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"Inquiry"
Avex Music Creative Inc.
0570-064-414 (Only weekdays 11:00-18:00)

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"For Inquiries"
Avex Music Creative Inc.
0570-064-414 (Weekdays only 11:00-18:00)

元の翻訳
[About the allotment of the premium participation ticket]
*The premium participation ticket will be allotted according to the number of the items bought(one ticket per one item bought).
*The fan with one ticket can once participate the meeting. Ones with more than 2 tickets are required to be in the line once again after the 1st participation in the meeting.
*The items and the premium meeting tickets are limited. Please excuse the allotment of the ticket will be over upon the sold out of the items.
*The event ticket is requisite from the pupil of the elementary school.

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[About the allotment of privileged meeting tickets]
*Privileged meeting tickets will be given out according to the number of products bought (one ticket per product bought).
*With one privileged meeting ticket one can participate once in the privileged meeting. Those having 2 or more privileged meeting tickets, should, after participating once, kindly return to the end of the line.
*The number of products and privileged meeting tickets is limited, so please understand that once the products are sold out or the privileged meeting tickets have all been distributed, [no more will be available.]
*Event participation tickets are required for those of elementary school age and older.

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※ We will distribute the participation ticket of the event (with serial number) at random.
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※ If you do not come at the time you are supposed to come, you have to stand at the end of the line regardless of the serial number. We appreciate your understanding.

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- Participation tickets for the event (with serial numbers) will be distributed randomly.
- Please understand that anyone not present at the meeting time will be placed at the back of the line regardless of his/her serial number.

元の翻訳
" Tresen + (Tresenplus) " Live Show!


FM Yokohama " Tresen + (Tresenplus) " Live Show!

Date: 10th Dec (Wed) 16:00 ~ 20:00
http://www.fmyokohama.co.jp/onair/program/tre-sen_plus

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" Tresen + (Tresenplus) " Live Show!


FM Yokohama " Tresen + (Tresenplus) " Live Show!

Date: Dec 10th (Wed) 16:00 ~ 20:00
http://www.fmyokohama.co.jp/onair/program/tre-sen_plus

元の翻訳
I have sent the picture that you requested to 9999＠999 through email.
However it turned out to be error and therefore failed to deliver.

The "contact us" on the web doesn't allow me to attach files.
Please tell me what can I do.

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I have sent the picture that you requested to 9999＠999 through email.
However it turned out to be error and therefore failed to deliver.

The "contact us" on the web doesn't allow me to attach files.
Please tell me what I can do.

元の翻訳
SKY-HI TOUR 2015 官方網頁優先報名

SKY-HI TOUR 2015 官方網頁優先報名經已開始。
我們期待大家的湧躍報名！

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SKY-HI TOUR 2015 官方網頁優先報名

SKY-HI TOUR 2015 官方網頁優先報名經已開始。
我們期待大家的踴躍報名！

元の翻訳
"Content"
Perfume 50ml / Roll on perfume 10ml / Solid perfume 8g

"Price"
5,000 Japan Yen (Tax excluded)

Inquires:
scentnations Ltd.
info@scentnations.com
03-3780-0825

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"Volume of contents"
Perfume 50ml / Roll-on perfume 10ml / Solid perfume 8g

"Price"
5,000 Japanese yen (before tax)

Inquiries:
scentnations Inc.
info@scentnations.com
(+81) 03-3780-0825

元の翻訳
For details, please visit the site below!
http://special.scentnations.com

We sincerely look forward to your application!

"Release date"
Sale starts from 21st Nov, 2014 on "scent i land" the fragrance shopping site! (With special offers)
※Sequentially shipping start from 15th Dec, 2014

◆LOVE NOTE




◆NUDE NOTE

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For details, please visit the site below!
http://special.scentnations.com

We sincerely look forward to your application!

"Release date"
The sale starts from 21st Nov, 2014 only on "scent i land" the fragrance shopping site! (with a special bonus)
※The delivery starts from 15th Dec, 2014 onward.

◆LOVE NOTE




◆NUDE NOTE

元の翻訳
Entering December, since it will be better to use another credit card for easy cash follow, please use the following credit card to pay instead of the credit card number I sent to you earlier through email.

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When December arrives it is better for my cash flow if I use a different credit card. So instead of the credit card number that I sent you by e-mail the other day, please use the following credit card [number] for payment:

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[收录歌曲]
1. Still Remember
2. Love Is Blind

[价格]
700日圆(含税)

[型号]
AQZ1-76504
AQZ1-76505



[所谓的音乐卡片是??]
收录单曲、专辑音源的不是「CD」而是「卡片型」的商品。
而是购买卡片之后，使用智慧型手机（Android, iPhone）、PC连结至特设网站!
输入卡片背面的礼物序号，就能马上下载到音乐并欣赏的商品喔♪

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[收录歌曲]
1. Still Remember
2. Love Is Blind

[价格]
700日圆(含税)

[型号]
AQZ1-76504
AQZ1-76505



[所谓的音乐卡是??]
不是用“CD”收录单曲、专辑音源，而是卡片型商品。
购卡之后，使用智能手机（Android, iPhone）或PC连结至特设网站!
输入卡背面的礼物序号，就能马上下载到音乐并欣赏喔♪

元の翻訳
Please enter the title.
Please enter the application conditions.

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Please enter the title.
Please enter the eligibility requirements.

元の翻訳
For details, please check the official website of Charming Kiss! ↓
http://chiaki.koji-honpo.co.jp/

Please also check here as we also public lot of news through twitter and our application♪

* Application
(ios:https://itunes.apple.com/jp/app/id668504622?mt=8)
(Android: https://play.google.com/store/apps/details?id=li.yapp.appB09E7B30&hl=ja)

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For details, please check out the official website of Charming Kiss! ↓
http://chiaki.koji-honpo.co.jp/

Please also check here as we also put out information through twitter and our application♪

* Application
(ios:https://itunes.apple.com/jp/app/id668504622?mt=8)
(Android: https://play.google.com/store/apps/details?id=li.yapp.appB09E7B30&hl=ja)