A. (antimony_sb7) — 付けたレビュー

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I've just finished my job.

Thank you for telling me a lot about Taiwan.
I'm glad to get much information like price or caution of sightseeing place, which I cannot get from guidebook. It really helped me.
And next, I wanna visit Singapore and am looking forward to it.

When you come to Tokyo or Kanagawa, I'll tell you every thing I know about it. Feel free to ask me!

By the way, by your profile, you seem to like Manga and Anime. What Manga or Anime do you like?
Nowadays, ..., etc. are popular in Japan.

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I've just finished my work.

Thank you for telling me a lot about Taiwan.
I'm glad to get much information like price ranges or warnings of sightseeing places, which I cannot get from a guidebook. It really helped me.
And next, I wanna visit Singapore and am looking forward to it.

When you come to Tokyo or Kanagawa, I'll tell you every thing I know about it. Feel free to ask me!

By the way, by your profile, you seem to like Manga and Anime. What Manga or Anime do you like?
Nowadays, ..., etc. are popular in Japan.

元の翻訳
I finshed paying about the order you ordered today, so please check.
I would like to get product soon, so please send it in rapid.
Best regards

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I've paid the invoice for the order placed today, so please check and confirm for me.
I need it sooner rather than later, so please send it via expedited mail.
Best regards,

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I found that 1item among the items pruchased from you has a defect, so I would like to return it to you. Could you accept it?↵
As shipping charge is high, I send by sea. For this reason, there was 2 month absence and I apologize to you.

Details of the item with defect
The color of left and right of the shoe(heel) is different. I did not find a problem at the items of other size, but the right shoe by US8.5 is yellow. I have not worn it yet, and its condition has not been changed since it had been delivered to me.

I will pay for shipping charge from Japan, and I request that you pay the price of the item when I purchased and the shipping charge.
Please let me know address to which I return it.

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An item I've purchased from your company seems to be defective and I'd like to exchange it, if at all possible.↵
Air mail from here would be expensive so I will have it sent by standard (sea) mail. It's estimated to take at least two months to reach you, so I apologize for the delay.

Details of the defective item:
The color of left and right of the shoe (heel) is different. I did not find a problem with the other sized items, but the heel of the right shoe is yellowed with age. I have not worn it yet, so it's in the same condition as when it was shipped.

I will pay for shipping from Japan, and I request that you refund me the price of the item as well as the shipping charge you applied when I purchased it.
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Please let me know the address to which I can return it.

元の翻訳
As you point out, Google Analytics cannot measure properly.
Probably the below analytical tool would work properly, and it's free of charge.
*Since I am not from an English speaking areas, I use the same product in th different language version.

My thoughts for the measurement is that the dwell time of IE and smart phone users are extremely short.
IE I guess is due to the bug as mentioned previously.

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As you pointed out, Google Analytics cannot measure properly.
The analytical tool I linked below would most likely work properly, and it's free of charge.
*Since English is not my native language, I use the same product in a different language.

My initial thoughts for the measurement is that the dwell time of IE and smart phone users are extremely short.
IE I guess is due to the bug I mentioned previously.