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元の翻訳
I didn't know e-mail was received on the 20th because the computer was broken. I am happy that I received e-mail from you.
Here, we are all doing fine.
My mother somehow overcame this year's extremely hot summer. She coughs sometimes but she doesn't have a fever.
I am also watching the Red Sox games, live on TV here.
Uehara was amazing! I am glad the Red Sox won the title.
Maybe we can meet up together with aunt and all of you next year.
I am happy that I can casually meet with my relative; mother's only sister.
Please say hello to aunt Kazuko.
I look forward for your reply.

修正後
I didn't know I received an email from you on the 20th because the computer was broken. I am happy that you gave me an email .
Here we are all doing fine.
My mother somehow overcame this year's extremely hot summer. She coughs sometimes but she doesn't have a fever.
I am also watching the live Red Sox games on TV here.
Uehara was amazing! I am glad the Red Sox won the title.
Maybe we can meet up together with aunt and all of you next year.
I am happy that I can casually see you as you are my mother's only sister or relative.
Please say hello to aunt Kazuko.
I look forward for your reply.

元の翻訳
MrM is a artist who produce a move which is like a sample of natural light.↵
He is a artist belong to this Mstudio, 此花. He has got a nice tripod the other days. He took this photo with the tripod this time.
Here is his photo.

This is good. This photo is really good although he introspect that he tried effect of animation too hard in the last half.

Let me explain about this event.
The participant take photos, target is 1000s of photo, the whole day.
The participant need to find an object and take a photo each 30seconds.
All participants start this together in the morning, and in the night, they show their photos each other.

修正後
Mr.M is an artist who produces visual representations, which features natural light at M studio in Konohana.↵
He has just got a nice tripod stand the other day, and he took this photo with this new tripod stand this time.
Here is his photo.

This is good. This photo is really good although the author has reviewed that he has much pursued the effects of animation in the last half.

Let me explain about this studio.
They take photos as much as up to 1000 photos whole day, using digital cameras.
The participants take a photo every 30 seconds after finding the objects.
All participants get together in the morning, and after taking photos they will be together again at night to make these photos into visual representations to show each other.