Lynn (lynn1234) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
Hello
Thank you for using our store recently.
Earlier, we contacted you for goods unshipping.↵
But the goods have been shipped already.
We are sorry for the wrong notice.
Please wait for a while until the arrival.
The arrival of normal international mail will be taken for two weeks to about a month.
Currently, because of the holiday season,↵
the arrival may be delayed than usual.
Please a lot of understanding.
Thank you

修正後
Hello,
Thank you for using our store recently.
Earlier, we contacted you for goods unshipping [spelling] [unnatural], but the goods have been shipped already.
We are sorry for the wrong notice.
Please wait for a while until the arrival.
The arrival of normal international mail [unnatural] will take two weeks to about a month.
Currently, because of the holiday season, the arrival may be delayed than [than indicates comparative] usual.
Please a lot of understanding [unnatural].
Thank you.

元の翻訳
I have send emails at 12/1 and 12/2, can you take a look?
I am sorry there was published mistake in the photo recently.
Snow White and 3 Tone Sunburst can be arranged immediately if you want.
In addition, it is also possible to ask Mr. N to produce White Blonde by custom order even it will take time.
Please let us know the needs of customers.
We are looking forward to hear from you.

修正後
I have send [tense confusion] emails at [wrong proposition] 12/1 and 12/2, [comma splice] can you take a look?
I am sorry there was [article missing] published mistake in the photo recently.
Snow White and 3 Tone Sunburst can be arranged immediately if you want.
In addition, it is also possible to ask Mr. N to produce White Blonde by custom order even it will take time.
Please let us know the needs of customers [mistranslation].
We look forward to hearing from you.

元の翻訳
The typical promotion I just presented made the performance of commodity A was able to increase significantly compared to last year (it increase about 30% compared to 2013). Company B was selling it from April 2013, but sales of commodity A is going well from there.
This chart is sales goal of next year. We hope it can continue to rise more than 25% next year and reach one billion yen.
My speech is over. Let Mr. C to introduce the promotional materials. Please welcome Mr. C.

修正後
The typical promotion I just presented enabled the performance of commodity A increase significantly compared to last year (it has increased about 30% compared to 2013). Company B has been selling it since April 2013, but sales of commodity A has been going well since then.
This chart is next year's sales goal. We hope it can continue to rise more than 25% next year and reach one billion yen.
My speech is over [awkward]. Let Mr. C introduce the promotional materials. Please welcome Mr. C.