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Japanese

「Music Factory」

12/12（金）六本木Mercedes-Benz Connectionで、行われたクリスマスパーティーの模様がオンエア！

日時：12/13(土)17:00～17:54

http://www.j-wave.co.jp/original/musicfactory/2014/12/post-98.html

English

"Music Factory"
The Christmas party that was held in Roppongi Mercedes-Benz Connection on December 12th (Friday) is on the air.

Day and time: From 5 o'clock to 5: 54 in the evening on December 13th (Saturday)
http://www.j-wave.co.jp/original/musicfactory/2014/12/post-98.html

Reviews ( 1 )

hitomi-kumai rated this translation result as ★★★ 15 Dec 2014 at 19:06

original
"Music Factory"
The Christmas party that was held in Roppongi Mercedes-Benz Connection on December 12th (Friday) is on the air.

Day and time: From 5 o'clock to 5: 54 in the evening on December 13th (Saturday)
http://www.j-wave.co.jp/original/musicfactory/2014/12/post-98.html

corrected
"Music Factory"
The Christmas party that was held in Roppongi Mercedes-Benz Connection on December 12th (Friday) is on air.

Date and time: From 5 o'clock to 5: 54 in the evening on December 13th (Saturday)
http://www.j-wave.co.jp/original/musicfactory/2014/12/post-98.html

that wasの部分も削除して、すっきりした文にできると思います。From 5 o'clock to 5: 54 も原文のまま17:00-17:54にすれば、in the evening も省けて、告知文らしくなると思います。