Kap Siao (kapsiao_i3) — 付けたレビュー

元の翻訳
We can expect great results by decreasing the number of cancer cells through radiation therapy and doing immunotherapy instead of doing them separately.For example,the remedy called "SBRT" can emit many three-dimensional radial rays to cancer cells in any detections while controlling side effects patients have.We can expect high curative effect from it.And it lasts for only a week.So you can use it before you take immunotherapy.

修正後
We can expect great results by decreasing the number of cancer cells through radiation therapy and doing immunotherapy instead of doing them separately.For example,the remedy called "SBRT" can emit lots of three-dimensional radial rays to pinpoint cancer cells while controlling the side effects on patients.We can expect high therapeutic effect from it. And the treatment lasts for only a week so you can use it before proceeding with immunotherapy.

元の翻訳
I'm currently in London.
I will head to Holland tonight, and enter to Finland tomorrow night.
If possible, I would like to ask about the after-situation of the venture company that we have introduced.
We are free from 1pm to 3pm on Mar 20.
If it is hard to schedule, please do inform us.

修正後
We're currently in London.
We will head to Holland tonight and arrive in Finland tomorrow night.
If possible, what is the status of the venture company after it was introduced to us?
We are free from 1pm to 3pm on Mar 20.
If it is hard to schedule, please do inform us.

元の翻訳
After a long hiatus of about one yer, TOHOSHINKI's comeback formed by two members - YUNHO and CHANGMIN - for the time being after their activities had been restricted was announced in the end of November 2010.
The comeback that the whole Asia is awaiting!
"Why? (Keep Your Head Down)" released in January 26th, 2011 got 1st place in Oricon's Ringtone ranking, confirming their unshaken reputation.

修正後
After a long hiatus of about one year, TOHOSHINKI's comeback formed by two members - YUNHO and CHANGMIN - for the time being, after their activities had been restricted, was announced in the end of November 2010.
The comeback that the whole of Asia is awaiting!
"Why? (Keep Your Head Down)" released in January 26th, 2011, got 1st place in Oricon's Ringtone ranking, confirming their unshaken reputation.