翻訳者レビュー ( 日本語 → 英語 )

日本語

こんにちは

私は、日本に住んでいます。
本日、商品を受け取りました。

商品説明に新品、未使用、未開封と記載されていましたが、
箱の中は痛みが有り、電気コードを固定している針金は外されていました。

この商品は、未開封品では有りません。

贈り物として使う予定でしたが、この状態では渡すことができません。

返品の対応、または30％（＄39）の一部返金してください。
（アメリカに送り返すには、手間とお金が掛かります。）

連絡が無い場合、paypalに直接、相談します。

宜しくお願いします。

英語

Hello,

I live in Japan. I received the item today.

Although the product description said it was new, unused and unpacked, the item inside the box was damaged and the wire that is supposed to fix the power code was removed. This is not unpacked at all.

I expected to use it for a gift, but I cannot give this to someone.

I demand you either to accept return or 30% ($39) of partial refund. (I need extra time and money for just returning it to the U.S.)

If I will not hear from you, I will report to PayPal.

Thank you for your help.

レビュー ( 1 )

mars16はこの翻訳結果を"★★★★"と評価しました 2013/08/24 09:41:13

元の翻訳
Hello,

I live in Japan. I received the item today.

Although the product description said it was new, unused and unpacked, the item inside the box was damaged and the wire that is supposed to fix the power code was removed. This is not unpacked at all.

I expected to use it for a gift, but I cannot give this to someone.

I demand you either to accept return or 30% ($39) of partial refund. (I need extra time and money for just returning it to the U.S.)

If I will not hear from you, I will report to PayPal.

Thank you for your help.

修正後
Hello,

I live in Japan. I received the item today.

Although the product description said it was new, unused and unpacked, the item inside the box was damaged and the wire that is supposed to fix the power code was removed. ↵
↵
This is not unpacked at all.

I expected to use it for a gift, but I cannot give this to someone.

I demand you either to accept return or 30% ($39) of partial refund. (I need extra time and money for just returning it to the U.S.)

If I will not hear from you, I will report to PayPal.

Thank you for your help.

[14pon]

Thanks

[14pon]

You know what? When I wrote my translation by sentence, sentence, sentence, just as the original text did, a native English speaker told me not to do so and that I should put them into paragraphs. And when I do so, then, a Japanese points out it is WRONG!. What should I do then?
It almost makes me say: hey, will you guys please leave me alone for that? Now it's almost a personal taste whether you write sentence, sentence, sentence or paragraphs. Does it matter that much?

And what else with the translation was wrong?