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評価: 52 / ネイティブ 日本語 / 1 Review / 2014/10/10 10:27:27
「Cheeky Parade NY TOUR壮行会＆報告会＠アメスタ」放送決定！
Cheeky Paradeがツアー最終公演をニューヨークで行うことを記念して、
アメスタにて特別番組の放送が決定しました！
MCには我が家さんをお招きします！
ツアー最終公演『The 3rd Annual CBGB Music & Film Festival』の紹介や、
出発直前の心境・意気込みをメンバーに直撃するなど、企画満載の30分！
The Broadcasting of "Cheeky Parade TOUR NY a farewell party @AmebaStudio" was decided !
To commemorate that final performance of Parade Cheeky Tour will be held in New York,
it was decided that AmebaStudio would broadcast a special program !
We will invite Wagaya-san as the host.
The program of 30 minutes is packed with a variety of plannings such as the presentation of final performance of the tour "he 3rd Annual CBGB Music & Film Festival" and interview to the members about their emotions and enthusiasm before the departure!
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元の翻訳
The Broadcasting of "Cheeky Parade TOUR NY a farewell party @AmebaStudio" was decided !
To commemorate that final performance of Parade Cheeky Tour will be held in New York, ↵
it was decided that AmebaStudio would broadcast a special program ! ↵
We will invite Wagaya-san as the host.
The program of 30 minutes is packed with a variety of plannings such as the presentation of final performance of the tour "he 3rd Annual CBGB Music & Film Festival" and interview to the members about their emotions and enthusiasm before the departure!
修正後
"Cheeky Parade NY TOUR- Farewell party and reporting event @AmebaStudio" will be on air !
Commemorating their final performance in New York, Cheeky Parade's special program is now scheduled for broadcasting at AmebaStudio! Wagaya will be invited as the MC.
The 30-minute program of is packed with a variety of plannings such as the presentation of final tour performance "The 3rd Annual CBGB Music & Film Festival" and member interviews about their mental state and enthusiasm prior to departure!
ところどころキーワード（Cheeky Parade TOUR NY、Parade Cheeky ）の語順が入れ替わってしまっています。全体的に文章を簡潔にするようになさるとより良くなると思います。
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