YEH (yeh083) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
2.上個月訂的剝皮馬鈴薯，客人反映有些馬鈴薯未完全剝皮，下次請務必再度確認。客人這次反映良好，謝謝工廠諸位配合

修正後
2.上个月发货的土豆，客人反映有些土豆未完全剝皮，下次请务必仔细检查。客人這次反映还算良好。感谢工厂的诸位的配合。

元の翻訳
Mao confronts TIm with being Taro`s father, but Tim reveals his past and tells them about the Japanese woman that broke his heart. Not Taro`s mother, but an AV-star.
MAO遇到TARO的爸爸-TIM,他告訴她的過去，並且提到以前有位日本女性傷透了他的心。並不是TARO的媽媽，是一位AV女優。
Kano goes to Kako to tell her he loves her and that he will be a better team player in their relationship.
KANO去找KAKO告訴她，他深愛她，在這段關係哩，會表現得比以前更好。
May is angry with Taro for ruining the video. She needs the video for a meeting with a popular brand to get an important contract.
MAY對於TARO破壞影片的事情，感到非常的生氣。她需要拿影片去見熱門品牌客戶，並簽契約。
Mao offers to edit the video. They show the video to the CEO of the brand and they get the contract.
MAO拿出剪輯過的影片。她們拿影片給品牌總裁看，也順利到合約。
May celebrates with a delicious sandwich and is shocked to learn Taro made it.
MAY拿美味三明治一起慶祝，也非常震驚TARO竟然成功了。

修正後
Mao confronts TIm with being Taro`s father, but Tim reveals his past and tells them about the Japanese woman that broke his heart. Not Taro`s mother, but an AV-star.
MAO遇到TARO的爸爸-TIM,他告訴他的過去，並且提到以前有位日本女性傷透了他的心。她並不是TARO的媽媽，而是一位AV女優。
Kano goes to Kako to tell her he loves her and that he will be a better team player in their relationship.
KANO去找KAKO並告訴她，他深愛她，並會在這段關係裏表現得比以前更好。
May is angry with Taro for ruining the video. She needs the video for a meeting with a popular brand to get an important contract.
MAY對於TARO破壞影片的事情，感到非常生氣。她需要拿影片去見熱門品牌的客戶，並簽合同。
Mao offers to edit the video. They show the video to the CEO of the brand and they get the contract.
MAO拿出剪輯過的影片。她們拿影片給品牌的總裁看，也順利簽到合約。
May celebrates with a delicious sandwich and is shocked to learn Taro made it.
MAY以美味三明治慶祝，也非常震驚TARO竟然成功了。