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元の翻訳
A cold frost made windows thick with the ice crystals. "I guess," I said that, although it looks like a home, it has some deadly story connected to it ― that it is the clew that guides one in the solution of some mystery and the punishment of some crime. Only one of those small incidents will happen when you have four million human beings all pushing each other within the space of a few square miles. Amid the action and reaction of such dense people, every possible event might be thought to take place and a little problem will be presented like being criminal.

修正後
A cold frost made windows thick with the ice crystals. "I guess," I said that, although it looks like a home, it has some deadly story connected to it ― that it is the clew that guides one in the solution of some mystery and the punishment of some crimes. Only one of those small incidents will happen when you have four million human beings all pushing each other within the space of a few square miles. Amid the action and reaction of such dense people, every possible event might be thought to take place and a little problem will be presented like being criminal.

元の翻訳
Sorry for the late reply.
My URL of the Amazon site is xxxx.

About Q'ty and MOQ, I want 10 MOQ and 20 Q'ty .
Please give me an estimate accordingly.
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In addition, as you are looking for a distributor,
Is it all right for me to register at your site in Japan and sell goods of your company?
Xxxx is scheduled for your site.

I appreciate your consideration.

修正後
Sorry for the late reply.
My Amazon site's URL is xxxx.

About Q'ty and MOQ, I want 10 MOQ and 20 Q'ty .
Please give me an estimate accordingly.

In addition, as you are looking for a distributor,
Is it all right for me to register at your site in Japan and sell goods of your company?
Xxxx is scheduled for your site.

I appreciate your consideration.