ixampal — 付けたレビュー

元の翻訳
Finally about culture. I love music. I like to listen to the music, and I practice guitar recently.
I would like to introduce Japanese music ranging from traditional one to recent one to those in the dormitory. I also would like to play as a band with friends in the event such as l-Night.

Other than music, I would like to introduce culture of comics and food, and learn culture of other countries actively. I would like to exchange culture with those in the dormitory in the event of food, fair and daily life.

修正後
Finally about culture. I love music. I like to listen to the music, and I practice guitar recently.
I would like to introduce Japanese music ranging from traditional to contemporary to fellow dormitory residents. I would also like to play as a band with friends at the l-Night event or alike.

Other than music, I would like to introduce food as well as comic culture, and actively learn about the culture of other countries. I would like to jouyfully engage in intercultural exchange with fellow dormitory residents both at events such as the Food Fair as well as during daily life.

元の翻訳
Please chose "Additional information" from the subject ,copy the set phrases of "↓" then send an e-mail.

修正後
Please select "Additional information" from the subject, copy the set phrase(s) below, then send the e-mail.

元の翻訳
Our first "CAP" was delivered correctly.
First I would like to say thank you.
We will try to sell "PREFORM" , I would like you to support for us.
Thank you.

修正後
Our first "CAP" was delivered correctly.
First, I would like to say thank you.
We will also try to sell "PREFORM" and hope to receive your support in the future.
Thank you.