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#abit
I have placed an order earlier, but was very disappointed to hear the item was sold out.
Please issue the refund as I have already settled the payment.

Please do let me know once you have the item in stock again.

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#abit
I have placed an order earlier, but was very disappointed to hear the item was sold out.
Please issue the refund as I have already settled the payment via PayPal.

Please do let me know once you have the item in stock again.

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Thank you very much for proceeding with the “Salba Chia Bar” promotion. The analysis report for the nutrition ingredients came out: Energy 181.2kcal, protein 2.68g, fat 7.88g, sugar 23.64g, fibre 2.52g, and natrium 14.8mg per piece. This is a perfect product for a high protein food that covers calories worth 2 bananas. Here in Japan, we enter the production date on the display label. Please set the expiration date a year from the date of production at your end. We keep our fingers for your big hit.

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Thank you very much for proceeding with the “Salba Chia Bar” promotion. The analysis report for the nutrition ingredients came out: Energy 181.2kcal, protein 2.68g, fat 7.88g, sugar 23.64g, fibre 2.52g, and natrium 14.8mg per piece. This is a perfect product for a high protein food that covers calories worth 2 bananas. Here in Japan, we enter the production date on the display label. Please set the expiration date a year from the date of production at your end. We keep our fingers crossed for your big hit.

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Changing future museums
This technology is employed for sales and marketing promotions, but further development in areas other than advertisement could be an opportunity. During the interview, President Shin from the seller company responded, "In a situation where a research instutuition holds a presentation, we have them incorporated to go along with the guidance by adding the electronic array in the model.", and seems to have started practicing the use beyond the boundary of advertisement.
He futher added his future outlook as "If they could incorporate this technology with those glasses at the museum exhibitions, they could offer guidance in other languages than those limited, as well as through the video. It will change the future of the museums."

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Changing the future of museums
This technology is adopted for sales and marketing promotions, but further development in other areas could be an opportunity besides advertisement areas. During the interview, President Shin from the seller company responded, "In a situation where a research institution holds a presentation, we have them incorporated to go along with the guidance by adding the electronic array in the model.", and seems to have started practicing the use beyond the boundary of advertisement.
He futher added his future outlook as "If they could incorporate this technology with those glasses at the museum exhibitions, they could offer guidance in other languages than those limited, as well as through the video. It will change the future of the museums."

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* Minimum participants: 20 people
* Retirement rate: 20%
* The capacity of respective support vehicles for retirees are specified in ( ) brackets.
* Snack (drink, fruit, light meal, etc.) is optional (JPY500- )
* Rental motorcycle is optional
* Planning/Administration plan is available for the selection of one course only↵
* Includes tour guide fee only (lunch fee is excluded and optional)

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* Minimum number of participants: 20
* Estimated dropout rate: 20%
* Support car passenger capacity: Allowable capacity of dropout riding on a car is indicated in the brackets “( )” at the side of respective support cars.
* Fueling or nutrition and hydration: The nutrition and hydration (beverages, fruits, light meals etc.) as the fueling can be provided with separate charge starting at minimum charge of JPY500.
* Motorcycle: Rental motorcycle can be provided with separate charge.
* Fees: Planning and administration fees applied are only for single specific course.↵
*Guiding fee: The price only includes the guiding fee (lunch price is separately charged).↵

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Do not use it to clothing (with lengthy and hairy ones) that could be damaged with the glue and/or luxury clothing.
Remove slowly lest it should not be damaged.

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Do not use it to garments (thick furry ones) that could be damaged with adhesives and/or luxurious garments.
Slowly peel it off as not to damage the garment.

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I have ordered a wrong item, so I would like to cancel it.

However since it is already shipped, there is no way I could cancel the order.
Could you please cancel before the item is delivered to the specified address?
In other words, I would like you to stop the delivery at your end.

I can provide you the below address:
Order #: yyyyyyy
Tracking #: xxxxxxxxxx

Thank you and best regards,

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I have ordered the item by mistake so I would like to cancel it.

However, since it has already been shipped, there is no way I could cancel the order.
Could you please make the cancellation before the item is delivered to the specified address?
In other words, I would like you to stop the delivery from your end.

I can provide you the following information:
Order #: yyyyyyy
Tracking #: xxxxxxxxxx

Thank you and best regards,

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Dear La Siesta,

Thank you for your service as ever.

I would like to order CSL21-6, and was wondering when it would be in stock?
Your prompt reply would be much appreciated as my customer is awaiting my response. Best regards,

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Dear La Siesta,

Thank you for your service as ever.

I would like to order CSL21-6, and was wondering when it would be in stock.
Your prompt reply would be much appreciated as my customer is awaiting my response. Best regards,

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なぜ商品が届かないのかがわかりません。私の娘はコスチュームパーティー用に注文したこの商品を受け取っていないからです。でも彼女はまだそれをほしいといっています。どのように梱包されたのですか？

○これは業務用の住所で私宛に届くパッケージは全て彼らが受け取ってくれます。
確認してみます。ＵＳＰＳからはまだ不在伝票が届いていないようです。たいてい2回目の配送で（その伝票を）置いていくようなので。
一度配達に伺いましたがという但し書きもありませんでした。

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あなたのライフスタイルを変えてみようとする上でいい決断をされたと思いますよ！湿疹に関するレポートについて耳にしたことがあります。その症状を治療するのに有効な自然薬の名前を挙げていました。調べてお伝えしますね！

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なぜ商品が届かないのかがわかりません。私の娘はコスチュームパーティー用に注文したこの商品を受け取っていないのですよ。それでも彼女はまだそれをほしいといっています。どのような梱包だったのですか？

○これは業務用の住所で私宛に届くパッケージは全て彼らが受け取ってくれます。
確認してみます。ＵＳＰＳからはまだ不在伝票が届いていないようです。たいてい2回目の配送で（その伝票を）置いていくようなので。
一度配達に伺いましたがという但し書きもありませんでした。

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あなたのライフスタイルを変えてみようとする上でいい決断をされたと思いますよ！excemaに関するレポートについて耳にしたことがあります。その症状を治療するのに有効な自然薬の名前を挙げていました。調べてお伝えしますね！

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Rewards
The organization is to pay 40% of the monthly gross margin as a consideration for the advisory service by the end of the following month.

Providing know-hows on stocking merchandises.
The advisor is to provide appropriate advice to the organization as to which item to stock for how many quantities.

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Rewards
The company shall pay 40% of the monthly gross margin as a reward for the advisory service by the end of the following month.

Providing know-hows on stocking merchandises.
The adviser shall provide appropriate advice to the company as to which item to stock for how many quantities.