平 朝子 (dream522) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
Thank you for your order.
I'd like to send a message regarding the items that you have ordered.

Manufacture of one item called Steel book, which is limited to Amazon.co.jp, is delayed. The item can be shipped out at the beginning of October.

Other items can be shipped out quickly.
Is it okay with you that this Steel Book is sent out late?

If you agree, I will make two different shipping.
If you cannot agree, I'm sorry but I have to ask you to cancel the order.
Thank you.

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Thank you for your order.
I am sending you a message regarding the items that you have ordered.

The manufacture of the Amazon.co.jp limited Steel book has been delayed. The item can be shipped by early October.

The other items can be shipped immediately.
Is it okay with you that this Steel Book will delivered at a later time?

If you agree, I will make two separate shippings.
If you do not agree, I'm sorry but I have to ask you to cancel the order.
Thank you.

元の翻訳
Thank you for buying my item. I have checked all your e-mails, but I'm a little confused. Where shall I send the item?
I'm willing to send it to wherever you want me to, however as it is written on the caution, I cannot send it to the address where it is not registered at Paypal.

If you still wishes the item to be sent to the address other than registered at Paypal, then the item will be out of buyers' Protection.

There will not be any additional charge to either America nor France.

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Thank you for your winning bid on my item. I have checked all your e-mails, but I'm a little confused. Where should I send the item?
I'm willing to send it to wherever you like, however, as it is written on the warning, I cannot send it to an address not registered with PayPal.

If you still would like the item to be sent to a non-registered address, then the item will not qualify for Buyers' Protection.

There will be no additional charge to either the US or France.

元の翻訳
As I have just checked, it seems the item has not arrived yet.
In this case, the easiest way is to ask A to cancel the order for this time, and then after that reorder the same item.
If this is understood, I will let you know the order page.

Also, there will be an additional shipping service charge for the returned item. I do not know for sure how much the shipping fee will be yet, however I'm guessing it will be about 20 dollars. Would it be possible for A to pay 10 dollars, which is half the shipping fee?

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I have just checked and it seems the item has not arrived yet.
Given these circumstances, the easiest way is to ask A to cancel the order this time, and then reorder the same item.
If you understand this process, I will let you know the order page.

There will also be an additional shipping service charge for the returned item. I do not know for sure how much it will be yet, but I'm guessing about $20. Would it be possible for A to pay $10, which is half the shipping fee?

元の翻訳
I have made a purchase from you before.
I am Taro Yamada from company XXX.

I am an importer and seller of products.
I mainly handle AAA.
Currently, I'm looking for a partner who will be able to cooperate with me for a long time in the future.

I'd like to hasten to add that I want this item.
2 sets.
http://aaa.com
This product is single, however I'd like six of them as a set.

If you're willing to cooperate with me, will you be able to give me 10 percent discount? I will purchase from you in the future, and hope to have a good business relationship with you for a long time.

Thank you.

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I have previously made a purchase from you.
I am Taro Yamada from company XXX.

I am an importer and seller of products.
I mainly handle AAA.
Currently, I'm looking for a partner who would be willing to do businees long term with me.

To start I'd like the following items.
2 sets.
http://aaa.com
This product is a single item, however, I'd like six of them as a set.

If you're willing to cooperate with me, will you be able to give me a 10 percent discount? I will purchase from you in the future and hope to have a good business relationship with you for a long time.

Thank you.

元の翻訳
Hello.
I have received a negative feedback from the buyer, but the problem has been solved, and the buyer is willing to revise the feedback.

However, I cannot send a request to revise the feed back. (It is over the limitation.)
In such cases, how can I get my feedback changed?
I hope to hear the answer.
Thank you.

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Hello.
I have received a negative feedback from the buyer, but the problem has been solved, and the buyer is willing to revise the feedback.

However, I cannot send a request to revise the feed back. (because of over the limit.)
In such cases, how can I get my feedback changed?
I will appreciate if you reply.
Thank you.

元の翻訳
Thank you for the list.
I'd like the list of ■.
How is the availability of ▲?
I'm hoping to purchase as many as possible.
Thank you.

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Thank you for the list.
I'd like to get the list of ■.
How about the availability of ▲?
I'm hoping to purchase as many as possible.
Thank you.

元の翻訳
ほとんどの美術作品はフレーム付きと記述されていない限りプリントのみでの配達となっております。

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ほとんどの美術作品はフレーム付きと記述されていない限りプリントのみでのご提供となっております。

元の翻訳
In Japan, people wrote signatures and messages on the white part of Japanese national flag, Hinomaru, for the family members who were shipped out to the World War II, to pray for their health. Soldiers carried these flags on the battlefield.

The item which is entered this time is one of the rare flags with illustrations. You can feel something different from other flags with only signatures.

It is pity that Japanese families does not try to keep such a valuable item. I hope someone who will treasure this item as one of his collections will bid for the item.

