翻訳者レビュー ( 日本語 → 英語 )

備考: ミチモール→MiCHi MALL

日本語

日本の女の子はキャラクターネイルも好きです。
今日は「パンダネイル」ができる工程を動画で紹介します。

前に、STAFF　BLOGで紹介しましたが、
日本人のキャラクターネイルはクオリティーが高い。


そして、ミチモールのキャラクターネイルは
レベルが高い！

詳細はこちら→

英語

Japanese girls love to wear character nails!
Today, I'd like to show you how to make "Panda nails" in a video.

As I mentioned in STAFF BLOG before,
Japanese character nails are in a high quality.

Among them, the character nails selling at Mini mall
are especially awesome!

Wanna see more details? Here→

レビュー ( 1 )

tokyomanlyはこの翻訳結果を"★★★"と評価しました 2013/07/08 18:05:54

元の翻訳
Japanese girls love to wear character nails!
Today, I'd like to show you how to make "Panda nails" in a video.

As I mentioned in STAFF BLOG before, ↵
Japanese character nails are in a high quality.

Among them, the character nails selling at Mini mall ↵
are especially awesome!

Wanna see more details? Here→

修正後
Japanese girls love to wear character nails.
Today, I'd like to show you a video on how to make "panda nails."

As I mentioned in STAFF BLOG before, Japanese character nails are of high quality.

Among them, the character nails selling at Mini mall are especially great!

Go here to see more details →

[[削除済みユーザ]]

Thanks for your review, but there are some points I can't understand.

1. Why is the exclamation mark not allowed there?
2. show you how to make "Panda nails" in a video. = show you a video on how to make "panda nails."
3. in a high quality = of high quality
4. In the context above, "awesome" fits better than "great".

[[削除済みユーザ]]

It would be appreciated if you kidly answer my questions. Thank you.

[tokyomanly]

1. Exclamation marks are a matter of choice, but the Japanese generally overuse them. Professional writing seldom uses them. Moreover, seeking that the original had no exclamation there's no reason to introduce one here.
2. "Panda" doesn't need to be capitalized. Actually it is not showing "how to make panda nails in a video", it is showing you a video on how to make panda nails.
3. You don't use "a" before "high quality".
4. "Awesome" is too casual and colloquial for this writing and "especially awesome" is overkill.

[[削除済みユーザ]]

Thank you for your kind answer.

1. Totally understood. Thanks.
2. I see about the "panda" as it is not a proper noun there. However, you can still say "show how to do something" in a video. If you wonder, refer to google.
3. I think your opinion is better as mine was too casual. Thanks.
4. In my sense, "great" is too plain. Girls barely say "great" about their fashion. Instead, they use "awesome", "gorgeous" or "cool".

Anyway, thank you once more for having your precious time. Your opinion will be of great help for me.