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FM Nagasaki "KEMURI presents Noise for the Radio" blog of radio program has started!

The blog of the radio program that is KEMURI's first regular program "KEMURI presents Noise for the Radio" began on Saturday, April 4 in FM Nagasaki has opened.

http://www.fmnagasaki.co.jp/program/noise/

This program links to the application forms such as a message and a request to the program, so please check these out!

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FM Nagasaki "KEMURI presents Noise for the Radio" has started blogging!

KEMURI's first regular program "KEMURI presents Noise for the Radio," which began on Saturday, April 4 on FM Nagasaki, has opened its blog:

http://www.fmnagasaki.co.jp/program/noise/

This program has links to application forms to send messages and requests to the program, so please check these out!

元の翻訳
FM Nagasaki "KEMURI presents Noise for the Radio" blog of radio program has started!

The blog of the radio program that is KEMURI's first regular program "KEMURI presents Noise for the Radio" began on Saturday, April 4 in FM Nagasaki has opened.

http://www.fmnagasaki.co.jp/program/noise/

This program links to the application forms such as a message and a request to the program, so please check these out!

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FM Nagasaki "KEMURI presents Noise for the Radio" blog of radio program has started!

The blog of the radio program that is KEMURI's first regular program "KEMURI presents Noise for the Radio" began on Saturday, April 4 (Sat.) in FM Nagasaki has opened.

http://www.fmnagasaki.co.jp/program/noise/

This program links to the application forms such as a message and a request to the program, so please check these out!

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Thank you for contacting with me.
I sent it out without any problems.
I hope the item will be delivered by 9th, and take a lot of wonderful pictures!

2.Have you already got the item?
I checked tracking and it seems that your item has not been delivered since 18th, being kept by a mover or the post office.

Sorry for your inconvenience, but please do an inquiry with the tracking number if you have not received it yet.

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Thank you for contacting me.
I sent it out without any problems.
I hope the item will be delivered to you by the 9th. ↵
Enjoy taking a lot of wonderful pictures!

2.Have you already received the item?
I have checked its tracking record, and it seems that your item has been held by a mover or the post office since the 18th.

Sorry for the inconvenience, but please contact the mover or the post office to check the status if you have not received the item. ↵

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I sent a baggage quickly after I was dismissed from the hospital.
It is supposed to be arrived in 19th.

I apologize to you and I will discount the price of purchased amount by 20%.
Could you please deposit $36?

I will send an invoice from paypal.

Thank you.

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I sent your order quickly after I was discharged from the hospital.
It is supposed to arrive on the 19th.

I apologize to you and I will give you a 20% discount off the purchase amount.
Could you please pay $36?

I will send an invoice via paypal.

Thank you.

元の翻訳
I sent a baggage quickly after I was dismissed from the hospital.
It is supposed to be arrived in 19th.

I apologize to you and I will discount the price of purchased amount by 20%.
Could you please deposit $36?

I will send an invoice from paypal.

Thank you.

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I sent a baggage quickly right after I was discharged from the hospital.
It is supposed to be arrived in 19th.

I apologize to you and I will make a discount the price of purchased amount by 20%.
Could you please do payment of $36?

I will send an invoice from paypal.

Thank you.

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There are some unreceived products that I ordered.
I would like to refund the price for merchandise that it is not sent to me.

below is the unreceived merchandise,
order number: pop
product name: xxx
quantity: a
product name: yyy
quantity: b

I am looking forward to hearing from you,

your name

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There are some unreceived products that I ordered.
I would like to have refund for the price of merchandise that is not delivered to me.

below is the unreceived merchandise,
order number: pop
product name: xxx
quantity: a
product name: yyy
quantity: b

I am looking forward to hearing from you,

your name