翻訳者レビュー ( 日本語 → 英語 )

備考: 体験談の翻訳です

日本語

<貴重な体験>

映画マニアの息子の希望で親子で参加しました。
わたしの韓国旅行はいつもエンターテイメントが中心です。今回もダンスが素晴らしい「サチュム」を楽しみにしていたので実はあまり乗り気ではありませんでした。
当日は宿泊ホテルから集合場所のロッテホテルまで送迎付きでしたのでかなり助かりました。まず戦争記念館に行きました。威風堂々とした立派な建物で、映像など見ごたえがあるものでした。たくさん見たい場所があるにも関らず見学時間が短いのもは少し残念でした。昼食のプルコギは最高でした。

英語

<Precious Experience>
As my movie buff son desired, I participated in the tour with him. My trip to Korea is always for entertainment. This time, I was looking forward to “Sachoom”, whose dance is magnificent so that I was reluctant to join in fact.
On the day, we were taken from our hotel to the meeting place Lotte Hotel, which was pretty helpful. First, we visited the war memorial museum. The buildings were majestic and stately, including videos worth watching. Though there were a lot of place to see, the time of visit was limited so I felt a little unsatisfied. The lunch, bulgogi couldn’t have been better.

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marikayamadaはこの翻訳結果を"★★★"と評価しました 2014/05/06 02:56:42

元の翻訳
<Precious Experience>
As my movie buff son desired, I participated in the tour with him. My trip to Korea is always for entertainment. This time, I was looking forward to “Sachoom”, whose dance is magnificent so that I was reluctant to join in fact.
On the day, we were taken from our hotel to the meeting place Lotte Hotel, which was pretty helpful. First, we visited the war memorial museum. The buildings were majestic and stately, including videos worth watching. Though there were a lot of place to see, the time of visit was limited so I felt a little unsatisfied. The lunch, bulgogi couldn’t have been better. ↵

修正後
<Precious Experience>
As my movie buff son desired, I participated in the tour with him. My trip to Korea is always for entertainments. This time, I was looking forward to watching “Sachoom”, whose dance is magnificent, so I was reluctant to join the tour in fact.
On that day, the courtesy bus took us to the meeting place Lotte Hotel from our hotel, so it was pretty helpful. First, we visited the war memorial museum. The buildings were majestic and stately, and screened images were worth a watch. I was a little unsatisfied becouse we only have short time to look around even though there were a lot of places to see. The lunch, bulgogi couldn’t have been better.

全体的に分かりやすくまとめられています。
日本文にとらわれすぎずに、主語を入れ替えた方がより伝わりやすくなる箇所があると思いました。