[Translation from Japanese to English ] I respect a student at my university who is two years older than me because h...

Original text

私は同じ大学の二つ上の先輩を尊敬している。なぜなら、彼がいると周りの人たちに自然と笑顔が浮かぶからである。彼がいると自然と場が盛り上がる。人を楽しませることができることは非常に素晴らしい。人を楽しませる力は、将来世界で貧困問題や児童労働の解決に携わるときも必要不可欠だと考える。困っている人、暗い気持ちになっている人を少しでも元気づけたいと考えている。彼のように人を楽しませることができる人間になるために、おもしろい人の話し方やジェスチャーを真似して自分なりにアレンジしている。

Translation / English

I respect a student at my university who is two years older than me because he makes others smile when he's around. The place instantly livens up when he's there. I think putting people in a good mood is a really great thing to do. I believe that having the power to make people smile will also be necessary in the future when solving problems such as poverty and child labor. I want to help people who are in difficult situations and people who have lost hope. I am trying to be a person who can entertain people, just like the student I respect, by thinking of my own funny stories and gestures based on what other people say and do.

Translation / English

I feel respect for a person two years above me in my college. That's because, smiles naturally appear on the face of people around him.
When he's around, the place gets exciting by itself. His ability to entertain people is fabulous. I think this power to please people will be indispensable when we are to solve the problems of child labor or poverty in the future.
I would like to cheer up at least a little all the sad people in need. To become a person able to entertain others, like him, I'm trying to imitate the way of talking and gesturing of fun people .

Translation / English

At the university there is a former schoolmate of mine, two years ahead of me, whom I particularly admire. That is because his mere presence is enough to make people around him smile, and no matter where he goes the place becomes upbeat and lively. His ability to make people enjoy themselves is wonderful. I think that the power to make people enjoy themselves will be indispensable to me in the future when I am involved in solving world problems like poverty and child labor. I would like to be able to encourage -- even if just a little -- people who are in difficulty, who are in a gloomy mood. In order to become a person like him who is able to make people happy, I am imitating in my own personal way the speech patterns and gestures of people who are interesting.

[deleted user]- about 10 years ago
これは先ほどの入寮申し込み論文の引き続きなら、”At the university” の変わりに ”At your university” と書いたほうがいいだろう。そうでなければ "At that university" のほうが良いかもしれません。

yusukesatoid- about 10 years ago
ご指摘くださり誠にありがとうございます！