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Facebookが活動を開始すると、Zuckerbergは優秀なプログラマーや、そしておそらくさらに重要なことは、資本を手に入れるために活動をSilicon Valleyへ移した。
Silicon Valleyにベンチャー企業が集中していることにより、資本が容易に入手できるだけでなく、「8人の反逆者」のような先人たちの場合のように　技術の溢出を促進するビジネスネットワークと繰り返し行われる製品開発も容易に入手できる。
FacebookはPeter Thielの初期の投資家を集めた。彼の影響と評判によりFacebookの可能性が確認され、さらに資本を入手できた。もう一人のFacebookの発明者であるAccel VenturesはFacebook COO のSheryl Sandbergを獲得する重要な役割を果たした。

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Facebookが活動を開始すると、Zuckerberg氏は優秀なプログラマーを手に入れるため、また、おそらくさらに重要なことは、資本を手に入れるために活動をSilicon Valleyへ移した。
Silicon Valleyにベンチャー企業が集中していることにより、資本が容易に入手できるだけでなく、「8人の反逆者」のような先人たちの場合のように　技術の溢出を促進するビジネスネットワークと繰り返し行われる製品開発も容易に入手できる。
FacebookはPeter Thiel氏から、初期の投資家を得た。そして、彼の影響と評判によりFacebookの可能性が確認され、さらに資本を入手できた。もう一人のFacebookの発明者であるAccel Ventures氏はFacebook COO のSheryl Sandberg氏を獲得する重要な役割を果たした。

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ユーザレビュー、プロファイル、社内の個人のメッセージシステムを取り込むことにより、買い手と売り手はより効率的に合致することができる。しかも潜在的な顧客/アパートのオーナーについての広範囲な下調べと努力をすることなしに。このため、AirBnBの成功はソーシャル・ネットワーキングと密接に関わっており、Facebookのスタイルの個人プロファイルとEbayスタイルの支持率という２つの影響を強く利用している。　この意味で、AirBnBはそのビジネス・モデルだけでなく実践においても反復的であった。

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ユーザレビュー、プロファイル、社内の個人のメッセージシステムを取り込むことにより、買い手と売り手はより効率的に合致することができる。しかも潜在的な顧客/アパートのオーナーについての広範囲な下調べと努力をすることなしに。このため、AirBnBの成功はソーシャル・ネットワーキングと密接に関わっており、Facebookのスタイルの個人プロフィールとEbayスタイルの支持率という２つの影響を強く利用している。　この意味で、AirBnBはそのビジネス・モデルだけでなく実践においても反復的であった。

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※ Participation tickets for commemorative photo session is valid only for a specified period of time on the day.
※ It is strictly prohibited that act of shooting and recordings of sounds and pictures of the artists performing in the time other than when the staff allowed.
※ There is a limit of number of each privilege for accepting reservations and sales of CDs on the day. Please note that privilege will end as soon as it run out.
※ I will accept only cash for payment. Please note we can not accept payment by credit card.
※ When you book a target product, please pay the total amount in advance.

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※ Participation tickets for commemorative photo session are valid only for a specified period of time on the day.
※ It is strictly prohibited that taking photos, recording sounds, and videotaping while the artists are performing, excluding the period when the staff will inform you.
※ The number of each privilege, pre-ordering, or selling CDs on the day will be limited. Please note that the shop will be closed as soon as they run out.
※ We will accept only cash for the payment. Please note we can not accept the payment method by the credit card.
※ If you book the product, you will have to pay the total amount in advance.

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※ Please check at a CD spot sale booth in each venue concerning how to receive the products which you booked (pick up at a store and/or delivery and so on)
※ When you wanted delivery by shipping, we ask you shipping charge in addition to the product price.
※ Please note that we don’t make any refund of the product which had booked. I will exchange defective with non-defective product.
※ When you attend the commemorative photo session accompany along with three years old children, participation tickets for them are required separately.
※ We ask you don’t do act such as staying in the venue because it will disturb the neighbors.↵

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※ As for the way of receiving the reserved item, which is to pick up at a store or to be delivered or so on, please consult a clark at a CD sale booth in each venue.
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※ If you chose the delivery, we will ask you shipping charge in addition to the product price.
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※ Please note that we don’t make any refund of the product booked, though we will exchange a defective with a non-defective product.
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※ If you attend the commemorative photo session accompany along with a child or more who are three or older, an additional participation ticket for each child will be required.
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※ We kindly ask you all not to stay in the venue over night because it will be a nuisance to the neighbors.

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If we find overnight act, there may be a case where the live is cancelled.
※ Travel expenses and accommodation expenses on the day should be paid by the customer.
※ We will cancel the live when we determine that the live can’t be performed due to unforced reasons such as equipment failure in the venue, a natural disaster, and traffic strike.
※ If by reason of force majeure or natural disaster equipment failure, strike and transportation of the venue, it is determined to be unenforceable live, we will cancel the live.
※ Please note that there is a possibility that the live content changes depending on the situation of the members.

