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元の翻訳
Hello, I am very pleased with the good item I could bought. I would be very happy if you send it as soon as possible. ANd could you inform me Tracking number?

Best regards
Thank you.

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Hello, I am very pleased with the good item I could buy. I would be very happy if you send it as soon as possible. And could you inform me the Tracking number?

Best regards
Thank you.

元の翻訳
I'm very happy that I won such a wonderful C/S. I would prefer to have it shipped via USPS express international. Would it be possible? If yes, please send me the invoice, and I will pay you at once.↵
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I would appreciate your consideration.↵
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Thank you.↵

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I am happy to win a wonderful C/S. Could you please ship it through the express mail international of USPS? If possible, please send an invoice. I will make the payment immediately. I request you to consider my request and oblige.

元の翻訳
I accept your condition.

However, I would like to ask a favor of you.
Currently, the other seller is selling ●●.
In order to achieve 7,000 pieces of sale annually, I need to sell 600 pieces monthly but it is hard to achieve this target since the other shop is also selling the same product or I must wait until they will have sold out.

Therefore, could you cut the supply to the other shop immediately?

In addition, there is seller at eBay also selling ●● but intended to Japanese customers. Would you have any idea to shield them from Japanese market?

I am thinking that I start selling ●● after the other seller will have sold them out.

Do you think it is possible?

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I accept your condition.

However, I would like to ask for a favor from you.
Currently, there are other sellers selling __.
They have to sell out their stock, for me to sell 600 pieces approximately per month and thereby achieve the sales of 7,000 pieces per year.

So, could you please stop supplying to the other sellers in Japan immediately?

In addition, there are auctioneers who sell __ at eBay to Japanese sellers. Could you please stop them from selling to the customers in Japan?

I am planning to start selling __ in Japan, after the other sellers sell them out completely.

Could you please agree to this?