I'm so glad that you sent me an e-mail after I left. Since then, I've wished to visit you again.

I plan to go to the U.S. on July, so I'll let you know the details later on. I think I'm staying at the ABC Hotel in Las Vegas for 4 days, so if you know any cheap plans or some discount campaigns, please let me know.

I look forward to having good times with you.