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In Japan, people wrote signatures and messages on the white part of Japanese national flag, Hinomaru, to pray for the health of their family members who were sent out in World War II. The soliders cleaned and carried the flag with them on the battlefield.

The item that has been kept in the present time is one of the rare flags with illustrations. You can feel something different from the other flags with only signatures.

It is pity that the Japanese families do not try to keep such a valuable item. I hope someone who will treasure this item as one of his/her collections will bid for the item.

元の翻訳
I'd like the items that I ordered, and do not need any different items. If I receive something different from what I ordered, I will return it to you.
I ordered A, B, and C. Which of the three is this e-mail explaining about?
I'd like to know the availability of A, B, and C as well as when they will be sent to me. I plan to cancel my order if there is no stock.
Thank you.

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I'd like the items that I ordered, and do not need any other items. If I receive something different from what I ordered, I will return it to you.
I ordered A, B, and C. Which of the three is this e-mail explaining about?
I'd like to know the availability of A, B, and C as well as when they will be sent to me. I plan to cancel my order if there is no stock.
Thank you.

元の翻訳
イギリス
注文は返品されました。商品をうけとりましたら、いつ全額の返金をしていただけるのかお知らせください。返金可能だといっていただき感謝しています。また、気持ちの良い取引ができ、ありがたく思っています。

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イギリス
注文品を返送いたしました。商品をうけとりましたら、いつ全額の返金をしていただけるのかお知らせください。返金可能だといっていただき感謝しています。また、気持ちの良い取引ができ、ありがたく思っています。

元の翻訳
I'm interested in the following brands of mattresses:
A
B
C
If it is possible to obtain with reasonable price, I'd like to purchase from you. Please e-mail me if you get good items.
Thank you.

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I'm interested in the following brands of mattresses:
A
B
C
If it is possible to obtain at a reasonable price, I'd like to purchase from you. Please e-mail me if you get good items.
Thank you.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your message. I have not received the item yet. Please tell me the track number.

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Thank you for your message. I have not received the item yet. Please tell me the tracking number.

元の翻訳
イギリス
やあ。
今カメラの追跡をしているのですが、まだパーセルフォースのシステムには到着していないみたいです。前回起こった問題の事を考えると、また運送の途中でなくなってしまったのではないかと心配しています。何かこのことについて情報やなどあれば非常に助かります。
よろしくお願いいたします。

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イギリス
こんにちは。
今カメラの追跡しようとしているのですが、まだパーセルフォースのシステム上には到着していないと表示されます。前回起こった問題を考えると、また運送中になくなってしまったのではないかと心配しています。このことについてお助けいただければ非常に助かります。
よろしくお願いいたします。

元の翻訳
We have received your message regarding your items. There is a great possibility that they are lost. We're considering to take care of this problem by full refund or by resending the same items.

What would you like us to do?

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We have received (the report from the delivery company) (your messageではありません） regarding your items. There is a great possibility that they are lost. We're considering to take care of this problem by full refund or by resending the same items.

What would you like us to do?

元の翻訳
Thank you for your reply. I am very honored to be able to enter my works. I have already heard from my friend the other day about the budget cut in Holland and also about Likes Academy. There were some opinions that the situations might be a little better in Japan.

Well, I can send you the movie data that I showed to you at the studio. I will send you some movie clips just to make sure which ones I have already showed to you.

Please take a look at the data, and it will be great if you give me explanation scripts, and tell me how they will be exhibited.

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Thank you for your reply. I am very honored to be able to enter my works. I have already heard from my friend the other day about the budget cut in Holland and also about Likes Academy. There were some opinions that the situations might be a little better in Japan.

Well, I can send you the movie data (大阪がぬけている）that I showed to you at the studio. I will send you some movie clips just to make sure which ones I have already showed to you.

Please take a look at the data, and it will be great if you give me explanation scripts, and tell me how they will be exhibited.

元の翻訳
However, I believe it will be a better idea to clarify artist fee at first. We do not wish for too much of it, but it will be great if we can receive as much fee as you can offer.

Also, I'd like to meet Mr/Ms. M in person, since we have never met.

I really wish that this exhibition be successful since this is based on detailed researches in Japan.

I'm also planning with other residents so that K can make a visit during exhibition period.

I hope to hear from you.

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However, I believe it will be a better idea to clarify artist fee at first (at first は最初は、で firstまず、ではないでしょうか）. We do not wish for　(for 不要では？） too much of it, but it will be great if we can receive as much fee as you can offer.

Also, I'd like to meet Mr/Ms. M in person, since we have never met　(him/herが必要では）

I really wish that this exhibition be successful since this is based on detailed researches in Japan.

I'm also planning with other residents so that K can make a visit during exhibition period. （Ｋというのは人なのか、ある場所なのか？日本語ではわかりませんですね。でも文面からすると場所なのでは））

I hope to hear from you.