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Thank you for your message.
We are very sorry.
We have shipped a new product due to a possibility that the product itself may have lost.

We are very sorry for the inconvenient we have caused you.

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Thank you for your message.
We are very sorry.
We have shipped a new product due to a possibility that the product itself may have been lost.

We sincerely apologize for the inconvenience we have caused you.

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Date: Sunday, August 17, 2014
Open: 15:00 / Start: 16:00
Place of Event: The Second Gymnasium of Yoyogi National Gymnasium
Performers: CHE'NELLE(USA), CHOTOKKYU(Japan), DAICHI MURAI(Japan), REI YASUDA(Japan),THELMA AOYAMA(Japan), and more...
*Alphabetical order

■Ticket Fee
All Seat Reserved / Y 7,500(Tax Included)

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Date: Sunday, August 17, 2014
Open: 15:00 / Start: 16:00
Place of Event: No. 1 National Yoyogi Stadium, Tokyo
Performers: CHE'NELLE(USA), CHOTOKKYU(Japan), DAICHI MURAI(Japan), REI YASUDA(Japan),THELMA AOYAMA(Japan), and more...
*Alphabetical order

■Ticket Fee
All Seats Reserved / 7,500 JPY (Tax Included)

元の翻訳
Turn your glass case into display!

After we introduce a notion of digital signage to you, we will go to a new technique which will graduate from using liquid crystal displays as a monitor.

This technique uses a transparent glass showcase as a display device with touch-panel function, and enables us to show movies or pictures on it.

This kind of showcase has been already adopted in Korea, and transformed drink sales stores in retails into advertisement area.

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Turn your glass case into a display!

After we introduce the notion of digital signage to you, we will go to a new technique which is the next step forward from using liquid crystal displays as monitors.

This technique uses a transparent glass showcase as a display device with touch-panel function, and enables us to show movies or pictures on it.

This kind of showcase has been already adopted in Korea, and has transformed the glass on refrigerated beverage cases in retail shops into advertising space.

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リクエストを早速拝見いたしました。ご不都合をお掛けしてしまい、大変申し訳ございません。

弊社のパフォーマンス・チームと協議の結果、もう一度ご購入手続きをしていただく次第となりました。お客様の方で商品を既定の適正価格より安値で販売してしまったため、アクションプランが制限されているのがその理由でございます。

そのため、手続きをもう一度お試しになっていただけますでしょうか。下記のリンクより、どのようにアクションプランが行われるかについて、より詳しくご覧いただけます。

アクションプランが完了した後、パフォーマンス課の者に、下記のメールアドレス宛てに直接送信して頂きますよう、よろしくお願い致します。

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リクエストを早速拝見いたしました。ご不都合をお掛けしてしまい、大変申し訳ございません。

弊社のパフォーマンス・チームと協議の結果、再度行動計画をご用意していただく次第となりました。貴店が商品を既定の適正価格より安値で販売してしまったため、販売が制限されているのがその理由でございます。

再度、嘆願手続きを行っていただけますでしょうか。下記のリンクより、行動計画の作成方法を含めた詳細についてご覧いただけます。: (***URL***)

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行動計画が完了した後、パフォーマンス部門の者に、下記のメールアドレス宛てに直接送信して頂きますよう、よろしくお願い致します。

元の翻訳
Purchase on TSUTAYA ONLINE and products received at SHIBUYA TSUTAYA are out of our support.
Purchasing CD at the event area will not gain any bargain nor T points.

<To participate in the event>
Purchase any of products below for the event on June 17 (TUE) when the products are stocked at store, and you will be given a numbered ticket for the event.
Please bring the numbered ticket and two handshake participation right tickets with yourself. Handshake participation right tickets are included in the first edition CD.

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Purchase on TSUTAYA ONLINE and products received at SHIBUYA TSUTAYA are excluded for our support.
Please understand that, purchasing CD at the event area will not subject to the various discounts or T points.

<To participate in the event>
Purchase any of products below for the event from June 17 (TUE) at store, and a numbered ticket for the event will be issued.
Please bring the numbered ticket and two handshake participation right tickets in the limited edition CD with yourself.

