Translator Reviews ( Japanese → English )

Japanese

あなたは私のeBayでの初めてのお客さんです。感謝を込めて、プレゼントを同封します。気に入ってくれたら嬉しいです。探しものがあったらいつでも連絡下さい！その時は、写真を添付してくれたら探しやすいです。これからも宜しくお願いします。

English

You are my first eBay customer.
I will send you a present to express my appreciation.
I hope you like it.

If you look for other items, feel free to ask me.
Please attach pictures when you do so.

Best regards,

Reviews ( 2 )

russ87 rated this translation result as ★★★ 08 Feb 2014 at 16:58

original
You are my first eBay customer.
I will send you a present to express my appreciation.
I hope you like it.

If you look for other items, feel free to ask me.
Please attach pictures when you do so.

Best regards,

corrected
You are my first eBay customer.
I will send you a present to express my appreciation.
I hope you like it.

If you are looking for other items, feel free to ask me anytime.
Please attach pictures when you do so to make them easier to find.

Best regards,

Some small mistakes but otherwise not bad

linne0213 rated this translation result as ★★★★ 12 Mar 2014 at 14:44

original
You are my first eBay customer.
I will send you a present to express my appreciation.
I hope you like it.

If you look for other items, feel free to ask me.
Please attach pictures when you do so.

Best regards,

corrected
You are my first eBay customer.
Enclosed is a present to express my appreciation.
I hope you'll like it.

When you look for any other items, feel free to contact me.
Please attach pictures when you do so to make it easier for me to find them.

Best regards,

時制がやや惜しいと思います。
I will sendというと、今ではない別のとき（未来）に送る感じがしますが、送る行為自体はこの文章を書いているときと同時ですので、現在形でOKです。
今回は、同封とありますので、enclosed としました。"Enclosed is a ～"などは、文法的には少々特殊ですが、よくつかわれる表現です。
逆に、"hope you like it" は、この文章を書いている時点の未来（相手はまだ受け取っていない）なので、未来形にしました。