Contact:
Avex Marketing Inc.
0120-85-0095 (11:00 to 18:00 weekdays only) ↵

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If we find people lining up overnight, we might cancel the live concert.
※ In this case, travel and accommodation expenses will be on the individual customers.
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※ We will cancel the live concert if we deemed that it can’t be performed due to an unforced reason such as equipment failure in the venue, a natural disaster, or a traffic strike.

※ Please note that there is a possibility that the live content will be changed depending on the situation of the members.

Contact:
Avex Marketing Inc.
0120-85-0095 (11:00 to 18:00 weekdays only)

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"I want to tell you the joy of music by singing and dancing!"
The five some girls group of dance and vocal consisting of Ayano Konishi, Miyu Yamabe, HItomi Arai, Yuri Nakae, and Mei Shoji was formed in January 1, 2010. Their goal is to grow up in a group to play an active role all over Asia as well as in Japan by having much experience. .
They started from regular live concert with a pace of twice a month. They are mainly performing live performance and carried out the first JAPAN TOUR in May in 2011. They released their first album.↵

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"We want to tell you the joy of music by singing and dancing!"
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The dancing and vocal group of five girls, who are Ayano Konishi, Miyu Yamabe, HItomi Arai, Yuri Nakae, and Mei Shoji, was formed on January 1, 2010. Their goal is to expand their performance area from Japan to all over in Asia throughout a lot of experiences.
They started with a regular live concert held twice a month. They are mainly doing live concerts. Their first live tour called 1st JAPAN TOUR was carried out on May in 2011 as they released their first album.

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Concerning the continuation privilege:
We will give you the continuation privilege in the venue which is usually sent by mail after continuation.
※ We will give you a continuation privilege "Projector Lights", If persons whose expiration date is the end of March of 2014 continue registration.
※ We will give you a continuation privilege "double charm key ring", If persons whose expiration date is after April of 2014 continue registration.↵

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【privilege for continuation 】
We will offer you privilege for continuation in the venue, which is usually sent by mail after continuation.
※ We will offer you a privilege for continuation,"projector lights", if your expire date is the end of March of 2014 and registers to continue.
※ We will g offer you a privilege for continuation, "double charm key ring", if your expire date is after April 1 of 2014 and registers to continue.

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Please let us know your membership number at the registration.
※The acceptance of the comeback is applied for persons who withdrew from B course within three years
※If you wish to continue the registration, in addition, we will give you "one out of the five species of can badge in a random manner”.
※If you introduce your friends in the venue, we will give you "one out of the five species of can badge in a random manner” per one person introduced.
※Persons can also join even if they does not have the live ticket on the day.↵

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Please let us know your membership number at the registration.
※The acceptance of the comeback is applied for those who withdrew from B course within three years
※If you are register at the spot, we will offer you another pin that will be randomly chosen out of the five kinds.
※If you introduce your friends at the venue, we will give you another pin that will be randomly chosen out of the five kinds per one person introduced.
※People who don't have the live concert ticket also can join the event.

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I was up a video to YOUTUBE how to assemble the handle of Fender BASS VI.
This is the specifications that it will fall out without being fixed if you direct it downward since the handle is just inserted into the hole,
There is no problem and not a defective product because it is made like this.
First, we need to check the photo.
Could you send a few enlarged photographs of the part to put the handle of your BASS VI?
We are going to send a photo to Fender to confirm.↵
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I was up [parts of speech confusion] a video to YOUTUBE how to assemble the handle of Fender BASS VI.
This is the specifications [subject-verb agreement] that it will fall out without being fixed if you direct it downward since the handle is just inserted into the hole,
There is no problem and [subject?] not a defective product because it is made like this.
First, we need to check the photo [which photo?].
Could you send a few enlarged photographs of the part to put the handle of your BASS VI?
We are going to send the photos to Fender to confirm.

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Could you attach documents to be the certificate that the goods are shipped to the warehouse to e-mail
How many days after goods come in stock can I pick them up?
Does it take the same 2weeks as this time until next good come in stock after payment?
Shoes in agency in Osaka, the products, have come in this time.
I wonder when products which have not come in will be completed.
Is it possible to produce in May at the latest?↵

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Could you please attach any documents to be the certificate that the goods are already shipped to a warehouse?
After goods come in stock, when can I pick them up?
Does it take the same two weeks as this time until next good come in stock after payment?
Shoes in agency in Osaka, the products, have come in this time.
I wonder when products which have not come in will be completed.
Would it be possible for you to produce them in May at the latest?

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Thank you for your inquiry.
I tried to contact the manufacturer, but you will not be able to change the contents of the three-piece set because they are fixed.
If you would like A, you may have to order B and C and set them.
If you agree with cost of xxx dollars including postage, we will send you by bundling three.
I attach the image of B and C.
B (110mm in diameter and 220mm in height)
C (18.5 cm in width, 15cm in depth, 5 cm in height)
I appreciate it if you consider it.
Thanks in advance.

