devi (devi_reizei_ashikaga1702) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
Miura Taichi is also starting his carrier with a single, “I`m On Fire” that has been nominated in “Best R & B Video”.

He and many other performance and presenter from local and international will join in the music award for the best music video of the year. Don`t miss a full of gorgeous music performance , absolutely must see!

Check this out →http://gyao.yahoo.co.jp/vmaj2014/#top

Miura Taichi “I`m On Fire”

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Miura Taichi [spelling] is also starting his carrier [spelling] with a single “I'm on Fire," which has been nominated in the “Best R & B Video” category.

He and many other performance [wrong noun] and presenter [just one presenter?] from local and international [parts of speech confusion] will join in the music award for the best music video of the year. Don't miss a full of gorgeous music performance, absolutely a must-see event!

Check this out →http://gyao.yahoo.co.jp/vmaj2014/#top

Miura Taichi [spelling] “I'm on Fire”

元の翻訳
On July 24th, in Tokyo Bay cruise ship, six districts Convention Council held a joint workshop. About 60 people, including the executive office's charge of scientific society was attended.

Six districs of Convention Council is developing a lively convention that attract activities by reviving the cooperation of each organizations throughout the year holding an incorporation of workshop and briefing in organization that Sendai Tourism & Convention Association, Niigata Tourism & Convention Association, Matsumoto Tourism & Convention Association, Shiga Prefecture & Biwako Visitors Bureau, Takamatsu Tourism Convention & Bureau, Nagasaki Prefectural Tourism Federation in Nagasaki City, and Sasebo city will be participate.

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On July 24th, in [wrong proposition] Tokyo Bay cruise ship, six districts Convention Council held a joint workshop. About 60 people, including the executive office's charge of scientific society [what does this mean?] was attended [ungrammatical].

Six districs [spelling] of Convention Council is developing a lively convention that attract [subject-verb agreement] activities by reviving the cooperation of each organizations [singular-plural confusion] throughout the year holding an incorporation of workshop and briefing in organization that Sendai Tourism & Convention Association, Niigata Tourism & Convention Association, Matsumoto Tourism & Convention Association, Shiga Prefecture & Biwako Visitors Bureau, Takamatsu Tourism Convention & Bureau, Nagasaki Prefectural Tourism Federation in Nagasaki City, and Sasebo city will be participate [ungrammatical].