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In Hanmonten, the tour conductor told me “Don’t go behind the soldiers! They’ll think you’ll go into exile.”

Gun,Exile, etc.

On this tour we had such a real chance to hear these unfamiliar words in daily life.

At the beginning, I mentioned “I was not so nervous as I’d expected.”, but if you have an idea to participate in the tour, we believe that you have to feel nervous enough, and please make sure not to bother local tour conductor.

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In Panmunjom, the tour conductor told me “Don’t go behind the soldiers! They’ll think you’ll go into exile.”

Gun,Exile, etc.

On this tour we had such a real chance to hear these unfamiliar words in daily life.

At the beginning, I mentioned “I was not so nervous as I’d expected.”, but if you have an idea to participate in the tour, we believe that you have to feel nervous enough, and please make sure not to bother local tour conductor.

元の翻訳
There were Korean soldiers to check our dress code on our bus, guarding the safety for the bus as well. We were on service of International Cultural Service Club this time and it prepared for some spare clothes in case for those not suited for the dress code.

Then, got to Hanmonten,
I was not so nervous as I’d expected.

However!!

The tour conductor, always talking about the history of South and North in gentle tone, raised its voice at one time.

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There were Korean soldiers to check our dress code on our bus, guarding the safety for the bus as well. We were with the International Cultural Service Club this time and they prepared for us some spare clothes for those not suited for the dress code.

Then, on to Panmunjom,
I was not as nervous as I’d expected.

However!!

The tour conductor, always talking about the history of South and North in gentle tone, did raise his voice once.

元の翻訳
Participated in Hanmonten tour
We’d thought of Hammonten tour plan for a long time. At last we participated in it on 31th Aug Fri, 2013.

So far we always had chance to know North Korea just through the news from TV. This time we actually stepped into the boundary of north and south, seen expressly with my eyes.

You might have a note of caution for clothes to participate in the tour, but now it is not so strict.

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After participated in Hanmonten tour
We’d thought of Hammonten tour's plan for a long time. At last we could participate in it on Friday, 31th Aug 2013.

So far we always had chance to know North Korea just through the news from TV. This time we actually stepped into the boundary between north and south, and could see the boundary expressly with my eyes.

You might see a note of caution for clothes to participate in the tour, but now it is not so strict.

元の翻訳
GOOD

We all five members participated in the tour. The explanation of the conductor was so clear and it was so fun just like we’d heard before. However, it was sorry that we couldn’t get to the bridge unable to get back? as it was on the construction. We’ll participate in the DMZ tour including the tunnel and we want to get there as well.
Meals was kind of little bit bad, well, but it will be OK if you think of meal just as the optional one.

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GOOD

We all five members participated in the tour. The explanation of the conductor was so clear and it was so fun just like we’d heard before. Unfortunately, we couldn’t get to the "Bridge of No Return?" as it was under construction. Next time, we’ll participate in the DMZ tour including the tunnel and we want to get there as well.
Meals were, well, not so good, but it's OK if you think of them just as a bonus.

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Tracking Detail has not been updated for 7 days.
Please contact USP and vendor immediately.

Coupon code PR20 cannot be available due to system error when placing my order.
Please refund ＄10 for 20％ as always.

I understand the payment condition of your company.↵
Is the bank transfer available for payment?↵
Is 4% charge of Paypal not required with the bank transfer?

Then, I will do payment on Paypal.
Please include A on the next order. I hope that the shipping cost is free for it.

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Tracking Detail has not been updated for 7 days.
Please contact USP and the vendor immediately.

I could not use Coupon code PR20 due to the system error when I was placing my order.
Please refund $10 as the 20% as always.

I understand the payment condition of your company, and I can pay through bank remittance. In addition, the 4% charge imposed by PayPal is not applicable, right?

Then, I will make payment through Paypal from now on.
Please include A on the next order, and please waive the shipping charge for the item.

元の翻訳
親切に割引いただきありがとうございます。今後も割引商品を探していきます。ペイパルで支払をして、他に探していた商品で○○に興味がありますが、トップ部分は若干傷があり、ボディ部分はかなりの錆びがあると感じています(ボディの白いものが錆びだとはっきりと見えている状態です。)
前の商品は好きだったので、それと今回の商品を合わせて見積合計250ドルで発送してほしいところです。
お時間ありがとうございました。リンクは下記になります。

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親切に割引いただきありがとうございます。今後も商品を探していきます。先ほどペイパルで支払をしました。また、他に探していた商品があり、○○に興味がありますが、トップ部分に若干傷があり、ボディ部分はかなりの錆びがあると感じています(ボディの白いものが錆びだとはっきりと見えている状態です。)
前の商品は好きだったので、それと今回の商品を合わせて見積合計250ドルで発送してほしいところです。
お時間ありがとうございました。リンクは下記になります。

元の翻訳
12本(フルケース1つ)の注文をしています。ASINコードを受け取りました。この注文で全12本を5/6前に届くように発送してください。注文の総額は113ドルです。↵
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この注文はそれら12個(本)です。ASINの・・・・で出品されている1箱全部ですので、注文の12個を注文書に記載してある5月6日までに、送料を含めた総額113ドルで出荷してください。宜しくお願いします。　ロバート

元の翻訳
12本(フルケース1つ)の注文をしています。ASINコードを受け取りました。この注文で全12本を5/6前に届くように発送してください。注文の総額は113ドルです。

よろしくお願いします。

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修正後
12本(フルケース1つ)の注文をしています。これが商品に記載されたASINコードです。この注文で全12本を5/6前に届くように発送してください。注文の総額は113ドルです。

よろしくお願いします。

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