翻訳者レビュー ( 日本語 → 英語 )

評価: 56 / 1 Review / 2013/07/15 12:16:17

takapitan
takapitan 56 英検1級、TOEIC990点です。 タガログ語の翻訳もできます。
日本語

通関で止められていた荷物は無事届きました。協力ありがとう。

ところで、最近送料が徐々に上がっているのですがなぜでしょうか?
例えば以下です。

英語

The package which was stuck at the customs has now arrived. Thank you for your cooperation.

By the way, why are the shipping charges getting increased?
Listed below are some of the examples.

レビュー ( 1 )

tokyomanly 66 Professional editor and sometimes tra...
tokyomanlyはこの翻訳結果を"★★★"と評価しました 2013/07/15 23:32:05

元の翻訳
The package which was stuck at the customs has now arrived. Thank you for your cooperation.

By the way, why are the shipping charges getting increased?
Listed below are some of the examples.

修正後
The package that was held up in customs has now arrived. Thank you for your understanding and cooperation.

By the way, why are the shipping charges gradually increasing?
Listed below are some of the examples.

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takapitan takapitan 2013/07/15 23:43:01

There's no word "understanding" here.

tokyomanly tokyomanly 2013/07/15 23:49:43

You're right, but good translations are not 直訳、they use natural phrases, and "thank you for your cooperation" is unnatural and rather cold, thus it is basically not used in English correspondence.

takapitan takapitan 2013/07/15 23:54:10

I don't agree with the latter part of your message. I've read the very expression thousands of times in real business situations.

takapitan takapitan 2013/07/16 00:03:03

I've filed a complaint to Conyac about your review. Thank you.

tokyomanly tokyomanly 2013/07/16 00:07:16

For the record, I don't consider it a mistake, I am just adding an improvement. However, "stuck at the customs" is a mistake, and "gradually increasing" is a more accurate translation of 徐々に上がっている。All the best with your complaint.

takapitan takapitan 2013/07/16 00:11:27

So you're getting even with me, right? Not sticking to the rating standard.

tokyomanly tokyomanly 2013/07/16 00:12:51

There are some mistakes, but I can read it. Sounds accurate.

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