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Our organizer, event area, and performers do not take any responsibility of incidents, robbery and damages to property inside and outside of the event area. Please protect your valuable belongings on your own.
We may refuse your entry to the event area once we found you are inappropriate at the event.
We do not accept any complaint of your being photographed or filmed by our official photographers at the event area.

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*The organizers, the event venue, and the performers do not take any responsibility for accidents, robberies, and damages to property inside and outside of the event area. Please protect your own valuables.
*We may refuse your entry to the event area once we found that you are inappropriate at the event.
*We will not accept any complaint of your being photographed or filmed by cameras at the event area.

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"Together" Sale Anniversary ~ Thanksgiving Event ( Kanto Area)

Thanks a lot for always supporting us!!
Cheeky Parade members will appear each music shop, and show you our gratitude!

<<Content of Event>>
Handshake event of each group at store

<< Place, Members and Date of Event>>
■Kanto Area 1
Place: HMV Lumine Est Shinjuku
Members: Asami Watanabe, Seran Mizorogi, Marine Yamamoto, and Hina Nagai
(We are sorry that there has been a member change since we announced on June 12. We appreciate your understanding.)

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"Together" Sale Launch ~ Thanksgiving Event ( Kanto Area)

To all fans, thank you so much for always supporting us!!
Members will appear at CD shop at each location, and show you our gratitude directly!

<<Content of Event>>
Handshake event of each group at store

<< Store Location, Members and Time of Event>>
■Kanto Area 1
Place: HMV Luminest Shinjuku
Members: Asami Watanabe, Seran Mizorogi, Marine Yamamoto, and Hina Nagai
(We are sorry that there has been a member change since we announced on June 12. We appreciate your understanding.)

元の翻訳
Thank you for your message.

Of course I will pay for the product once I receive it. However, I have not received anything yet for now, and I request a refund.

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Thank you for your message.

Of course I will pay for the product once I receive it. However, I have not received anything yet for now, so I request a refund.

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It will be perfect if you enjoy the event!
I would like to thank you with an autographed book of ○, but have you ever heard of ○?

My eczema is not getting better, but recently I have shifted myself to organic food and clothes.
And I had to leave one of my jobs to release myself from work stresses. It isn't easy financially, but there was nothing else I could.

I have surely ordered the 3 titles of DVD, They will be in your hand surely, so please don't be worried about it. I wish you could watch these movies as soon as possible.

○ is quite popular here in Japan, too.
Will any copy of the separated volume be on sale at Japan Expo in France?

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It will be perfect if you enjoy the event!
I would like to thank you with an autographed book of ○, but have you ever heard of ○?

My skin rash is not getting better, but recently I have shifted myself to organic food and clothes.
And I had to leave one of my jobs to free myself from work stresses. It isn't easy financially, but there was nothing else I could do.

I have surely ordered the 3 DVDs from X, They will be in your hand surely, so please don't worry. I want you to watch these movies as soon as possible.

○ is quite popular here in Japan, too.
Will any copy of the separated volume be on sale at Japan Expo in France?

元の翻訳
I made a purchase on your website on March 25, 2014, but my purchase status shows "void" while my credit card has been transacted.

What does this mean?

Therefore, I would like you to make a refund of 135, 65 $ or send me the product again.

Please contact me as soon as possible.

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I made a purchase on your website on March 25, 2014, but my purchase status shows "void" while my credit card has been transacted.

What does this mean?

Therefore, I would like you to issue me a refund of $135.65 or send me the product again.

Please contact me as soon as possible.

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I made a purchase on your website on March 25, 2014, but my purchase status shows "void" while my credit card has been transacted.

What does this mean?↵
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Therefore, I would like you to make a refund of 135, 65 $ or send me the product again.

Please contact me as soon as possible.

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I made a purchase on your website on March 25, 2014, but my purchase status shows "void" even though the amount has been deducted from my credit card.

Please provide me with an explanation. I would also like you to make a refund of $135.65 or send me the product again.

Please contact me as soon as possible.