スミス　マーク Mark Smith (ozsamurai_69) — もらったレビュー

元の翻訳
I have received the goods.
When I was checking them I realized that the doll was missing its balance.
Can I ask you to send the balance as soon as possible please?
Thank you.

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I have received the goods.
When I was checking them I realized that the scale (balance) which the doll is supposed to hold was not enclosed in the package.
Can I ask you to send the balance as soon as possible please?
Thank you.

元の翻訳
I am sorry to cause you inconvenience over the no delivery of your item.
I will investigate, but the tracking number check has finished today at the post office in Japan so I will try again tomorrow.
Sorry again for the trouble, could I ask you to wait till tomorrow please. Thank you.

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I am sorry to cause you [tense confusion] inconvenience over the no delivery of your item.
I will investigate, but the tracking number check has finished today at the post office in Japan [mistranslation] so I will try again tomorrow.
Sorry again for the trouble, [comma splice] could I ask you to wait till tomorrow please. Thank you.

元の翻訳
I am sorry to cause you inconvenience over the no delivery of your item.
I will investigate, but the tracking number check has finished today at the post office in Japan so I will try again tomorrow.
Sorry again for the trouble, could I ask you to wait till tomorrow please. Thank you.

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I am sorry to cause you inconvenience over the non-delivery of the item.
I will investigate, but the service for tracking the product down was finished at the post offices in Japan today, so I will try again and let you know about it tomorrow.
I'm sorry, but could I ask you to wait till tomorrow, please? I appreciate your understanding.

元の翻訳
[Monthly Publication Debut☆]

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[Monthly Debut☆]

元の翻訳
Thank you for your message.
I have understood.
I will inquire once again at the post office to reach a solution.
Thank you.

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Thank you for your message.
Your request is duly acknowledged.
I will inquire once again at the post office.
Thank you.

元の翻訳
I request repair on the following two items.
The material around the ball-ring area is damaged.↵
There has been a hole cut in the tent floor with a cutter.
Please give me an indication of the repair costs.

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I request repair on the following two items.
- Breaks of the sheet around the pole ring.↵
- Breaks caused by cutting the kit bag and the ground sheet.
Please give me an indication of the repair costs.

元の翻訳
I request repair on the following two items.
The material around the ball-ring area is damaged.
There has been a hole cut in the tent floor with a cutter.
Please give me an indication of the repair costs.

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I would like to request a repair on the following two items:
The texture around the pole ring area is damaged.
There has been a rip in the storage bag and the tent floor with a cutter.
Please give me an indication of the repair costs.

元の翻訳
It is possible that your company use the co-working space of our company.
I expect the number of people that can use it would be about 2-3 people.
The co-working space is located in our office.
Address is as follows.

You will need to complete the application, so if you wish to use it please let me know.

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It is possible that your company use the co-working space of our company.
I expect the number of people that can use it would be about 2-3 people.
The co-working space is located in our office.
Address is as follows:

You will need to complete the application. So please let me know before use.

元の翻訳
It is possible that your company use the co-working space of our company.
I expect the number of people that can use it would be about 2-3 people.
The co-working space is located in our office.
Address is as follows.

You will need to complete the application, so if you wish to use it please let me know.

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You can use our co-working space.
We expect about 2-3 people can use it.
The co-working space is located in our office.
Address is as follows.

You will need an application for the space, so if you wish to use it please let us know.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your support Mr. J.
I am Mr. M from O (Pty. Ltd.)

It seems that the contact has not been made.
I think Mr. S has already received a refund.

I must apologize for the mistake on my company's behalf.

If you have any further orders in the future please pass them on to Mr. S.

Thank you.

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Thank you for your support Mr. J.
I am Mr. M from O (Pty. Ltd.)

It seems that I still can't contact them.
I think Mr. S has already issued a refund.

I must apologize for the mistake on my company's behalf.

If you have any further orders in the future please pass them on to Mr. S.

Thank you.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your support Mr. J.
I am Mr. M from O (Pty. Ltd.)
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It seems that the contact has not been made.
I think Mr. S has already received a refund.

I must apologize for the mistake on my company's behalf.

If you have any further orders in the future please pass them on to Mr. S.

Thank you.

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Thank you for your support Mr. J.
I am Mr. M from O.
It seems that the contact has not been made.
I think Mr./Ms. S has already received a refund.

I must apologize for the mistake on my company's behalf.

If you have any further orders in the future please pass them on to Mr./Ms. S.

Thank you.

元の翻訳
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I would like to purchase the above product, if there are any dangerous goods inside the box it will not be permitted to be imported.
Could you please give me full list of the box content. Thank you.

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I would like to purchase the product mentioned above, but I won't be able to import it if there are any dangerous goods is packed inside the box.
Could you please give me a full list of the box content. Thank you.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your inquiry.
The cotton we use is from India and Pakistan and has passed Japanese safety standards, in other words, organic cotton.
Also, there are chemicals used in the dying process, these have also passed Japanese safety standards.

Sorry, but there are no plans at this stage to establish a line of organic products.

Thank you kindly.

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Thank you for your inquiry.
The cotton we use is from India and Pakistan and has passed Japanese safety standards, in other words, not organic cotton.
Also, there are chemicals used in the dying process, these have also passed Japanese safety standards.

Sorry, but we curretly have no plans at this stage to establish a line for organic products.

Thank you kindly.

元の翻訳
I requested a refund be processed 3 months ago, you should have received it,
but as yet I have not received a refund.
What is happening?

1) The goods have been returned to the address you indicated, return the money, Immediately!
2) If it has not been processed, then process it now!
3) Process the refund NOW!
4) [Oh yeah I get it. Wait a bit longer] is what I will get as a reply? REFUND IT NOW!!

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I requested a refund be processed 3 months ago, and you have accepted it,
but as yet I have not received a refund.
What is happening?

1) The goods have been returned to the address you indicated, so refund the money, Immediately!
2) If it has not been processed, then process it now!
3) Process the refund NOW!
4) [Oh yeah I get it. Wait a bit longer] is what I will get as a reply? REFUND IT NOW!!

元の翻訳
Good afternoon.

Do you have stock of this product?

I would like it shipped to Japan.

I await your reply

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Good afternoon.

Do you have this product in stock?

I would like it shipped to Japan.

I await your reply

元の翻訳
Good afternoon.

Do you have stock of this product?

I would like it shipped to Japan.

I await your reply

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Hello,

Do you have stock of this product?

I would like it shipped to Japan.

I await your reply.

元の翻訳
Thank you for your message.
As described in the item description please wait until the period of the 7th -22nd.
In some cases, there is also a possibility the item may take longer depending on custom etc.
Thank you.

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Thank you for your message.
As described in the item description please wait until the period of between the 7th -22nd.
In some cases, there is also a possibility the item may take longer depending on customs inspection, etc.
Thank you.

元の翻訳
The goods have not arrived.
Please return my money immediately.
If it is it refunded within 1 day,
I will formally report this to the credit card company.

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The goods have not arrived.
Please return my money immediately.
If it is it not refunded within 1 day,
I will file a formal report from the credit card company.

元の翻訳
The source is as following. (This is the article was posted in February 2013 on the official blog of ABC)

It is written near the end. They worried over the continued activity but decided to go ahead with is and in the end went over board is what is written.

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The source is as following. (This is the article was posted in February 2013 on the official blog of ABC)

It is written near the end. It is written that they worried over the continued activity but decided to go ahead with it to the end.