佐々木 純一 (jaysa66) — 付けたレビュー

元の翻訳
There was a damage in goods this time, sorry for troubling you but i need your help.
First i wanna confirm about the condition of the goods, Could i send you the picture about the damage of the goods. Or i would like to send you a refund as your request.
About Insurance claim of this problem, i think i had post office make damage report. Your help in this trouble will save me

修正後
There was a damage in goods this time, sorry for troubling you but I need your support.
First I wanna confirm about the condition of the goods, so could you send me the picture about the damage of the goods? And also I would like to send you a refund upon your request.
About the insurance claim of this problem, I think I may have post office make damage report. Your help in this trouble would save me

元の翻訳
We would like to start make-a-face game as one of our attractions from now.
As our rule, all of you will be divided into three groups. One representative in each group will participate in a game.
Please divide into each group. (They are in grouping)
Please select a representative person. (They are choosing a representative person).
If you decide a representative person, we would like that person go to on stage.
(A representative person is going on a stage)

修正後
We would like to start a "make-a-face" game as one of our attractions from now.
As our rule, all of you will be divided into three groups. One representative in each group will participate in the game.
Please divide into the three groups. (They are in grouping)
Please select a representative person. (They are choosing a representative person).
If you decide a representative person, we would like that person to go up to the stage.
(The representative person is going up to the stage)

元の翻訳
(Facing the representatives to the board and let them touch it) Here is the board.
(Talk to each group) You have one minute.

(Set a time with a timer)

(Passing a bag with the pieces of face parts inside to each representative)
Are you ready?
Let's make nice faces!
Let's start!

(Push a button of the timer)
[The first match]

(Stop the match when the timer rang)
(Take off the blindfold of each representative and ask "Do you like this face" or what they think.

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(Letting the representatives face to the board and let them touch it) Here is the board.
(Talking to each group) You have one minute.

(Pick up the timer and set a time for one minute)

(Passing a bag with the face parts to the representative in front)
Are you ready?
Let's make a nice face!
Let's start!

(Push a button of the timer)
[During the first match]

(Saying "Stop" and let them stop when the timer rang)
(Take off the blindfold of the representative in front and ask their impression like, "Do you like this face" .

元の翻訳
■Order Management System Operating Manual - for Sales Companies

The direction below explains how to login to Order Management System.
First open a browser and access the URL below.

If it is your first time to access the page, you will jump to a certification page as shown on the right.
Please enter the "User name" that we have forwarded to you separately, and press OK.

Then the Login page will open.
Enter the "User ID" that we have forwarded to you separately, and press the "Login" button.

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■Order Management System Operating Manual - for Sales Companies

Log in to the Order Management System.
First open a browser and access the URL below.

When the first time you access the page, a certification page as right image is shown up.
Please enter the "User name" that we have forwarded to you separately, and press "OK".

Then the login page will be opened.
Enter the "User ID" that we have forwarded to you separately, and log in by pressing the "Login" button.

元の翻訳
We receive pretty good evaluation as the companies that are considering using our employment support service for person with disabilities have the same impression.

修正後
We have received pretty good evaluations from the companies who are considering using the employment support services for disabled people, seem to have the same impression.