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As a result of trying to pay I had the other day in the "Invoice 008", because the credit limit is over, I could not pay.

Sorry to trouble you, would you re-create the invoice as follows:?

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Bose Wave music system 3 White 10 units.

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Bose Wave music system 3 Titanium 5 units.
Bose Wave music system 3 Graphite 5 units.

I need your help.

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As a result of trying to pay I had the other day in the "Invoice 008", because the credit limit is over, I could not pay.

Sorry to trouble you, would you re-create the invoice as follows:?

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Bose Wave music system 3 White 10 units.

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Bose Wave music system 3 Titanium 5 units.
Bose Wave music system 3 Graphite 5 units.

I need your help.

残念ですが、これでは意味が通じにくいです。あなたの文章をなるべく変えずに訂正をします。↵
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文法無視が一番問題です。（どうでもいいような状況になっていますが、基本的なところはダメです）↵
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As a result of trying to pay I had the other day in the "Invoice 008", because the credit limit is over, I could not pay.のところ。↵
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I tried to pay for the “invoice 008”, but I couldn’t do that because the payment amount was above the credit card limit. とか。↵
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the credit limit is over, もだめなのだろうと思います。時制の一致でwasにしなければ。↵
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Sorry to trouble you, would you re-create the invoice as follows:?↵
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接続詞がない。↵
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Thank you for contact.

In stock is nothing now.

I think that we can find that it's if we have time.

There is no excuse, and to you to contact many times.

■ Hi, I sent a photo the other day, I was writing red circle in the photo
Parts of part do you come with?

I will buy it if come with it.

Please contact as soon as possible.

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読みづらいし、間違いがあります。↵
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Thank you for contact.　your contactとか the contact　とか冠詞があってもいいような気がしますが、今ではあまりこだわりがないようです。

In stock is nothing now.　　　　　I don't have it in stock　now. とか

I think that we can find that it's if we have time.　　　ここのところがくどすぎて間違いに近いと思います。つまりthat it'sです。　

There is no excuse, and to you to contact many times.　　ここはわかりません。

■ Hi, I sent a photo the other day, I (was writing) （marked a ) red circle in the photo
Parts of part do you come with? これは多分だれにもわからないでしょう。

I will buy it if come with it.

Please contact as soon as possible.

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Inside and out of the shit bag
Man is a shit bag sensory organ gathered.
But that shit bag, does not have the means to make sure that his is himself.
Of the UK consulting firm Synectics↵
Was elected 26 out of "genius living 100 people in the world" (the Japanese highest)↵
Robot engineer, Hiroshi Ishiguro.
While widening technology, science, and philosophy, the area of thinking,
To deepen the discussion on the basis of tweet that has been calling for about two years,↵
Spelled carefully the message he want to convey really now, the whole body of the essay.

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Inside and out of the shit bag
Man is a shit bag (with many sensory organs gathered )　←　sensory organ gathered.
But that shit bag (,いらない） does not have（ the means） (the meanでもいいのでは） （to make sure）（これはto certify) that his is himself (a human).
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これはHiroshi Ishiguroが主ですから英語では最初に出すべきです。それでないと皆は読んでくれない。↵
Hiroshi Ishiguro, a robot engineer,was elected the 26th person out of "genius living 100 people in the world" (the Japanese highest)　by the UK consulting firm Synectics.
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下の代わり」↵
「Of the UK consulting firm Synectics
Was elected 26 out of "genius living 100 people in the world" (the Japanese highest)↵
Robot engineer, Hiroshi Ishiguro.」↵
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あとは省略します。↵
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元の翻訳
I understood that.
I am satisfied with the response of your company.

I would like to reorder it right away.
The amount is 10.
I hope the offered items can meet my expectation on a quality basis.

Please kindly send me an invoice so that I can pay by PayPal.

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I understood that.
I am satisfied with the response of your company.

I would like to reorder it right away.
The amount is 10.
I hope the offered items can meet my expectation on a quality basis.

Please kindly send me an invoice so that I can pay by PayPal.↵
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ちょっと気楽な会話と思ってください。↵
あなたの英文は完璧で、どもにも間違いはありませんが、硬すぎる感じがしませんか。↵
もしあなたがnative speakerだったら、とんでもないことを私は言っていることになって申し訳ないのですが。↵
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OK, I understand.↵
I am satisfied with your company's reaction.↵
I would like to place an additional order for 10 pieces.↵
I expect you to provide nice products.↵
とか。↵

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With this unit, we can play normal GameCube software without any trouble.
I'm sorry that I have no detail information for other issue.
Would you please access to the URL shown below that I hope that will help you.↵
Best regards.

