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In Scotland, there are bog news about the development.
I am so sorry to bother you but I would like you to ask about the sample.
I will pay as soon as possible if you could tell me your bank account.
I really like the 00 products more than anyone.
I would like to try to sell in Japan any other way.
Then, I would like to know the circumstance and your planning and hope.
I will prepare what you like .

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In Scotland, there are bog news about the development.
-> Scotland has made it into the news over independence↵
↵
I am so sorry to bother you but I would like you to ask about the sample.
I will pay as soon as possible if you could tell me your bank account.
-> if you would be so kind as to inform me of your bank details↵
↵
I really like the 00 products more than anyone.
-> '00' is not a placeholder in English↵
↵
I would like to try to sell in Japan any other way.
-> in any way possible↵
↵
Then, I would like to know the circumstance and your planning and hope.
I will prepare what you like .↵
-> Would you be so kind as to let me know of...

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あなたからのメールを受け取りまして、お返事したいと思いさせて頂きました。
シンガポールに送ることが可能なようですね。
シンガポールに送って頂く場合の送料も含まれていますでしょうか？
BABY_G(GA-110BC,黒）をお持ちでしたら教えて頂きたいと思います。

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あなたからのメールを受け取りましたが、返信する事が出来ませんでした。
シンガポールに送ることが可能なようですね。
シンガポールに送って頂く場合の送料も含まれていますでしょうか？
BABY_G(GA-110BC,黒）をお持ちでしたら教えて頂きたいと思います。

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"About the realist"↵
items which is more than 300 yen of profits after shipping off.
-You can realist the item . Please copy the ASIN code of the item from the order screen.

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"About Re-listing"↵
(For the items with over 300 yen profits after the completion of shipping.)
-Re-list the item. Copy the ASIN code of the item from the order screen.

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11, Using account when you buy something↵
-The day of Amazon
-you e-mail address: acountusan@gmail.com
-password:
*Make sure using gift certificate.

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11, The account to be used at the time of purchase↵
- Amazon date
- e-mail address: acountusan@gmail.com
-password:
*Use of gift certificate is required.

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11, Using account when you buy something
-The day of Amazon
-you e-mail address: acountusan@gmail.com
-password:
*Make sure using gift certificate.

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11, Using account when you buy something
-The day of Amazon
-you e-mail address: acountusan@gmail.com
-password:
*Use of gift certificate is required

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"point site using HAPITASU"
-yahoo auction
-yahoo shopping
-rakuten

If you find a good item, you can do through the point site of HAPITASU.
http://hapitas.jp/

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"Using the point site HAPITASU"
-yahoo auction
-yahoo shopping
-rakuten

If you find a good item, you can do through the point site of HAPITASU.
http://hapitas.jp/

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My friends often told me you are really active.
When I was elementary school ,middle school and high school students, I played the baseball and I also studied very hard.
When I started my university, I took part in many volunteering like working as NGO in India or Myanmar. Then I wanted to tell everyone about our activities so I made a poster or movie about that moreover, I held a charity event about introducing our NGO activities in India or Cambodia. And I wanted to be as an exchange students so I studied really hard .
Now, I am working as an intern on one of the bossiness company.
I always challenge up a different thing .

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My friends often told me you were really active.
When I was elementary school ,middle school and high school students, I played the baseball and I also studied very hard.
When I started my university, I took part in many volunteering like working as NGO in India or Myanmar. Then I wanted to tell everyone about our activities so I made a poster or movie about that moreover, I held a charity event about introducing our NGO activities in India or Cambodia. And I wanted to be as an exchange students so I studied really hard .
Now, I am working as an intern on one of the bossiness company.
I always challenge up a different thing .

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I will explain to you about how do I take part in the community and establishment in 3 ways.
The most important things are "study","sport" and "culture"
First, about studying.
I want to share you about how do I study so far.
I am studying about a developing country especially social problem in Asia and woking as an intern in India and Myanmar.
Thought my experience, I want to share my knowledge. Then using Laguage Exchange Program, I wane to teaching Japanese to my friends who study Japanese and I want to learn English.

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As a member of this community, I will explain three areas where I will make a contribution to my other dormitory residents.
The three areas are "studies","sport" and "culture".
First, on studies.
I plan to share whatever knowledge I have learned so far with my fellow residents.
I study social problems in developing countries, especially Asian countries, and I have working experience as an intern in India and Myanmar.
I will share the knowledge I gained through my experience. Then using the Language Exchange Program, I want to teach Japanese to my friends who study Japanese while also learning English.

元の翻訳
Please chose "Additional information" from the subject ,copy the set phrases of "↓" then send an e-mail.

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Please select "Additional information" from the subject, copy the set phrase(s) below, then send the e-mail.

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Our first "CAP" was delivered correctly.
First I would like to say thank you.
We will try to sell "PREFORM" , I would like you to support for us.
Thank you.

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Our first "CAP" was delivered correctly.
First, I would like to say thank you.
We will also try to sell "PREFORM" and hope to receive your support in the future.
Thank you.

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Why the color of this bag change ?
And is it possible to back to the original color ?
And are there any other features ?

Thank you.

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What are the conditions that would make the color of this bag change ?
And is it possible to revert the color to the original color after it is changed?
And are there any other features ?

Thank you.

元の翻訳
Why the color of this bag change ?
And is it possible to back to the original color ?
And are there any other features ?

Thank you.

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Under what conditions would the colour of this bag change ?
And is it possible to get the original color back?
And are there any other features ?

Thank you.