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日本語

もし我々がBUG A SALTを30個購入し、paypalで支払った場合、フロリダまでの送料を含めた合計金額はいくらになりますか？

また、あなたはBUG A SALT以外に卸売りできる商品を持っていますか？
我々はあなたがどんな商品を卸売りできるのか知りたいです。

お返事お待ちしています。

英語

How much is a total amount if we purchace 30 pieces of BUG A SALT including the shipping charge to Florida paying via PayPal?

In addition, do you have any other item exceot BAG A SALT which can be wholesale?
I would like to know what item could you offer us with wholesale price?

We are looking forward to your reply

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takeshikmはこの翻訳結果を"★★★★"と評価しました 2013/06/06 22:06:49

元の翻訳
How much is a total amount if we purchace 30 pieces of BUG A SALT including the shipping charge to Florida paying via PayPal?

In addition, do you have any other item exceot BAG A SALT which can be wholesale?
I would like to know what item could you offer us with wholesale price?

We are looking forward to your reply

修正後
How much is a total amount including the shipping charge to Florida if we purchace 30 pieces of BUG A SALT paying via PayPal?↵
-> 文節の順序ですが、 including the shipping charge to Floridaは、この様にamountの後の方が分かり易い様に思いました。

In addition, do you have any other item exceot BAG A SALT which can be wholesale?↵
-> exceptのスペルミス、↵
順序は、↵
1. Do you have any other item(s) , which can be wholesale, in addition to BAG A SALT?↵
(in addition to を besidesに代えても可)↵
2. Other than BAG A SALT, do you have any other item(s) that can be wholesale?↵
という順序が読みやすいです。↵

I would like to know what item could you offer us with wholesale price?

We are looking forward to your reply

ミススペルは避けられるミスなので、気を付けましょう。読みやすさを考えて順序を工夫するとよりよくなると思います。

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ありがとうございます。早速取り込み次回から順序を考えながら訳してゆきます。