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With this unit, we can play normal GameCube software without any trouble.
I'm sorry that I have no detail information for other issue.
Best regards.

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This item is very expensive, since it is traded at a premium price.

If you would not mind, would you please give me your direct e-mail address?
It is difficult to offer you any lower price than that, as it is the sum of purchase price, shipping fee to the U.S., and purchase fee in * market.
If you directly buy it, it is possible to negotiate the price within the amount of the fee.

It is not a problem for me, even if you would like to buy at the offered price in * market. I will appreciate your answer.

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This item is very expensive, since it is traded at a premium price.

If you would not mind, would you please give me your direct e-mail address?
It is difficult to offer you any lower price than that, as it is the sum of purchase price, shipping fee to the U.S., and purchase fee in * market　（ここは物件は落札して、その手数料だから service charge (またはcommission）for bidding at * marketではないですか？）.
If you directly buy it, it is possible to negotiate the price within the amount of the fee.

It is not a problem for me, even if you would like to buy at the offered price in * market. I will appreciate your answer.

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At the first time, he and Owada, who is Super High School Level Gang Leader, had a quarrel all the time, but they got along with thanks for an incident.
Doujinshi often depicts him with Ogawa, so you should check it out !

His fine performances are available to see in chapter 2.

And also, Ogawa and Kiyotaka opened up to one another and became best friends after one case of murder was settled.
Especially what I look forward to is that Makoto takes in the insident which Ogawa and Kiyotaka had been best friend.

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At the first time, （at the first time とはめったに使わない、使わない。at firstでしょう）　he and Owada, who is Super High School Level Gang Leader, had a quarrel （all the time　なら quarrels かもしれない？）all the time, but they got along with thanks for （thanks to ではないですか）an incident.
Doujinshi often depicts him with Ogawa, so you should check it out !

His fine performances are available to see　（to be seenではないですか） in chapter 2.

And also, Ogawa and Kiyotaka opened up to one another and became best friends after one case of murder was settled.
Especially what I look forward to is that Makoto takes in the insident （incident では)↵
（in が必要です。つまりin which）which Ogawa and Kiyotaka had been best friend.

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I am very pleased the the luca that you made. The hair color, eye color, hair style, length of hair, volume of hair, pink outfit, it's all perfect. I would like you to make the same doll. I would like to bypass eBay, so how about AUS$640 with shipping cost to Japan included? (Please send pictured showing the completed products as always) Please! I am waiting for a positive response.

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I am very pleased the the luca that you made. The hair color, eye color, hair style, length of hair, volume of hair, pink outfit, it's all perfect. I would like you to make the same doll. I would like to bypass eBay, so how about AUS$640 with shipping cost to Japan included? (Please send pictured showing the completed products as always) Please! I am waiting for a positive response. ↵
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I am very pleased the the luca that you made. ↵
は　I am pleased では目的語を取ることができませんから、am pleased withと with　が必要です。↵
, pink outfit, it's all perfect.　には接続詞がありません。だから, pink outfit; it's all perfect. とセミコロンでつなぐか、, pink outfit, so it's all perfect. のようにso などの接続詞が必要です。↵
（Please send pictured showing the completed products as always) ↵
pictured は名詞にならないと思います。picture　あるいは　photo ですか。↵
この場合、冠詞が必要です。その写真は限定されていますから、the picture としなければならないのでは？（a pictureでもいいかもしれませんが限定という意味で。これはごちゃごちゃいいすぎですが）↵
completed products 今は一つの人形のことを言っているのですから↵
completed product　と単数ではないでしょうか。↵
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重箱のすみをつついているようで、すみませんが。↵
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Germany
My account has been deleted as I could not finish about supplement of the account within the deadline, however, I have been contacting your company many times, and I have informed that there is no problem on my account information by email I received on 1 Jun 2013 16:06. So I was very shocked by this case as I thought everything was going OK. （補足箇所添付有）(there is an attachment for this supplementary part)
It would be great if you can point out the lacking part of my registration information.
I will try my best to solve this problem.