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Thank you for your inquiry.
I contacted the manufacturer, and I was told we can't change the contents of the three-piece set because they are fixed.
If you would like A, you have to order B and C separately to make a set.
If you agree with xxx dollars including shipping, we will send you the three in the same package.
I have attached images of B and C.
B (110mm in diameter and 220mm in height)
C (18.5 cm in width, 15cm in depth, 5 cm in height)
I would appreciate it if you could consider it.
Thank you in advance.

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Thank you for rough explanation on the illustration.
I appreciate that you requested my most favorite picture of cloth.
I will send along with the rough profile when it is completed.
It will be nest week of a week after next, but I wonder if it is a problem for you.
Heisuke is my old friend and I hear about detail of Sara from Heisuke who speaks English fluently.
I saw the illustrations of the first series. ↵
I look forward to completion.
I will do my best.
Thanks in advance.

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Thank you for your explanation on the rough draft of the illustration.
I am very happy for your request of a illustration of my favorite fabric.
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Once the rough is finished, I will send it along with the profile.
Is it okay if I send it to you sometime next week or the week after? ↵

Heisuke is an old friend of mine and he told me details about Sara, since he speaks fluent English.
I was also shown the first series of the illustrations and I look forward to the finished pieces.
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I will do my best. ↵

Thanks in advance.

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私達はPDXを止めることができなかった。 LAXのタイルは60年代以来で、これらのソックスはその色の大胆な配色方法に対する敬意です。

注：これらは3足で１セットです。例えばスモールサイズを注文すると、青、オレンジ、グリーンのLAXソックスを1足ずつ受け取ります。

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私達はPDXを止めることができませんでした。 LAXのタイルは60年代以来で、これらのソックスはその色の大胆な配色方法に対する敬意です。

注：これらは3足で１セットです。例えばスモールサイズを注文すると、青、オレンジ、グリーンのLAXソックスを1足ずつ受け取ります。

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AME6234

教えてくれてありがとう。しかし私はIMをアマゾンで行なおうと思います。牛を購入しようとしてきたのはこれで三回目ですが、彼らはキャンセルしています。

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AME6234

教えてくれてありがとう。しかし私はアマゾンとの取引は止めようと思います。牛の購入を試みたのは今回で三回目ですが、またキャンセルされました。

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AME6234

教えてくれてありがとう。しかし私はIMをアマゾンで行なおうと思います。牛を購入しようとしてきたのはこれで三回目ですが、彼らはキャンセルしています。

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AME6234

教えてくれてありがとう。しかしアマゾンでは取り引きしないと思います。牛を購入しようとしてきたのはこれで三回目ですが、彼らはキャンセルしています。

元の翻訳
■ I do not use the SAL because there is a case of lose.
Because we want to delivery safely to the customer, we do not do delivery without tracking number.
Please accept it.

■ The consumer electronics products are compatible with voltage of Japan. You may need plug or transformer.
We are selling a transformer.

■ Please understand that only Japanese language manual may be available.
Please feel free to contact me if there is something you do not understand.

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■ I do not use the SAL because there are cases of loss.
Because I want to deliver safely to the customer, I do not make deliveries without tracking number.
Please kindly understand it.

■ The consumer electronics products are compatible with voltage of Japan. You may need plug or transformer for some cases.
I am selling transformers.

■ Please understand that only Japanese language manual may be available.
Please feel free to contact me if there is something you do not understand.

元の翻訳
1. 今日フェデックスが土曜日までにプレンティウッドに時計を輸送するように　あなたは、輸入業者として活動するために米国で誰かを見つけます。↵
速達のための追加料金はあなたが支払います。これに代わる方法はあなたが整理し、それをカナダに送ってもあらうすべての費用を負担することです。

2. あなたは私に7200$を返金することができます。私はまだ非常にミーガンのための時計を購入したいと思いますが、それはより効率的に成される必要があります。

私はアマゾンに連絡しましたが、オンラインには否定的なフィードバックはありません。あなたから満足のいく解決を聞かない場合、明日、すべての可能な手段で否定的なフィードバックを残します。

あなたのフィードバックはこれまでのところ非常に肯定的であることがわかります。私はあなたがこの権利を行使することを願っています

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1. 例えばFEDEXは土曜日までにPlentywoodに時計を配送してくれるように、今日あなたが輸入業者として活動するためには、米国で相手の業者を見つけることです。追加の送料はあなたが支払うことになります。これに代わる別の方法としては、あなたが手配をしてカナダまでの全ての送料を負担することです。

2. あなたは私に7200ドルを返金することができます。私は今でもMeganの時計を購入したいと非常に思うのですが、もっと効率的に処理を行う必要があります。

私はアマゾンと連絡を取りましたが、オンライン上に否定的なフィードバックはありません。明日、あなたから連絡がなくて満足のいく解決を得られない場合には、あらゆる可能な手段で非常に否定的なフィードバックを残し始めるつもりです。

あなたのフィードバックはこれまでのところ非常に肯定的ですね。私はあなたがうまくやることを願っています。