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Germany
My account has been deleted as I could not finish about supplement of the account within the deadline, however, I have been contacting your company many times, and I have informed that there is no problem on my account information by email I received on 1 Jun 2013 16:06. So I was very shocked by this case as I thought everything was going OK. （補足箇所添付有）(there is an attachment for this supplementary part)
It would be great if you can point out the lacking part of my registration information.
I will try my best to solve this problem.
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わかりやすい文です。ただ、↵
finish about は　finishが他動詞として使用する場合がほとんどなので、aboutはつけないほうがいいと思います。↵
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それとhoweverは接続詞にもなりますが、その場合は意味が違って使われ大体は副詞として使われます。butという意味では使われにくいのではないでしょうか。↵
使うなら;however とセミコロンをつけて使ったほうがいいと思います。↵
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どちらも微妙ですが、調べてください。↵
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I have finished the cancellation procedure of the item you had ordered.
Now you can order the new item you need.

Today's sending out is finished,but if you give me order by 3 pm tomorrow,
I can send it out tomorrow.
Sending out is done in the defferent division.
I am the shop master.

Thank you in advance.

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I have finished the cancellation procedure of the item you had ordered.
Now you can order the new item you need.

Today's sending out is finished,but if you give me order by 3 pm tomorrow,
I can send it out tomorrow.
Sending out is done in the defferent division.
I am the shop master.

Thank you in advance.
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ここのところちょっと意味が違います。↵
Now you can order the new item you need. は↵
I am sorry to trouble you, but could you again place an order for the item you needs?↵
くらいではないですか？↵

元の翻訳
If it had AAA functionality, I'd give it 5 stars. It currently doesn't have AAA so 1 star only. Without AAA it's useless. But other than that it's perfect.

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If it had AAA functionality, I'd give it 5 stars. It currently doesn't have AAA so 1 star only. Without AAA it's useless. But other than that it's perfect.↵
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読みやすいです。↵
余談ですが、functionalityは機能性でfunctionは機能ですね。↵
あなたはＡＡＡという機能を全般としてとらえられた。だからそれに対応というか類似した機能性と。↵
ＡＡＡというある程度製品化された限定された機能ならfunctionですね。↵
訳には関係ありませんが、ちょっと思いついたことで。↵

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Japan may be most ready to accept others’ cultures and religions in the world. I’m glad that I was able to meet you.

I wonder if K lives in Japan. I would really like to talk with your friends in your university days.

The other day I visited my friend’s atelier and found a very interesting item like this.

I assume that it was produced in 1980s.

I started to post moving images on YouTube some days ago. Did I tell you about it?

Though I'm afraid that my English is good enough, if you like, please see my video. For the sake of my children’s safety, I tried not to show their faces.

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Japan may be most ready to accept others’ cultures and religions in the world. I’m glad that I was able to meet you.

I wonder if K lives in Japan. I would really like to talk with your friends in your university days.

The other day I visited my friend’s atelier and found a very interesting item like this.

I assume that it was produced in 1980s.

I started to post moving images on YouTube some days ago. Did I tell you about it?

Though I'm afraid that my English is good enough, if you like, please see my video. For the sake of my children’s safety, I tried not to show their faces.
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Though I'm afraid that my English is good enough,はたぶんあなたの勘違いで、↵
Though I'm afraid that my English is not good enough,↵
とnotが入るのではないでしょうか。たいした間違いではありませんが。

元の翻訳
Hello!

Could you please send me AUD 490 including shipping cost?

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Hello!

Could you please send me AUD 490 including shipping cost?↵
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490 AUD の主体は商品で、490 AUDを送料込みで送るというような訳になっています。↵
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Could you please send me the item at (with) AUD 490 including the shipping cost?↵
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ではないでしょうか。

元の翻訳
Shiseido the Collagen (tablet) N 126 pills is the beauty food. This includes 12 kinds of balanced ingredients such as 1000mg low molecular fish collagen in 6 tablets (recommended daily intake).
They all support both inner and outer beauty, and your happy life.
How to take: 6 tablets a day with water
Nourishment ingredient indication [per six]
Energy, Protein, Lipid, Carbohydrates, Sodium, Collagen, Hyaluronic acid(5), Ornithine (28), Royal jelly (50)

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Shiseido the Collagen (tablet) N 126 pills is the beauty food. This includes 12 kinds of balanced ingredients such as 1000mg low molecular fish collagen in 6 tablets (recommended daily intake).
They all support both inner and outer beauty, and your happy life.
How to take: 6 tablets a day with water
Nourishment ingredient indication [per six]
Energy, Protein, Lipid, Carbohydrates, Sodium, Collagen, Hyaluronic acid(5), Ornithine (28), Royal jelly (50)
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the beauty food.　the は限定的すぎます。多くの中の一つのものですからaです。↵
low molecular はlow molecular weight が必要です。↵
わかりますが、[per six　tablets]としたほうがいいと思います。↵